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PostPosted: Fri Apr 25, 2014 1:35 pm 
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For all you Yandere fans I am currently working on a yandere visual novel with VOICES!
If you think it shouldn't have voices please tell me your opinions.
So far this is all I have and am currently trying to come up with a good plot and twist so if you have any ideas don't be afraid to say cause it would help me a lot!

This game will be free to play and also for the android if it comes to it.

This is came from the inspiration of the visual novel Yandere-chan. (for those who haven't played it, i suggest you should its awesome)

Tell me your thoughts. Im new here so im not sure what to expect.


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PostPosted: Fri Apr 25, 2014 1:56 pm 
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What is your story idea? From your post, I know there will be a yandere character, but I don't know anything about the story other than that. I'm happy to help brainstorm and generate ideas, but I would like to know the general direction of your vn to do that.

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[list=][*]Does the player play as the yandere?
[*]Are they instead the yandere's love interest?
[*]If so, do they have a set gender or will the player choose?
[*]How do the two meet? What is the setting-- high school/an event/a job?
[*]What happens to the characters that brings them together or tears them apart?
[*]Are there any other characters?
[*]If so, how do they affect the story?[/list]

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PostPosted: Fri Apr 25, 2014 2:13 pm 
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daikiraikimi wrote:
What is your story idea? From your post, I know there will be a yandere character, but I don't know anything about the story other than that. I'm happy to help brainstorm and generate ideas, but I would like to know the general direction of your vn to do that.

Ex.

[list=][*]Does the player play as the yandere?
[*]Are they instead the yandere's love interest?
[*]If so, do they have a set gender or will the player choose?
[*]How do the two meet? What is the setting-- high school/an event/a job?
[*]What happens to the characters that brings them together or tears them apart?
[*]Are there any other characters?
[*]If so, how do they affect the story?[/list]



The game is a first person perspective. You play as the male character named Kirito. The girl (as seen in the preview) is Kiritos childhood friend Yuna. Its a high school based game. As for other characters, its only going to revolve around her and the main protagonist. I was thinking of adding someone else but not sure....

I was thinking that she secretly is obsessed with kirito so much and that she doesn't really show it in front of him because she doesn't want to scare him off (or something like that.)

maybe add a little tragedy back story as to how she became so obsessed with him. but have no good ideas really
They grew up together.


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PostPosted: Fri Apr 25, 2014 2:33 pm 
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Hm, okay. So, what are their personalities beyond "male lead" and "yandere love interest"? Are there any specific scenes you want to include in your game? What will differentiate your game from other yandere themed games?

(Not to just bombard you with questions, but it helps facilitate the brainstorming. :) )

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PostPosted: Fri Apr 25, 2014 2:46 pm 
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I know I'm nitpicking, but "male lead" and "yandere love interest" aren't personalities. They're character tropes.

Jadenday:

Don't worry about voices right now. Work on writing a story that the player will find emotionally engaging.

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PostPosted: Fri Apr 25, 2014 2:48 pm 
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Mad Harlequin wrote:
I know I'm nitpicking, but "male lead" and "yandere love interest" aren't personalities. They're character tropes.


Well, that was kind of my point-- what are their personalities beyond the tropes they're based off of, a generic archetype? So far we know the tropes, but don't really know anything else about the characters, who they are, etc.

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PostPosted: Fri Apr 25, 2014 3:02 pm 
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daikiraikimi wrote:
Mad Harlequin wrote:
I know I'm nitpicking, but "male lead" and "yandere love interest" aren't personalities. They're character tropes.


Well, that was kind of my point-- what are their personalities beyond the tropes they're based off of, a generic archetype? So far we know the tropes, but don't really know anything else about the characters, who they are, etc.


well for Kirito maybe:
he is oblivious to hints when girls like him and such but he is kind.


as for Yuna:
she over reacts to everything and overprotective of kirito. She is cold towards other girls when around kirito.
she is insightful and collective


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daikiraikimi wrote:
Well, that was kind of my point-- what are their personalities beyond the tropes they're based off of, a generic archetype? So far we know the tropes, but don't really know anything else about the characters, who they are, etc.

Oh, okay. Your intent was clear, but I didn't know if you meant to use "personalities" instead of "tropes."

For the OP (and anyone else viewing this thread):

I recommend using a character development sheet so you can really get to know your characters in depth. A quick search turned up a nice collection of them over here:

http://fuckyeahcharacterdevelopment.tum ... r-creation

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PostPosted: Fri Apr 25, 2014 4:52 pm 
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Here's one of my favorite character creation guides-- you do need a deviantart account to view it, though.

http://sheeply.deviantart.com/art/Chara ... -118325253

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PostPosted: Mon May 05, 2014 10:30 pm 
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Hm, the interface is still all default. You might want to customize them to get a better look. Maybe some blood and dark themes would help because the idea here is "gore" and "yandere"

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PostPosted: Tue May 06, 2014 1:46 am 
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yeah, i agree! the themes should be darker, the bloody mary one maybe? ;)

anyway-- i love yandere stuff and this seems interesting. good luck!

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PostPosted: Mon May 12, 2014 7:41 pm 
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suzuaki wrote:
yeah, i agree! the themes should be darker, the bloody mary one maybe? ;)

anyway-- i love yandere stuff and this seems interesting. good luck!


yea lol im most likely gonna change the main menu cover into a darker-ish theme.


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Do you mean: yandere wa douiu imi desu ka


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Asceai wrote:
Do you mean: yandere wa douiu imi desu ka


I thought that the slang version of "desu ka" was "deka" no? lol and shit. time to redo the logo xD


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