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I saw this thread last week, and planned to reply... but it took me a while to read your story so far.

So far, I'm having a little trouble remembering who is who, and what they're doing. Maybe I tried to read it too quickly. But at this time, I think you'll benefit by giving the characters a little more time, so that we can see who they are as individuals. Don't worry, I'm not asking for drawn-out slice of life scenes. I don't want your VN to slow down too much.

Also, I was surprised by how much humor there was. It reminded me of the quick "I bet you know this reference" humor that I saw in the first demo of Forever Alone: Nerds the Gathering.

hmmm this does seem quiet interesting Alrite have decided to stalk this >:D good luck