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PostPosted: Mon Aug 08, 2016 2:04 pm 
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Completed: I want 2 be single and Forget-Me-Not
Projects: Cry Girlhood, Dakota Wanderers, Sagebrush
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THE STORY SO FAR...

Ezra has come to a conclusion: he must drop out of college by the end of the semester. Amidst meeting new friends and rekindling neglected relationships, he'll say his goodbyes to an important chapter in his life and make way for the next.

Created as an entry for Yaoijam 2016.


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Ezra
Doesn't have any other redeeming talents besides his interest in science. Majoring in biochemistry. His current situation leaves him feeling confused and unmotivated to plan for the future. He's not the nicest guy on the planet, but at least he tries.

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Junya
Ezra's roommate and his long time best friend from childhood. He plays for the college football team. Junya's a guy with a sensitive heart and an open mind. It's very difficult to get him angry, but it's so much easier to make him cry. 

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Dion
A fellow student that meets Ezra's standards as a respectable as a lab partner. Though he's shorter than most guys and doesn't look his age, Ezra finds he's far from naive. He's composed and gives off that vibe that he knows more than he's letting on... 

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Lorenzo
Senior. IT major. Rumors have been going around claiming he's an apathetic robot, but Ezra finds he's all that plus a jerk. On the bright side, he fixes computers for a reasonable price. 

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Meera
Ezra's sister, who now works at a cafe near the campus since it's close to her high school. They don't really see each other often, but talk on the phone frequently.

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Arlene
She grew up with Junya and Ezra. She's an aspiring architect, lover of the arts, and also Junya's ex-girlfriend. Through the years Ezra's known her, she's universally known as an angel, and Ezra is sometimes obsessed with trying to find her anything but that.

GAME NOTES

This is pretty much an alternate universe featuring the cast of a another VN I've been working on called Dakota Wanderers. Due to being busy with other projects, my progress for that visual novel hasn't gotten far in the script. Since the project started in 2013, I've been worried about keeping the interest I have for these characters, so I figured Yaoi Jam would be the perfect opportunity to let loose and write my characters freely. Happy to say that working on this game for the past two months has been a total blast! I'm very excited to release this demo, and hopefully the full release won't be too far off.

This demo is roughly 16k words and may take anywhere between 30 minutes to an hour of gameplay. I looked over the script as much as I could, but there's always the possibility of having errors. Let me know if you encounter any bugs or grammatical slip ups.

Also, any feedback on the demo would be much appreciated! The full release is still in the works, so any insight on how to improve the experience would be great. Thanks!

***GET DEMO ON ITCH.IO***

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WARNINGS
Alcohol use + some foul language

CREDITS
Story and Art - Boniae
Backgrounds - Morguefile, my personal photos, Sims 3(dorm placeholder)
Music - Alan Ruckus, Sunsearcher, ZuikakuP, Greg Reiter, TAM music factory
Extra - Kia's transition wipes

PROGRESS

Outline – 100%
Script – ~80%
Art – 80%
GUI – 80%

Currently what I have written is a little more than 30k. I don't plan on straying too far from my outline, which was more or less one route for each character.

PROJECT QUESTIONS
1. On your discovery of the game, does the premise interest you? (Would the synopsis benefit from being longer, or does the shortness of it make it interesting?)
2. Which character are you interested in?
3. Some expectations for the full game?
4. After playing the demo, any suggestions or critique?

Updates
  • [8/7/2016] Demo released in time for yaoijam deadline
  • [1/12/2017] After a long hiatus, I started picking back up on SB. Organized my outline for all my unwritten scenes.
  • [1/30/2017] Up to about 4k more to the script, nearly done with Dion's route.
  • [3/9/2017] +2k words, Romance scene for Dion complete
  • [3/25/2017] Dion's route is averaging more than 20k words! Woo! ^^
  • [5/22/2017] Dion's route and Junya's routes are completely finished.

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PostPosted: Fri Mar 10, 2017 12:39 am 
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Oh boy, I haven't updated this thread in awhile! For anyone keeping track of this project, I'm slowly but surely chipping away at the progress in this. I just got done finishing up a super long romance scene for Dion (the scene itself is just about 7k words, but overall Dion's route is about 12k at this moment.) I have two more scenes to write in Dion's route until his side will be finished. The rest would be to work on Lorenzo's route and some extra story scenes.

To anyone interested in an in depth information about what needs to be done in the game, I have a post up here on my blog. It's kind of bummy with how slow this is going due to some other things I've been juggling outside of writing, but I'm really set on Sagebrush and want to see it complete. Thanks for checking in! :D


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PostPosted: Mon May 22, 2017 8:41 pm 
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Another update! Things are looking pretty good for the game. Dion and Junya's routes are completely finished, and all that's left is Lorenzo's route and two or three big scenes. There's also little filler scenes (short map stuff when there's really no event) to do as well. Now that I've written quite a bit, I'm now going to shift my focus on programming the game and can hopefully start uploading some screenshots.

I've also added some project questions for any of those who are interested in the game. Thanks!

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PostPosted: Tue May 23, 2017 12:45 am 
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Glad to see you're still working on this! I liked Forget-Me-Not, so I'm looking forward to seeing you take on a longer story. :) I'm definitely interested in a story about a young adult who's trying to figure out what to do with his life, and Dion sounds really cute. Good luck with the rest of development!

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PostPosted: Tue May 23, 2017 2:16 pm 
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HOW DID I MISS THIS,,
You're one of my favorite artist AND developer in general, so eyes emoji at this project, definitely. Your art just gets better and better-- I love it.

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PostPosted: Wed May 24, 2017 6:27 am 
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It seems I have missed this one among the ongoing game posts... :/

Gonna fix that as soon as I hit home and I download the demo!

So far, I love the character sprites, especially the main character(he's really cute, and easy to relate to. Been there, done that) . The university setting and slice of life theme is nice for a short visual novel like this, so I'm looking forward to play it!

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