Writing an Introduction - [Answered]

[wingzofdarkness]

Hello fellow forum-mates,

I recently started creating my first visual novel game, but I'm doing everything myself. It is a lot of work and I have made a lot of progress within the past few days. However, the most difficult part in writing a story is the beginning/introduction. This is the place where you want to instantly pull your readers in and gain their interest.

There are several games that start out with a black screen and text that you have to click through. However, I do not wish to do that with my game.

My opening scene is during the 19th century college setting. I want the players to be able to write their name sometime during the beginning of the prologue because she is suppose to receive a letter. I don't want to write, "What's your name?" or something like that. It takes away the professional feel of the game.

Does anyone have any ideas and/or alternative beginnings?

Thanks in advance!
~wingz

[Sapphi]

Is it an acceptance letter to a college? You could have the player fill out an "application".

[wingzofdarkness]

Is it an acceptance letter to a college? You could have the player fill out an "application".

No, the character is already in college, in America. She receives a letter from her family to return home (London) for her sister's birthday.

[redcat]

Not sure about the 19th century postal system, but if it's a registered letter, you can let the postman ask her to write her name and signature on the receipt.

[wingzofdarkness]

Not sure about the 19th century postal system, but if it's a registered letter, you can let the postman ask her to write her name and signature on the receipt.

Oh! A brilliant idea! Thank you so much! =D

[redcat]

^ you're welcome


*now I'm kinda curious about the story itself...

[clannadman]

I'm not an expert on the 19th century university system but would this girl even be attending higher education? Not to try and poke holes in your story, but perhaps changing the location to a Finishing School - that is a place where one learns the etiquette of a lady - would make more sense within the given context. Feel free to disregard this since it is your story and you can allow as much creative freedom as you please

[wingzofdarkness]

*now I'm kinda curious about the story itself...

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I'm not an expert on the 19th century university system but would this girl even be attending higher education? Not to try and poke holes in your story, but perhaps changing the location to a Finishing School - that is a place where one learns the etiquette of a lady - would make more sense within the given context. Feel free to disregard this since it is your story and you can allow as much creative freedom as you please

Excellent note, clannadman. Fortunately, I already researched and did background check on the 19th century. Females did attend college, rarely though. This female lead is one of those rare women who does attend. Thanks for pointing it out.