This is going to be long I think, but still, since I look forward to this game, I'll try to make it short XD
First let me say that I really like your ideas and your writing
I may sound too critical in this, but I really loved this demo! The story reminds of Hakuouki (my first otome-game) so I was interested in this, but I'm really demanding sometimes (well, it reminds me of Hakuouki, the best Otome-game on Earth XD), so please don't mind it and take what is useful for you
May contains spoilers!
✖ Was the info-dump too much, esp. at the prologue?
It wasn't too much, but since it was short I didn't have the time to really be
in this world, I mean, each time the King talked about Regis I had to try and remember who it was. A bit longer would have been great, but since there aren't too many things happening, it's not possible, is it?
To me, the only thing that was really too fast was about Minho's condition. It's happening way too fast, maybe him being discovered only when talking to the king would have been better, so we would have had the time to learn a bit more about him and his personnality or something... And since at the beginning I thought that Jay and him were arguing because Minho let Lisette go alone in the tunnel, it could still work. (BTW I really wondered, why didn't she go with someone? Her pride prevented her from asking someone (She couldn't ask Minho since he told her not to go, right?) Sorry, that's not the point here =.=")
✖ Was Lisette's angst believable? I've heard multiple opinions on this.
Are you talking about her angst when she's in the tunnel? Like when she losts her self-confidence and so on, ...? I think it's quite believable but it's a bit too fast, after all, she's just thinking that she can't attack recklessly and a second later she thiks that she's going to die, moreover, she should not have lost her self-confidence, since she's still a good slayer, but shouldn't she curse it, since it leads her to this situation? I mean, she shouldn't be like "I'm going to die here I'm scared", but more "I'm going to die here, I'm angry at myself". Otherwise, I really like it when she doesn't want to admit that she became a soul eater
she was so funny ^^ and her personnality is great, she so obsessed by her pride XD
✖ Any suggestions for the full VN?
Change the music at the king's announcement? I don't know why but I really want to laugh when I hear this music XD
Seriously? I don't know since the demo is quite short ^^"
I thought that the text box didn't fit the story, I mean it looks like a medieval-fantasy-game, but the text box was really modern and simple... But that's not really important I guess ^^"
✖ What are your thoughts on the demo?
Short O.O Way too short!! (since I'm the type of player who'd want a complete game as demo, don't mind this XD)
Oh, when Minho takes off his contacts, it's said that Lisette closes her eyes, but we still see everything, that was strange (and not important at all, sorry ^^")
I really loved the beginning, in the darkness, it was scary (currently playing at night in a dark bedroom XD), and I love Lisette! It's nice to see a MC who has a real personnality, she was often very funny! The "Sunny Bunny part" was excellent X) I also like the darker part of the story, when talking about slaughters in Canaris
I mean, the atmospheres in this game are really varied, and that's nice! It's not too gloomy and not too funny, it's simply perfect ^o^
✖ Anything else?
This may be only for me, but when the soul eater is attacking Lisette, it's a shame that it's not frightening at all ^^" I mean, a louder noise or some blood splatters (with a low opacity so we would still see the darkness) would have been nice to set a dramatic atmosphere
Since I loved this part, I wanted to say it, but again, don't take it to heart ^^"
Apart from that, everything is
perfect. You're doing a great job
Okay this is way too long, I'm really sorry ^^" Did I even put that I look forward to the full VN? Or that I'll definitely play to it? Or that I'm stalking this thread?
Good luck!! I'm counting on you for the full VN