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Finding Paradise (GxB otome, school life)

#1 Post by MioSegami » Mon Oct 03, 2016 9:51 pm

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Plot:
Anamari's parents died from a train crash when she was nine and moved in with her grandparents. Battling depression, her grandparents introduced Anamari to her parents' best friend who is a therapist agrees for her to come and live with him as a client. Living with them for the rest of her years she had grown close to their only son Collen. Years passed and Collen and Anamari now live together as her legal guardian. With her unrequited love to her long time crush Collen, who now has a fiance battles her emotions of unrequited love gets sent again to study abroad, but this time to a mysterious island bought by a shady blonde headed freak. This mysterious island is surrounded by cute boys, can she let go of this unrequited love hers? Or will she continue to carry past hurts and realize nothing has ever changed? While Anamari uncovers the secrets held in this lonely island; she is forced to face her emotions once and for all.
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CHARACTERS

Anamari (Protagonist)
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-17 kiddo who suffers unrequited love



JACKSON
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-32 YEARS OLD FREAKY BLONDE WHO HAS 2 KIDS AND A WIFE.
Quote: "Hey it's me Jackie!"

MARIUM
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-24 YEARS OLD SELF CAUTIOUS FIANCE OF COLLEN
Quote: "You're no babysitter!"

OBTAINABLES


COLLEN
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-23 Has a fiance, however, grows complicated feelings.
Quote: "I just want you to have the Best."


SAGA
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-21 YEARS OLD WHO KEEPS THE BLACK IN STYLE.
Quote: "Hey Midget."

JAYDEN
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-17 YEARS OLD WHO'S GONE REBELLIOUS
Quote: "It's none of your business."

CALVIN
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-18 YEARS OLD "WHITE GHOST" THAT WONDERS THE BUILDING OF CROTOS BOARDING HOUSE.
Quote: "I guess being kind is being rude."

VINCENT
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-17 YEARS OLD BABY FACED WITH A SHORT TEMPER.
Quote: "I'm not good with Sorries."

FONG
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-17 YEARS WHO HATES SOCIALIZING
Quote: "Huh? Oh."
Please feel free to pose any questions about this Otome VN!

MY QUESTIONS FOR YOU
***I am curious what do you think of the plot so far and the characters?***
***Who is the character you're most interested and will try for?***
***If it doesn't sound interesting what does it lack? So I can further improve?***


Extra informations:

* 6 obtainable characters.
* 12 endings total (approx- maybe more or less depending on the finished outline).
* 1 good ending and 1 bad ending.
* CGs.
* Fong's route has to be unlocked through Saga's route!
* The story takes place approx. 9 months, each month will have important dates so you won't be playing for exactly 30 or 31 days.
Last edited by MioSegami on Sat Oct 08, 2016 5:03 pm, edited 10 times in total.
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Re: PATUKA PRIVATE PARADISE (GxB otome)

#2 Post by TazTheFirst » Mon Oct 03, 2016 11:09 pm

This looks good :D
My W.I.P Project :D --- viewtopic.php?f=43&t=40640

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Re: PATUKA PRIVATE PARADISE (GxB otome)

#3 Post by MioSegami » Tue Oct 04, 2016 1:00 am

TazTheFirst wrote:This looks good :D
Thank you~!!!
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Story: 15% complete
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Outline: 15%
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Re: Finding Paradise (GxB otome, school life)

#4 Post by Konoi » Mon Jan 16, 2017 6:45 am

It seems interesting! The style is pretty, and I like the story so far!

Answering your questions...
***I am curious what do you think of the plot so far and the characters?***
As I said, I like them. It's interesting that the main character is already in love with one of the boys at the beginning, but he's taken. And I like the fact you can pursue him anyway, or let go and find someone else!
***Who is the character you're most interested and will try for?***
Calvin I think, or maybe Saga. But I like them all!
***If it doesn't sound interesting what does it lack? So I can further improve?***
It's difficult to say - there is not enough informations for the moment for me to be able to tell you. I may answer this question in the future.


Good luck and keep up the good work! :wink:

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Re: Finding Paradise (GxB otome, school life)

#5 Post by CatyCats » Mon Jan 16, 2017 7:58 am

MY QUESTIONS FOR YOU
***I am curious what do you think of the plot so far and the characters?***
***Who is the character you're most interested and will try for?***
***If it doesn't sound interesting what does it lack? So I can further improve?***

1. I like it. Nice story and I'm curious how it will be. (kind of like a manga)
2. Fong or Saga. Depends on their personalities in the story. But also Collen because he seems like a brotherly type and it's interesting because it's unrequited love.
3. Like Konoi said, it is difficult to say. I was less interested first because you said "mysterious island" so I imagined it must be just a typical boring island with hot guys. Pick a place and you'll talk to your hot guy. But when I look at your picture, it seems more than a typical boring Island. It does look like paradise so, who knows what more that Island has in store. And I see that one of your characters is a ghost, so you could tell more about the island? Is it a resort? Is there a haunted house, is there an amusement park? :p But if it will be spoilery, then you better don't type more information about the island to keep it a surprise. :p

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