Message from the Blue Sky [BxG, a bit of Fantasy, Nakige]

[Shalambay Shift]

This is my first real VN, so I'm a bit excited nervous about it.
It's a test on Ren'Py, but I'm proud of it somehow.


presents you...


Message from the Blue Sky!


After ten years leaving his hometown to live in the big city, Shinji Zaburiki returned. Because of his weird last name, his old neighbor remembered him. After meeting unique people, he met a girl. She wasn't an ordinary girl. She's a.... ghost? With unanswered questions, Shinji became interested to know about her, but it seems like they have a connection... Who is she in Shinji's life?

The game will tell how they met and it will reveal their connection bit by bit.


* Note that all of these are just concepts, subject might change.


Shinji Zaburiki
Shinji is the protagonist of the game. He is quite independent because a plane crash that took his parents' lives made him live in the city with his aunt.


Sora
She is the mysterious ghost girl Shinji met at the first day of spring-break. She doesn't seem to remember her past, before she became a ghost.


Gran
She is the lady who lived next door when Shinji lived in the village. She took care of him after the plane crash; before he lived with his aunt. She seems to know the relationship between Sora and Shinji.

Kotaro
He is Gran's grandson, and he works in the inn. He moved in after Shinji left, that's why they never met before.

-image pending-
Worker
A young worker that seems to be worried about Gran.


• 6,418 words
• 2 endings

• 3 endings counting the unlockable one.

• 1 pursuable girl
• Roughly 30 minutes of playthrough


BG examples : [Link]
-Will keep updating-


Writing - 100%
Editing - 90%
Proofreading - 0%
Sprites - 1%
CG Art - 0%
BG art - 15%
Music - 10%


Writer: Kanon(me)
Artists : miaverana, Miyuki, and the above
Music - *still searching* Royalty-free music
Software : Ren'Py


• If you have any suggestions / critiques, feel free to tell!
It will really help us with this Visual Novel!

• If the centered text is bothering you, please tell! (if you want)

• English is not my first language, so that's why there are probably a lot of mistakes in the game and this post. I might hire a proofreader later on...

• I'm also thinking of changing the names and the place (country). Any comments on this?

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From ShalambayShift, the galge group of Valonia~

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[netravelr]

My internet isn't that great right now, but once I get to a more stable connection, I'll check it out. Looking forward to it!

[Shalambay Shift]

Thanks for your spport!

UPDATE:
I'm just tweaking the story so it'll be less boring.
I'm also redoing the sketches because they look weird in my other computer. >.<

[Shalambay Shift]

Am I allowed to bump my thread like this? ;w;
New textbox! The little space on top will be gone if the text is a narration.
Any comments/critiques?

[Shalambay Shift]

Revamped Sora sketch and Shinji's final design! (His face won't be shown in the game, just on some CGs)


We are also planning to delete all of the GUI stuff and redesign it. C:

(I still feel bad for bumping XD)

[gekiganwing]

If you don't mind me asking, have you read other stories with a ghost as a love interest? If you have not seen many examples (whether in prose, films, games, comics, or anything else), then make sure you have experienced at least a few. It will help you to avoid retreading familiar ground.

I say this because your VN sounds like a mild version of the short comics series My Lovely Ghost Kana. If you're unfamiliar with the series, please keep in mind that it includes quite a few positive, consensual sex scenes.

[AshenhartKrie]

This sounds really cool, good luck. ^_^ If my interent weren't an ass I'd be able to see the pictures. Maybe they'll load when I get home though.

[Shalambay Shift]

@gekiganwing:
Actually, I have a limited amount of knowledge about it. I'll try to see what I can find and develop the story.
I know some games, but there are more guy ghosts than girl ghosts as love interests.

@AshenhartKrie:
Thank you!