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#16 Post by Hazel-Bun » Sat Sep 21, 2013 6:55 pm

Katta wrote:This background is super awesome, I like it so much) I like the sprite too, but the bg is just so beautiful I'm looking at it again and again)
Glad! It got a little revamp after...
chocojax wrote:Uhh, I hope this helps you out a bit. :)
Chocojax's very helpful critques ^^ Much appreciated! Our artist has done some revamping of the BG and sprite so hopefully it looks even better! I've put up a mockup of a what a screenshot would look like and one of our commissioned pieces is all but finished!

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#17 Post by Armee » Tue Sep 24, 2013 7:34 am

How did things go senpai and Bun??? Do you need help? I would gladly you help you with graphics user interface( orz beginner...//crais) SENPAI'S ENVIROMENT ART! though I agree with other, it look a bit distracting to me. (The smile of the boy...)

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#18 Post by euphorics » Tue Sep 24, 2013 7:40 pm

@thread in general: First post updated! Cherubim Scribes has a tumblr now hoho~ There isn't much on there yet except for some CG previews and a lovely commissioned music piece, but feel free to check it out!! CGs are currently well (?) underway, lineart done for one, waiting for retouching + coloring, and a concept sketch for another done! There will be around 3-4 CGs total, along with a few variations. :'^D
Armee wrote:How did things go senpai and Bun??? Do you need help? I would gladly you help you with graphics user interface( orz beginner...//crais) SENPAI'S ENVIROMENT ART! though I agree with other, it look a bit distracting to me. (The smile of the boy...)
toYOOO I AM DYING- jkjk, we're both getting swamped with stuff lol, but still chugging away (~ = v = )~
Bun probably contacted you already, BUT YES IF YOU COULD HELP WITH GUI THAT WOULD BE WONDERFUL. :'^( Thank you so much!! I'm going to try to work on the logo in my spare time, but I'm also doing the CGs so can't even try the GUI, hahha...;; (you are a wonderful beginner u v u~~) THANK YOU! Is the background still too detailed? ;_; And ugh, I might redo all of the sprites later (much.. much later) but as of now going to focus on the CGs otl;;
Thank you so much for checking up on us though ahhH ; 3 ; <33 I hope your projects are going well too!!
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#19 Post by Dazed » Tue Sep 24, 2013 9:37 pm

Loving the sprite style. Great background too!

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#20 Post by euphorics » Wed Sep 25, 2013 1:43 am

Dazed wrote:Loving the sprite style. Great background too!
Ahhh, thank you so much!! ;_; <3


@thread: SUPER LAME LOGO UPDATE. Instead of packing for uni I revived my ultra-rusty photoshop skillz to work on the new logo, wooo~
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Will clean up the rose part a bit later, but feel free to tell me what you think! Looking at these, what kind of genre would you guess the game to be? Which do you like better?
Any suggestions would be super great!! ; v ;
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#21 Post by Armee » Wed Sep 25, 2013 1:56 am

Yes Senpai and thank you; A: You're a wonderful person. I hope things will work and wish you best luck. Yes, Bun-sama contacted me: 3
<( ̄︶ ̄)> []~( ̄▽ ̄)~* ( ̄﹏ ̄) ( ̄ˇ ̄) Senpai ... the logo is nice. And from my POV, this will be a mystery, romance(?), something not heartwarming: 3 May be tragic, non? I Llike the first one because the letters in the 2nd one seem idle compare to the flower.

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#22 Post by shilkefair » Wed Sep 25, 2013 2:29 am

This looks really nice=D
already in love with the sprite and the background!! XD
and the story is quite interesting too!!=D

and for the logo i like both of them but i like the first one better simply because the flower didn't get in the way of the text so it's easy to read,
for the second logo maybe you can add white lines around the 'flower' text so that it doesn't blend with the flower image.

and i think that this will be a heartwarming story? just a guess haha, i like heartwarming stories..=D
Good luck with the project!=D

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#23 Post by euphorics » Thu Sep 26, 2013 12:13 am

Armee wrote:Yes Senpai and thank you; A: You're a wonderful person. I hope things will work and wish you best luck. Yes, Bun-sama contacted me: 3
<( ̄︶ ̄)> []~( ̄▽ ̄)~* ( ̄﹏ ̄) ( ̄ˇ ̄) Senpai ... the logo is nice. And from my POV, this will be a mystery, romance(?), something not heartwarming: 3 May be tragic, non? I Llike the first one because the letters in the 2nd one seem idle compare to the flower.
no kouhai, the wonderful person is you (~ ; 3 ; )~~~ and if i read the first post correctly- ahHH THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE HELP<33 i look forward to your godly GUI amg ;____;
ohohoho, this is interesting~ i'll take this into consideration, thanks!! u v u and yeah, most people seem to like that one better too; it's slightly more creative, maybe?
also i will respond to your messages soon arghhhh school sucks
shilkefair wrote:This looks really nice=D
already in love with the sprite and the background!! XD
and the story is quite interesting too!!=D

and for the logo i like both of them but i like the first one better simply because the flower didn't get in the way of the text so it's easy to read,
for the second logo maybe you can add white lines around the 'flower' text so that it doesn't blend with the flower image.

and i think that this will be a heartwarming story? just a guess haha, i like heartwarming stories..=D
Good luck with the project!=D
ahHH A PRO--- kfdsl h-hello there!! ;_; THANK YOU SO MUCH AHH, I'm super glad!! (and I'm glad you think the story's interesting too hoho, Hazel-Bun is basically a genius writer/game developer~) I've lurked on your threads a bit before, and goshhh your GUI and artwork and everything is so amazing!! Looking forward to your games being finished ; 3 ;!! <3

aaack yeah, I was worried about that! the white outline is actually a super great suggestion -- I hadn't thought of it before for some reason, haha otl;; Will go and try that out now, thank you so much for the feedback!!

and hoho, interesting~ > v > I see I see! Thank you so much!! <33
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#24 Post by pickle131 » Thu Sep 26, 2013 6:54 am

I really want to try this when it's out ;u;
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#25 Post by Haze » Thu Sep 26, 2013 7:41 am

Will clean up the rose part a bit later, but feel free to tell me what you think! Looking at these, what kind of genre would you guess the game to be? Which do you like better?
I saw the new logos, and I personally like the second one better. One thing, though: the flower makes the word "pretty" a bit hard to read. Maybe you should make the font color a little darker?

As for the genre, based on just the logos, I'd think a slice-of-life story. I guess that's just what comes across to me.

By the way, I saw the new BG, it's so pretty!
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#26 Post by Hazel-Bun » Fri Sep 27, 2013 9:12 pm

Hey guys! Will be and have been very busy >> Things are chugging along as usual though! euphorics has tried to implement some of your critques for the logo(s)! Once I get to a desktop (has yet to all day) I'll sit down and make a more indepth update ^^ Check out the front page for more art, etc., etc. in the mean time!
pickle131 wrote:I really want to try this when it's out ;u;
I really want you to play and like it when it does pickle UvU Rest assured we're all doing our very best to make it a good experience!
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Will clean up the rose part a bit later, but feel free to tell me what you think! Looking at these, what kind of genre would you guess the game to be? Which do you like better?
I saw the new logos, and I personally like the second one better. One thing, though: the flower makes the word "pretty" a bit hard to read. Maybe you should make the font color a little darker?

As for the genre, based on just the logos, I'd think a slice-of-life story. I guess that's just what comes across to me.

By the way, I saw the new BG, it's so pretty!
I'll reply to you because euphorics beat me to the others-- Thanks for the helpful pointers! Once I get them uploaded, do tell us if you find the text eaiser to read! Funny enough, I liked the big flower as well so kept both logos ^^ Thanks about the BG too!! She worked hard to put chocojax's critques into good use!

I'm a little surprised but all togther okay with the wide range of responses to the logo by the way, guys. (Aside from the helpful stuff of course) eve I think it's cool and fitting that the logo gives off rather different expectations as that's what I think the game will deliver. A differnt story than what's expected... Anyway, thanks for the comments! It really drives us forward! Do check out the group tumblr for more frequent updates (when I'm not rebloging stupid stuff and pretty boys) and for a big update come Friday of next week if everything goes as planned!

Here's some pictures and revisions(some more minor than others) until then!

Two Questions(will also be on Page 1):
1). Even if it was very short and contained the bare bones of the overall game, would you play a sort of demo if realased publicly?
2). Some debate has gone on and we were wondering your thoughts about AtPF being changed into a VN as opposed to an episodic KN? It would stay episodic but, depending on your choices, your end would carry over and affect the telling of the next story? It wouldn't be anything huge script/CG wise (minimum text change and locked CGs for 'wrong' answers) but would result in vastly differnt endings for the player. Thoughts?
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#27 Post by 15385bic » Fri Sep 27, 2013 9:57 pm

the logo is pretty and so is the art~
looking forward to seeing more *A*

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#28 Post by Hazel-Bun » Wed Oct 02, 2013 6:49 am

Ahhhh! *clears thoart* After that little panic-spell, we're back in action ^^ I'll give a full update once I'm back home but things are chugging along nicely. A big dent has been made in the writing (have yet to update word count ugh--), euphorics has started coloring the CGs and general progress is being made! A small demo should also be finished by Sunday night so look out for that too!

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#29 Post by Haze » Wed Oct 02, 2013 7:44 am

Yes, it's me again... :lol:

Just wanted to answer the questions.
1). Even if it was very short and contained the bare bones of the overall game, would you play a sort of demo if realased publicly?
2). Some debate has gone on and we were wondering your thoughts about AtPF being changed into a VN as opposed to an episodic KN? It would stay episodic but, depending on your choices, your end would carry over and affect the telling of the next story? It wouldn't be anything huge script/CG wise (minimum text change and locked CGs for 'wrong' answers) but would result in vastly differnt endings for the player. Thoughts?
1.A demo? Definitely! This game sounds like it'll be quite good, so a sneak peek of the final product would be great! Can't wait until Sunday!

2.Personally, if you guys see multiple endings in your game, then I think you should go ahead and do it. Multiple endings and new CGs to unlock can add to replay value, too.

Edit: Also, just wanted to say that changing logo 2 by making the flower lighter and in little more to the right was a good choice. I personally like it a lot better now.
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#30 Post by Hazel-Bun » Thu Oct 03, 2013 8:47 pm

15385bic wrote:the logo is pretty and so is the art~
looking forward to seeing more *A*
Thanks so much bic ^^ euphorics really appreciates it as well as me! I'm looking forward to Halloween Otome as well and can't wait to capture see Mr.B in action <3!
Haze wrote:Yes, it's me again... :lol:

Just wanted to answer the questions.
1). Even if it was very short and contained the bare bones of the overall game, would you play a sort of demo if realased publicly?
2). Some debate has gone on and we were wondering your thoughts about AtPF being changed into a VN as opposed to an episodic KN? It would stay episodic but, depending on your choices, your end would carry over and affect the telling of the next story? It wouldn't be anything huge script/CG wise (minimum text change and locked CGs for 'wrong' answers) but would result in vastly differnt endings for the player. Thoughts?
1.A demo? Definitely! This game sounds like it'll be quite good, so a sneak peek of the final product would be great! Can't wait until Sunday!

2.Personally, if you guys see multiple endings in your game, then I think you should go ahead and do it. Multiple endings and new CGs to unlock can add to replay value, too.

Edit: Also, just wanted to say that changing logo 2 by making the flower lighter and in little more to the right was a good choice. I personally like it a lot better now.
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Coolbeans! I'll work hard towards that demo then! Most of it is just inserting the proofread first scene and fixing the placement of things. I'm not the groups programmer though so do forgive if the final product is a bit... rough around the edges haha...!

Okay, that's good advice. I tend to have a set format for my games before it goes into production, but new influences, etc. can change them over time. I envision ends now so I think I just might add'em!

P.S Good, good! It's gotten mixed reviews when it comes to overall theme it conveys, but I personally like logo 2 and the logos in general so will probably stick with it.

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