Really sorry for the very late review >.<
I was really busy making new portfolios and CV for my internship training!
But now I'm free!
here's my review for your demo in every aspect I can think of (in advance, I'm sorry if any of this offended you in any ways):
- Art : I really like the art you made
it has quality and personality in it (it's like you're combining anime with american cartoon style which is pleasing to my eyes).
There's something I found that can be improved though : how Stanislav's left eye (from our side) looks too much to the side (not really looking at us) other than that is OK <3 andGODRaphaellooksreallyhandsomeIcaneathim //slap *ahem*, Aki is really like a perfectionist senior and I would love to see his softer side. Stanislav is very friendly c: I really can't decide which one is my fave now lol.
Btw I like how you use 3D environments for backgrounds :3
- Story: wow thick mystery right from the start xD I'm very curious with the story,
like 'What is this Ouva thing?', 'What happened to Iris's father and mother?',(You don't have to answer the two above, it just means you managed to pique my interest xD) but I think it would be better to give some info about what is this 'response mission' about? What I knew is that Iris will be going to Englora to do 'something' and in the process, Iris will have to expose who's the 'sabotager' and maaaan, Iris, what happened to you so you forget everything you do? this side of her is really interesting
But then again, maybe time will expose things I dont understand :3
- GUIs & BGMs : The GUIs looks good! very clean and the BGMs/sound effects are as clear as a crystal. Just to remind you, when I right-clicked my mouse, 'Load Game' is not there. No issue here! xD
Overall I can see that this VN really go to the side of Mystery and maybe Sci-Fi. It's a good start but the demo is too short for my liking >.< Oh, and please, please don't use too many biological names like panthogens? :') (Oh God, Aki will be so mad at me) or maybe you can make Aki explain biological terms to the readers.
Good luck with this project miss championkinoko! I'm supporting you from the back stage!