Love at the Laundromat [GxB][Romance, Comedy, Drama] DEMO UP

[DestinyFailsUs]

I absolutely loved what I've played in the demo so far! I was so excited.

I did come across some errors though, so I figured I'd let you know about them...
On Spring 21, I tried to go to the laundromat, but an error message appeared stating "rosalineFinished" was undefined. In the hobby shop, I had bought the sketchbook a few days earlier, then when I bought the telephone the icons for the cutting board and the book messed up (I'm currently hovering over the second icon, which was supposed to be the book). When I talked to Nicholas, I believe this was after I bought the sketchbook but before I bought anything else, this happened. I also caught a mistake in Eli's fail dialog. I hope I helped at least a little bit by find these ^^;

Overall, I really really enjoyed it and I'm looking forward to the finished game!

[distorsion]

Um, do you think you could put the link for the download on the first page? I'm having trouble finding it...

[Aurélie]

Focusing on helping you out with glitches and mistakes here, because I'm not A-OK with reviewing the plot or the romances until the final product! (Also because my beloved Soleil isn't available yet, ahahaha ~ )

• There's a grammar mistake when Miles takes Sol's laundry order; Miles says "you can trust her with you order." It should be "your order".
• When I talk to Joan, an error message in red comes up at the top of the screen saying something about not being able to find the value "joan". I can take a screenshot if needed. I'm still able to talk to her without a problem, though.
• I talked to the nurse whose name I've totally forgotten, and Lynnette failed to understand her lady tips. I got another error message in red text up the top saying that the nurse's value couldn't understand the parameter "lose". I can also screenshot this if needed, I'm just going off memory here.
• When I chose to watch marionette theatre, the frisbee animation played.

Nitpicky things:

• I don't know where this is based or where Lynnette studied, but when she says calling her boss by his first name is weird like "calling a professor by their first name", that was a bit jarring? My friend who is currently attending university in the USA is always asked to call her professors by their first names, or even nicknames.
• Referencing Sol's lion belt is funny, but you can't actually see his belt unless you hit "H" to hide the GUI. I hope there's a Spring CG or something that shows off his belt?

Everything about the game looks beaut so far and I can't wait to play the full game!

[ehcs]

Thank you so much for reporting bugs and glitches!
They're a really big help to us and it means a lot that you'd take your time to post them. :')


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@DestinyFailsUs
I'm so glad you like it so far!
You're one of the people on the top of my list for "Who I hope is happy with the demo", haha.

Oops, that error is my fault! Net and I coded a scene in at the same time without the other knowing. I thought I had deleted all my edits though, I guess I left an important one in.
netravelr hates the new inventory, hahaha. I kept making him change it so I can see why it can be a buggy. The codes must be a mess after all the remakes I made him do. ;_; Thanks for pointing it out! I'm going to have to bug netravelr to work on it again. I hope he doesn't hate me after that, haha. xD

Thanks for going through the trouble of screenshotting everything - it really helps! :')

@distorsion
Oops, I really should have just done that from the start. It's up there now! :')



@Aurélie
Thank you very much! I wouldn't mind hearing people's opinion on the writing and story so far though. I have to be honest, it's my first time writing something like this and I'm more than worried people will take it.

Will fix that dialogue mistake asap, thanks for pointing that out!
No need to screenshot Joan, I'm pretty sure I know what I did wrong there. Will have it fixed once netravelr get back. :')
Joyce, hahaha. Yeah, we'll fix that too. I think the error might be with all the extras, actually. Like little glitches and stuff with each. We'll look into it soon. :')
Okay, the frisbee animation should definitely not be whats playing when you watch marionette theatre, hahaha. Will fix that too. xD

I'm sorry about that. D: I wasn't aware that people in the US were very lax with formalities. Where I'm from - or at least, in my school - it's rude to not include an honorific to a teacher's name. It's fine to call them by their first name, as long as it's preceded by a Sir or Miss. I can change what they say in that scene though if it's too off. D:

There will be intro CGs in the final version. I plan to have Sol's belt be seen in the CG. xD

[MomoiroGirl]

I'm writing this as I'm playing, and I'm just pointing out what I happen to have noticed along the way

- When Lynette goes back for her own laundry, she says "If fates in on my side - and it had better be - Miles won't have noticed me gone" The first part of the sentence should be corrected to "If fate is on my side" if it is to correspond to the rest of the sentence.
- When Lynette complains about Eli forsaking her she says they've only known each other for a few minutes, although they've known each other for a whole day (but they did only SPEAK for a few minutes )
- When she says "You don't leave women to the sharks - or peacocks for this matter" (this is VERY nitpicky, but I think that the correct expression would be " - or peacocks in this case". I'm not sure if the other expression is situation specifically correct >_>
- There's a coding faulty when you get a negative result trying to speak with Eli, the text says: "Sometimes I {i}may{/i} take a playful banter a bit too seriously."
- As the 3rd week began, EVERY business day Lynette started saying something like "This is getting dull, I think I'll stay out late today", and I was unable to choose "Apartment" when I clicked on the map, and if I left the Apartment-area on a weekend, I wouldn't be able to click on the apartment there either. Also, not sure exactly how long the demo is supposed to be, but since you said Eli was the only available route in the demo, I kept raising my relationship with him, and when I ALMOST filled up his bar, it stopped filling out the bar, even if I got a positive repsonse from talking with him on weekends (which I got when I reached Spring day60 or something like that. I decided to keept playing, just to see if something would happen, but now I've reached day 92, and nothing changed at all, so I stopped playing for now >_>

Nevertheless, it's very enjoyable and I like the characters and the writing has a nice pace! I'm excited to see the finished product! ^o^
(Sry if something I wrote doesn't make sense or has already been pointed out, especially since what I've written is mostly just nitpicking )

[netravelr]

My Dropbox has disabled my account due to too much downloading of the title. I've put the game up on my own server now, so we shouldn't have this problem again. The new links are here:
Windows: http://bit.ly/1ewNYaj
Mac: http://bit.ly/16mxTe9
Linux: http://bit.ly/15dXw1q

I've tried to fix as many errors as I could. Do note, the game will not actually end in this demo, it's just after you finish Eli's scenes there will be nothing else to actually see in the game as far as I know. I may bring in a day limit so that way people aren't playing for too long expecting for new things to happen, maybe day 20?

The inventory should work fine now. Thanks so much for the feedback, and we're working hard to make sure that LatL is the best it can be!

[Ventura]

Just played the demo and I love it. I'm impressed by the artwork and the characters are really nice. Lynnette especially had me cracking up so much. I love her personality! xD I had mixed feelings on the amount of stat-raising options but I've settled on positive. I do like that you can do so many different things at different times in the day but It felt kind of overwhelming at first (yes i know it's a bit contradicting but it's like choosing what kind of ice-cream flavor you want to start with out of 25, you don't know where to begin).

One bug I experienced: when I choose to work part-time at the apartment the amount of cash I had didn't change when the action succeded. I don't think this is a bug but asking just in case. When you chose to talk to Mrs. Fletcher it is meants just to say that you talked and not show the "fail/succed" animation, right?

Anyway keep up the awesome work and I'm looking forward to when the full game release.

[Hazel-Bun]

Oh man, time to get my prescription updated. My glasses must be going bad if I missed this haha! Will download as soon as I can and play ^^

[RunicV]

I just gave this a play, and I have to say, it really has potential, but right now it's pretty boring.

I loved the beginning scene and the way you introduced all the characters, I thought they were really fresh and fun. Your artwork and the animations really helped. There were a few bugs in coding and a few mistakes and errors in the writing, but nothing very noticeable. It was a really fun read, and I liked how the choices you gave were pretty interesting.

The only thing I can't stand is how boring the stat-raising aspect is. I kept hammering and raising up my stats, but nothing's happening. I expected to get cutscenes and stuff when I talked to the guy enough, but the pop-up kept appearing. After a while I just continued at my stats, and nothing happened. It got too boring, so I stopped playing.

I'm not sure if that's a glitch, but if you're going to include stat-raisers, it's a good reason to include the reason why you have to raise it. If not, it's kind of meaningless and boring to the player, and it's just hammering at the mouse.

That being said, everything else about your game is lovely. I just hope you can fix the stat-raising part. Is this a beta, or a proper demo?

<3

[ririruetoo]

I enjoyed the game so far, although I did find the stat-raising aspect a little repetitive and boring after a while. Also, I've lived in the USA all my life, and I'm a college student and I have to say that its very very weird for me to call my teachers by their first name ( they say that you can, but I never do and most people I know don't) so while it depends on the person some people are formal in that way.

[try10]

I downloaded the demo and played and everything looks nice except for the fact that I have to save my game every time I try to do my job or raise my stats so I won't fail. It gets pretty boring after a while. Anyway, I'm looking forward for it's full release. Good luck!

[Aurélie]

A question about the stat-raising: is there a certain skill for each guy and then if you raise it high enough you get a special ending for them? I'd assume "Creativity" would be Eli's..

[Jason]

I absolutely love the system, the art style and subtle animations you have. The dialog's a bit quirky and I expect to see more from the full game!

It's boring indeed for now but it did its job well as a preview, and it's a lot better than others because it is free.
Not some other game that charges money for something that's almost as short as this if you know what I mean ^^; .

[distorsion]

The mac download link leads to a 404 page...

[Kikaharu]

the window download link doesnt work