Era of Monsters [GxB][Fantasy, Romance, Comedy][Demo]

[JimG]

Are you interested in playing then the game will be completed?

Very much

Is a dominant witch acceptable as a protagonist for you? Just want to see opinions and maybe advices what I have to be careful with. Nobody loves a complete bitch, I know…

A dominant witch is a super protagonist, from your other responses she seems like a balanced character so that is good.

Is characters design OK?

I really like your artwork.

Is here something irritating you?

Please keep in mind that I really like your artwork..... I find the males in the game too pretty looking. Just my opinion of course but they seem almost willowy, sort of more like a young woman than young men.


Urm… initially I wanted to make a decent 18+ game. But the adult part of the forum is so much unpopular… and dead. What do you think? Is porny part distract you from a story? I`m focusing on the plot, the characters and romance now. I`m OK anyway either some staff like this will be in game or not.

A good 18+ game is still a good game. I believe you are leaning towards doing either two versions or a 16+ version. Do what you think will work. I really like 18+ games and your artwork would certainly do the adult version justice.

And sorry for my horrible, simply disgusting English . I`m learning it at university now. I even have to write script in my natural language at first and translate it after this. I have to think about working with narrative speakers as a co-writer to make the text in game understandable… if a person with knowledge of the language gets interest in working on the project. I don`t know if it will happen.

Your English isn't perfect but it is not disgusting, you get your point across and there is no problem understanding what you are trying to say. I am sure you will get better and better at it over time.

I`ll do my best to make this game enjoyable not only for me, so please answer! It`s my first project and I work alone now, but I don`t want to make a game nobody want to play.


This looks like it will be a really good game. Try not to write it to please other people, I think you will be more successful in the long run if you can let the characters write themselves. You have a strong sense of what each of the characters are so let that sense guide you, don't spoil it by thinking "oh someone might not like that". I am waiting on pins and needles for you to finish this, if you need a beta tester I would be happy to help.

Regarding the "maids" , I always wanted to find a girl who could bench press me! Good job.

Best Regards
Jim

[Merula O]

TheOneTwo,
Thank you for the compliment!

JimG,
Thank you for answers! And I`m happy you like my artwork.

Please keep in mind that I really like your artwork..... I find the males in the game too pretty looking. Just my opinion of course but they seem almost willowy, sort of more like a young woman than young men.

Ha ha... A-ah, well, I think if I wanted them to be manlier, I would be able to make them like this. I like them as they are now. All the musculs went to maids. Somebody likes it, somebody hates it. I personaly get used to see subtle boys in games and I like them. I hope their appearance won`t turn you and some other people off too much from the game.

I am waiting on pins and needles for you to finish this, if you need a beta tester I would be happy to help.

Oh, thank you for your offer! I`ll keep it in my mind. Thanks for reply!

[clua]

Heyyy!! You are making your game! I'm so happy that you decided to,
anyway here are my 2 cents(or however this phrase is said..)

+Are you interested in playing then the game will be completed?
YES!
+Is a dominant witch acceptable as a protagonist for you? Just want to see opinions and maybe advices what I have to be careful with. Nobody loves a complete bitch, I know…
Well, yes of course, I actually don't have a deep preference with heroines, I just want them smart, if they are dominant or not I don't mind hehe.
+ Is characters design OK?
Your drawings are awesome :A:!! Hmm but it's hard for me to identify a common aspect of the world they live. Like Neyris for example and her underlings should have a similar clothing style or a detail that makes you understand they belong from a similar place. Dunno, maybe I'm too square on that aspect lol...
+Is here something irritating you?
Ehh no!!
+Urm… initially I wanted to make a decent 18+ game. But the adult part of the forum is so much unpopular… and dead. What do you think? Is porny part distract you from a story? I`m focusing on the plot, the characters and romance now. I`m OK anyway either some staff like this will be in game or not.
XD...I wouldn't protest on that...If you really like the idea, you can make two versions of the game? like one with ero scenes and others without it? since it's an add to your main plot.

[Merula O]

Clua! Oh my God, I`m so happy you commented on my game! Thank you so much.
And your question about clothes. Aristocrats, polititians have an emblem of a clan so they, their servants, soldiers have it on clothes. But simple people haven`t emblems. Neyris dosn`t have aristocratic ancestors, so she hasn`t. She doesn`t care what her servants wear, so Till, for example, wear what she wants. And she likes clothes that she could wear in her Demon world.
But they have different clothes in different places; different species and races have different clothes too. I hope it will be clearer in the game.

[aoronomme]

The art is so beautiful and the story is quite interesting! Looking forward to this

[Merula O]

aoronomme,
Thank you

I wanted to show some parts of new CGs I`ve made recently.
This.


And little Till from flashback scene. She used to have really long hair.

[nancie]

Wow these look amazing! I really can't wait to see how this turns out!

[ngareci]

#Saw a [GxB][Fantasy,Romance,Comedy] thread --> *Grinning
#Read the whole first post --> *BIG Grinning~

Are you interested in playing then the game will be completed?

YES!!
I like the idea of the story!~ it's pretty unique, and funny!
Perhaps you slang it from disney story, sleeping beauty, where the bad witch curse the princess to be sleeping beauty (but here, to be ugly..)

Is a dominant witch acceptable as a protagonist for you? Just want to see opinions and maybe advices what I have to be careful with. Nobody loves a complete bitch, I know…

I have seen enough a 'good girl' protagonist with no strong-willpower.
And this kind of protagonist will be really refreshing~
Go on with her!

Is characters design OK?

They are more than OK!
Drake : It's really not my type, but I think you can make some good funny scene with him and neyris..
Malik : The sweet guy type. Perhaps it will be interesting if you give him some suprise manly attitude in certain event when he get angry/serious..
Theo : Slave. Interesting. Thus, he's mechanical boy who might making interesting thing.. And he's a good friend with Fraynir. I'm wondering how the story behind it..
Riki : He's a mystery. He lives in a catacomb. He has a fang. He has a cool sense of fashion. Definitely interesting.
Fraynir : He's the first route I'm gonna take. He's a tricky dragon and hot and my type. It will be plus if he can make a good joke with his caustic comments..
Kuon : A loyal soldier who doesn't care about romance but involved in it always hot. This character remind me of Geddoe from Suikoden III..
??? : Can see his face through a bright screen, he looks handsome~
Annett : The first thing I like about her is she's the one who spell Neyris and become like her crazy-controller, who also pretty 'crazy'. Can't wait for her further story..
Princess Wilhelmin : You gave her helmet! That's good..
I mean, she's actually being the center of attention, but with her appearance covered up, it makes people wondering. And that's good.
Till : Shape shifting demon. Looks yummy. Looking at the her flashback CG. Alright, her past seems interesting.

Is here something irritating you?

You don't tell us how much the progress in the first post..
Can't wait until this done..

Urm… initially I wanted to make a decent 18+ game. But the adult part of the forum is so much unpopular… and dead. What do you think? Is porny part distract you from a story? I`m focusing on the plot, the characters and romance now. I`m OK anyway either some staff like this will be in game or not.

Well, with the good concept of yours, I'd rather not. Some people avoid 18+ game...


I like your artwork! It's really good!
The background is actually good, do you use sketchup or just drawing on photoshop/sai?
I like the UI too~ It matched the story
I saw the maids, and that's very cute maid, ever! XD
Good luck on your progress!
I'll be watching this thread!~

[Merula O]

nancie,
thank you for keeping answering! It`s really nice... And it feels lonely when I post something and get no answer.

ngareci
Wow, thank you for answering the questions!
Yes, I didn`t try to be original, I`m just a girl who watched those dysney cartoons with princess and all this stuff... I`m an adult now, have seen anime a lot, playing games, but still like them a lot. I just thought that dysney`s witches are cool (so charismatic and egocentric... I like it) and it can turn funny to make someone like them an otome heroine. So the idea for the game was born.

??? : Can see his face through a bright screen, he looks handsome~

Yes, he is... but he`s a creeper. Just saying. And he has a route.
And yeah, I`m writing a script for Fray`s route now, and omg, he`s some sexy beast! I can`t... it`s like I can`t control the character properly and he do what he want. Wah~... Sounds crazy.

You don't tell us how much the progress in the first post..

Sorry! I`m bad with percents and... I`m planning to rewrite first post when the demo is realised. I`ll add progress then. I can`t say when I`ll complete it, to be honest, because I have to do some stuff for my studying. But the most part is complete, just some bgs need to be drawn.
Oh, if someone is interested:
Tue Mar 05 17:43:01 2013
Statistics:

The game contains 1,534 screens of dialogue.
These screens contain a total of 20,934 words,
for an average of 13.6 words per screen.
The game contains 2 menus.

...yes, pretty long and not so many menus. I`m sorry, I know some people prefer to have a lot of choice. Well, it`s not the end, there will be more of it.

Well, with the good concept of yours, I'd rather not. Some people avoid 18+ game...

I`m thinking over making two versions. I know some people get annoyed even if a game visually looks not so inoccent...

Oh, I just draw everything in photoshop.

I like the UI too~ It matched the story
I saw the maids, and that's very cute maid, ever! XD
Good luck on your progress!
I'll be watching this thread!~

Thank you!~

[ngareci]

Yes, I didn`t try to be original, I`m just a girl who watched those dysney cartoons with princess and all this stuff... I`m an adult now, have seen anime a lot, playing games, but still like them a lot. I just thought that dysney`s witches are cool (so charismatic and egocentric... I like it) and it can turn funny to make someone like them an otome heroine. So the idea for the game was born.

No, story-making like that was also cool!
You process them with your imagination, and ta~da~ something new was born..

And yeah, I`m writing a script for Fray`s route now, and omg, he`s some sexy beast! I can`t... it`s like I can`t control the character properly and he do what he want. Wah~... Sounds crazy.

I know how the feeling, where the writer was driven by the character.. and yeah, it sound crazy..
But it's pretty fun actually, the story become so natural and I get really satisfied somehow..
so his name is Fray, and he's a sexy beast, nom nom~

Oh, I just draw everything in photoshop.

Wew, the line art in library was really neat..
I like the painting in Witch's room, and I suggest you add more shading and lightning like that for the city background...
it would be better..

[Merula O]

so his name is Fray, and he's a sexy beast, nom nom~

(facepalm)
...You can`t imagine how stupid I feel, becouse I continue spelling his name wrong. Even in my first post I did it... but he`s Freynir in the script . I made hybridization between Freyr (a god of nordic myth) and Fenrir (monstrous wolf from the same mythology). And he allows to adress him as "Frey" only Theo as his old friend, but others call him like this anyway, enraging and trolling him lol.
I`m happy you like him ! My editor was irritated by some of his actions and words, so I was afraid nobody likes the cruel dragon man. He`s pretty rude to Neyris at first, but he can be so sweet and... yeah, I already said about him being sexy beast .

Edit: Oh, I`ll try to make streets look better, thank you! I can`t draw streets and forests for some reason (just a lack of experience actually).

[try10]

WOW! WOW! and WOW! I'm really impressed. The art and the backgrounds are stunning!:D The characters seem so interesting and my favourite one is Fraynir. I am VERY interested in playing this game since it looks so professional. I would like to choose the MC personality based on what kind of answers she gives ( dunno...maybe friendly,flirty, cold/forceful and sarcastic answers?). Since the MC is a witch, I don't expect her to be Candy. About the 18+ thingy, I won't be bothered at all if you decide to add nudity and suggestive themes ( if some people are bothered by them maybe you should include the option to turn them off or on depending to the player's preference). I am really waiting to play this game after it's finished!

[Merula O]

try10, thank you for your comment! It`s really nice to see that some people are so interested.
I think it`s a nice idea about choice what can have different mood! Unfortunately, there are no such options in this project. MC has her own strong personality (she`s three-hundred years old witch! No way she`ll change becouse of a couple of different answers...) and usually there is no other way she can react. You can choose a guy she`ll romance (or forever-alone route), and ending. I hope it still will be interesting to play (or read) for you .

[Alice PH]

Are you interested in playing then the game will be completed?
(OF COURSE I'M COMPLETELY INTERESTED <3)

Is a dominant witch acceptable as a protagonist for you? Just want to see opinions and maybe advices what I have to be careful with. Nobody loves a complete bitch, I know…
(......Well, I like a dominant sadistic[is she sadistic?] protagonist XD But maybe sometimes you can add little details like, maybe she have a weakness to somethings, or like, sensitive to some stuffs that someone is normally not? Or maybe she acts tough to something and all. You know, the kind of girl the JP otome games LOVE to do xP...Or you can make like, her, like, sometime really considerate? Mind little detail. Airhead. Uh, slow at romance. Slow at some stuffs? xDD please ignore my suggestion if they sound too...weird. D And possibly not fitting the whole story. haha~)

Is characters design OK?
(They are AWESOME dude! Or girl I like, I like. Oh, but actually I KIND OF wish that the main, the forehead..Wouldn't like..look so big )

Is here something irritating you?
(...The length of Tills waist. >_>...?)

Urm… initially I wanted to make a decent 18+ game. But the adult part of the forum is so much unpopular… and dead. What do you think? Is porny part distract you from a story? I`m focusing on the plot, the characters and romance now. I`m OK anyway either some staff like this will be in game or not.
(Heheh, I don't think it's distracting me, sometimes a good dose of 18+ scene make the whole game ALOT better n sometime funnier, otherwise making the whole romance thing more great!)

[Merula O]

Alice PH,
Thank you for nice hints about her character! Well, I`ve already written a lot, and her character is defined. Neyris has a weak spot for fluffy animals, and she is flirtatious with any guy she finds attrective lol. Light mages are scared of her anyway, becouse she`s a witch and a... special girl.

...I KIND OF wish that the main, the forehead..Wouldn't like..look so big

That`s because she`s smart . Maybe it`s becouse of her hairstyle? Look.

She can look like this but she doesn`t want to. There are scene where she has different clothes and hairstyle.

...The length of Tills waist. >_>...?

Oh, you`re right ! I tried to make it look better:

And her second pose:

Does she look not so irritating now? Hmm...

Thank you~!