Torn Apart: The Con of a Blade [Mystery][Fantasy][VN]

[EriksBlue]

The concept demo can be found here: http://rpgmaker.net/games/3580/
The Elevator Pitch

In the wake of great tragedy, people always ask why.
Why did I fall sick?
Why couldn't she love me?
Why did they have to die?
I can tell you.
You were hurt so that you could have the power to hurt others in turn.

Step into the angry soul of Roy Puleiveivari, a vigilante reeling from his best friend's murder. In order to cope, he fixates on revenge, but will a pact with powers better left alone cost him everything he holds dear?


Too Long, Didn't Read

This a fantasy murder mystery.

And by that, I mean it's like Dexter by way of Weeds, re-skinned as a VN and wearing a JRPG as a hat.

Features:
- More than 7+ endings.
- No conventional game-overs.
- Character epilogues depending on who you choose to interact with. Put together, they tell a complete story.


But What Does It Look Like?
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Current Progress:
As of 3-29-2012, we have...

The game contains 2,670 screens of dialogue.
These screens contain a total of 26,364 words,
for an average of 9.9 words per screen.
The game contains 17 menus.

The full script currently lives as a 97 page word document, and has officially moved from the rough draft phase to the editing phase.

So, What Do You Want Me To Do?

We're looking for feedback.

See a game element you like? Maybe there's something about the interface that bugs you? Did you catch a typo we could fix? Drop us a line.

We'd love it if people were excited for this project, so if there's anything we can do to make it better, let us know.

Feel Free to Share Your Thoughts

Please, comments and critiques are very warmly welcomed. Enjoy!

[gekiganwing]

I'm not entirely sure what the phrase "the con of a blade" means. Are you using 'con' as in deception, as in disadvantage, or something else?

You said that your main character "...fixates on revenge, but will a pact with powers better left alone cost him everything he holds dear?" If he's making a contract with supernatural evil, then that rarely leads to a happy ending. Furthermore, stories about revenge often have bleak endings. Still, it's your game... and you can create whatever paths and options you feel are appropriate.

[EriksBlue]

I'm not entirely sure what the phrase "the con of a blade" means. Are you using 'con' as in deception, as in disadvantage, or something else?

You said that your main character "...fixates on revenge, but will a pact with powers better left alone cost him everything he holds dear?" If he's making a contract with supernatural evil, then that rarely leads to a happy ending. Furthermore, stories about revenge often have bleak endings. Still, it's your game... and you can create whatever paths and options you feel are appropriate.

Con refers to deception.

There can be bleak endings but it can also have a some what happy ending, but there are multiple endings.

[Starshine]

wow you drew all your own backrounds, i've seen everyones works on here and they seem to do the same.
I'm just using the ready made ones, me & backrounds dont mix :0

[EriksBlue]

wow you drew all your own backrounds, i've seen everyones works on here and they seem to do the same.
I'm just using the ready made ones, me & backrounds dont mix :0

I can understand that backgrounds are a pain in the butt, if you have trouble seeing a piece of paper in 3-d, which I do.

[♥BlackRainbow08♥]

Hmm.. it's looks interesting!
I will be looking forward to it, Well Good Luck with this