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Posted: Fri Aug 22, 2008 2:27 pm
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Hint 2: Don't listen to me, instead head over to college and take Creative Writing.Pandora's Cat wrote: --white
Do you have any idea what it's like, living in a sealed box, not knowing when you're going to die, but simply that it will happen?
Living in a box with a flask of poison is unsettling. What kind of poison is it? What will it do to me? Is there a way to keep it away from me?
--black
but not anymore
--white/white/grey
Who put me in here? Do any of the other cats remember me? Can I escape?
--black/black/grey
death is not so bad, after all
--white/grey/grey
Why am I so calm? What is this feeling?
--black/grey/grey
but is this really death?
--grey
I am Schrödinger. Nice to meet myself.
--fade to lab
center "Happy Birthday!"
Pandora "Thank you, everyone."
Athena "We got you a present."
Pandora "Oh, what a nice box. I wonder what's in it..."
--fade to box
And Pandora opened the box. What was in the box?
A cat.
But as with all accidental discoveries, this was no ordinary cat, and this was no ordinary present, and this was no ordinary birthday, and this was no ordinary person, and these were no ordinary coworkers. Did Isaac Newton feel the same way when he met his first apple? Pandora imagined so.
People would always ask her, "How did a cat, of all things, influence your work?" And she would always laugh, knowing that they would never understand.
When disaster struck, people would ask her "Do you ever wish you hadn't met your Schrödinger?" instead. And she would always laugh, knowing they would never understand. Science was a mixed bag, completely independent of such trivial things like PR.
Derailing the topic slightly, but I wouldn't call this a hard-and-fast rule by any means, actually. Sure, it makes sense for most character-driven stories, but they're far from the only kind of story. A strategic-war story, for example, doesn't really need characters that much at all; it can be told in terms of troop movements and battles and so on. You might find it a good idea to come up with consistent detail for your troop movements and battles instead, but still, it's not absolutely necessary. You can bring a tear to the eye of most Englishmen by recounting the tale of the Battle of Britain, but frankly that doesn't need any characters or really any detail at all.N0UGHTS wrote: ...Basically, you should ask questions about specific details. You don't have to work on every minutiae (the specific mood stabilizers the niece uses XD), but you have to fill in the details. You have to develop the characters.
Seriously, we get the idea, you don't like Eragon. But equally seriously, a lot of people did, it got some pretty good reviews, bearing in mind it's a kid's book.N0UGHTS wrote: :coughEragoncoughcough:
That doesn't sound like a police officer? Well, if you're not thinking about dress uniform, I guess... Oh, and some poice officer uniforms are black and some of they do include caps. I guess it depends if you live in Palm Springs or somewhere colder... Compare Los Angeles uniforms to those from New York... Yeah...Oh, someone actually here (other than myself... And she offered me money, it was a bet! I won't say how much money I got, though...) has actually played it? Wow, my experiment actually yielded results. And no, that's not how I really think. (;-_-) I like maids better XD She makes me do the weirdest things for money... She probably wants to see me spiral into madness XDDusty wrote:@N0UGHTS: That doesn't sound like a police officer, and I feel ashamed for thinking about the game I just thought about when I read what you posted as I shouldn't be able to know about that game and that particular character you seemed to refer to disturbed me immensely. trauma trauma trauma. I don't want to remember it so I'm being vague to avoid causing images to resurface
This is showing:Bill is very happy today. I wonder what happened to him?
They both convey the same message, but the second one gives us a more colourful picture about Bill. This is particularly true if we want to portray someone much more accurately and give him/her more life.Bill was whistling all the way to school today for some reason. He has that stupid grin plastered onto his face the entire time as well. I wonder what happened to him?