Sempai finally notice me but I somehow [Comedy][romance]

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Sempai finally notice me but I somehow [Comedy][romance]

#1 Post by Urybarros » Thu Feb 26, 2015 6:43 pm

Testing a logo:
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A history about Mari Futsuoka that finally confess to her Sempai, Aki Moteruki, ends up turning him into a Llama.
This is a free short VN with four possible endings that I'm working on. I'm writing the script but the main plot already outlined.
I plan on posting here my progress and a demo version in March. Tomorrow I will post more visual elements.

Op song: https://www.jamendo.com/en/track/112642 ... rt-version
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Mari - A normal girl that just wanted to make her high school love debut.

Aki-sempai - A popular sempai that always liked Mari secretly.

Aki-sempai (Llama version) - He still likes Mari but he misses his human hands.
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Re: Sempai finally notice me but I somehow [Comedy][romance]

#2 Post by YossarianIII » Thu Feb 26, 2015 7:39 pm

Hi, welcome to the board.

I clicked on your topic moderately interested, thinking it might be a typical romantic comedy. But then I saw the llama. That's awesome!
He still likes Mari but he misses his human hands.
That's a great character description for a llama. It's funny and sad and kind of romantic--in just one sentence.

Best of luck with the project!


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Sempai finally noticed me but I somehow turned him into a Ll

#3 Post by Rosstin2 » Fri Feb 27, 2015 5:23 am

I don't know what's going on in this project but I do know that you have comedy gold here.

Change your title to "Sempai finally noticed me but I somehow turned him into a Llama!", Comedy and Romance is already implied and that's a freaking hilarious title.

The attachment is also perfect 3-beat funny. Sempai (Llama version) cracked me the heck up.
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Re: Sempai finally notice me but I somehow [Comedy][romance]

#4 Post by gekiganwing » Fri Feb 27, 2015 7:29 am

The premise is kinda similar to PacaPlus, in which the main character's girlfriend is transformed into an alpaca. I recommend making sure that your story has enough distinct traits.

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Re: Sempai finally notice me but I somehow [Comedy][romance]

#5 Post by khnachi » Fri Feb 27, 2015 8:49 am

That title. That story. That LLAMA. I'm loving this. :lol:
I am kinda intrigue at how Mari would change Aki into a llama.
Aki-sempai (Llama version) - He still likes Mari but he misses his human hands.
This part just cracked me up.haha. Good luck with this project I'll be waiting eagerly for the demo.

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Re: Sempai finally notice me but I somehow [Comedy][romance]

#6 Post by CrimsonMoon » Fri Feb 27, 2015 10:35 am

Seems interesting. Just wanna point out about Aki-senpai's description. He's someone that likes Aki secretly? It's supposed to be Mari. ^^;
I'm curious how the sempai becomes a llama, lol, so I must check it out.
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Re: Sempai finally notice me but I somehow [Comedy][romance]

#7 Post by Urybarros » Fri Feb 27, 2015 8:46 pm

Thanks for all the comments guys, it really motivates me.
Rosstin2 wrote: Change your title to "Sempai finally noticed me but I somehow turned him into a Llama!", Comedy and Romance is already implied and that's a freaking hilarious title.
I tried to to use the whole title in the topic but unfortunately it doesn't fit ;_;
gekiganwing wrote:The premise is kinda similar to PacaPlus, in which the main character's girlfriend is transformed into an alpaca. I recommend making sure that your story has enough distinct traits.
I totally forgot about that VN. I will take a look, thank you.
CrimsonMoon wrote:Seems interesting. Just wanna point out about Aki-senpai's description. He's someone that likes Aki secretly? It's supposed to be Mari. ^^;
Oops, fixed. Thank you.
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Some of Mari's facial expressions.

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