[Drama][Sci-fi] ERASER-demo (PC+Android)

[tiya_nofurita]

NOW ERASER (DEMO VERSION 0.1) IS AVAILABLE ON GOOGLE PLAY

[theSardonyx]

Finally got to download this and played it two days ago.

First off, once again, the menu screen was pretty. And the music was enthralling. Very nice.

About the story line, okay, it's pretty interesting. Nice build-up and stuff. Freaking cliffy, btw. I noticed some grammatical errors, but I already forgot what exactly they were, so I'll just suggest proofreading. (I remember a mistake in the position of the word "have" somewhere... It made the sentence sound a bit awkward.) Other than that, I was pretty much hooked. Although I wish I had more to go on, more to grab onto, so to speak.

Art was good. (But then you might consider making Vio's legs a bit slimmer. Just saying.)

Overall, it was fine, for a demo. I hope you get the whole thing done soon. I'd love to see how you manage this.

[philip]

@tiya_nofurita-

I first played through this demo about six weeks ago, and when I got a notice today that there had been something posted on this thread, I called up the story and went through it again. My opinion hasn't changed, I thoroughly enjoyed what you have written.

I did notice that the latest poster recommended that you make Vio's legs a little slimmer. I hadn't really noticed, but went back and took a close look, and I cast my vote to have you leave her legs just the way they are! Really, such a minor thing has nothing one way or the other to do with the overall story. It's YOUR story, and you can present it any way you see fit.

Continued success, and I look forward to the release of the completed story.

philip

[tiya_nofurita]

Finally got to download this and played it two days ago.

First off, once again, the menu screen was pretty. And the music was enthralling. Very nice.

About the story line, okay, it's pretty interesting. Nice build-up and stuff. Freaking cliffy, btw. I noticed some grammatical errors, but I already forgot what exactly they were, so I'll just suggest proofreading. (I remember a mistake in the position of the word "have" somewhere... It made the sentence sound a bit awkward.) Other than that, I was pretty much hooked. Although I wish I had more to go on, more to grab onto, so to speak.

Art was good. (But then you might consider making Vio's legs a bit slimmer. Just saying.)

Overall, it was fine, for a demo. I hope you get the whole thing done soon. I'd love to see how you manage this.

Thank you for taking your time to try :'D Really appreciated it.

Ah yeah proofreading is a must on the full release. My English is not good enough either :p

Hmmm I thought Vio is already too skinny? So it's very unlikely I'll slim her legs :'D

Thank you once again for the support!

[tiya_nofurita]

@tiya_nofurita-

I first played through this demo about six weeks ago, and when I got a notice today that there had been something posted on this thread, I called up the story and went through it again. My opinion hasn't changed, I thoroughly enjoyed what you have written.

I did notice that the latest poster recommended that you make Vio's legs a little slimmer. I hadn't really noticed, but went back and took a close look, and I cast my vote to have you leave her legs just the way they are! Really, such a minor thing has nothing one way or the other to do with the overall story. It's YOUR story, and you can present it any way you see fit.

Continued success, and I look forward to the release of the completed story.

philip

Thank you for always keeping with this one >.<
Ah yeah it's unlikely I'll change her design, cause I already satisfied with the current one. Hahaha. But it's okay to receive some feedback and see what people think
I'll try my best to get more audience to read this too :'D cause I feel like getting very little feedback nowadays...

[octacon100]

Hey this looks great, I'll try it out on my phone today.

One question, did you have to do anything to get the different fonts working on your Android Build? I'm trying to set up an android build for my game and the fonts don't get built?

[octacon100]

Woah! Your demo is pretty damn impressive. I'm looking forward to the finished product! Let me know if you want a proofreader!

[tiya_nofurita]

Woah! Your demo is pretty damn impressive. I'm looking forward to the finished product! Let me know if you want a proofreader!

Thanks for the input What aspect you find it impressive? The story? The interface? Mind to specify it a bit?
I'd definitely need proofreader on near future if you're willing to help that's impressive

One question, did you have to do anything to get the different fonts working on your Android Build? I'm trying to set up an android build for my game and the fonts don't get built?

No, I didn't do anything special. It builts just fine. Maybe you should ask on Ren'py Question forum for this problem.

[octacon100]

The initial setup is impressive, I'm wondering what the link is between the first scene and the two main characters. I'm impressed how you set up the title screen with animation and the extra log screens. You've done a lot to make it look very different to the renpy default look. I'm still trying to dip my toe into getting my game set up on Android, and you've got everything looking very nice already!

[tiya_nofurita]

The initial setup is impressive, I'm wondering what the link is between the first scene and the two main characters. I'm impressed how you set up the title screen with animation and the extra log screens. You've done a lot to make it look very different to the renpy default look. I'm still trying to dip my toe into getting my game set up on Android, and you've got everything looking very nice already!

Thanks! I've done a lot of modification on GUI aspect indeed and it's a big accomplishment for me, glad that it's worth my time ^_^
I'm sure you can do the same if you follow some tutorials, but the best teacher is experimenting yourself

[tiya_nofurita]

New key visual for ERASER. Thanks for 750++ download! (including Android and PC version)

It seems I won't make it on 2014. But I promise I'll get it done on 2015

[Xerofit51]

That poster looks gorgeous~ I'll try this as soon as I can

[tiya_nofurita]

Thanks xerofit51! I want to hear your opinion on this (I owe you my opinion about Freak-quency too...)

I've updated the sprites ^o^ I hope they're better than the previous one! For now it's only Tito and Vio, more characters coming soon! Each sprites will have 2-3 variety on clothes.

Some expressions

[tiya_nofurita]

Version 0.2 :
1. Modified textbox, NVL box and backlog.
2. Added option "reset to default" into Configuration.







You can download the latest version on Google Play

[zankizuna]

Nice, More Upgrading for sprites!