Tale of puppet [otome][GxB][romance|19th century|steampunk]

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Tale of puppet [otome][GxB][romance|19th century|steampunk]

#1 Post by heerokun » Wed Jan 25, 2017 4:02 am

Tale of puppet
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hi~ XD
Seren's popularity is too high.
So we made a game to attack Seren.
I made it for someone who likes Seren.

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<hanan>
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<Kyle>
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<Ran>
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<Carlos>

Release April 31, 2017
Thank you :D
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#2 Post by Mammon » Wed Jan 25, 2017 4:31 am

Sounds interesting, but I hope a translator/proofreader will smoothen over the English version before the release. There wasn't a single image without a few grammatical or spelling errors, and I sometimes had a hard time understanding what they were talking about in the first place. The audience will be able to handle a few errors, but I can already tell that this level of English will alienate the Western market.
Edit: The Korean version isn't finished yet so it's only logical that they haven't hired an English proofreader yet to improve upon what's essentially still a very early promo for the English market. My bad, I thought that this original version was near release when I saw that they were announcing English and Japanese translations.
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#3 Post by heerokun » Wed Jan 25, 2017 4:41 am

Mammon wrote:Sounds interesting, but please tell me you're planning to get a translator/proofreader to redo the English version before the release. There wasn't a single image without a few grammatical or spelling errors, and I sometimes had a hard time understanding what they were talking about in the first place. The audience will be able to handle a few errors, but I can already tell that this level of English will alienate the Western market.

Thank you ㅜ-ㅜ
I'm Programmer and publicist.
I do not speak English well.
I created this image here.

Now we are making korea version T-T if korea version make over, I will seek translator and proofreader.
Thank you for your advice. :D

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#4 Post by Mammon » Wed Jan 25, 2017 4:58 am

heerokun wrote:Thank you ㅜ-ㅜ
I'm Programmer and publicist.
I do not speak English well.
I created this image here.
Now we are making korea version T-T if korea version make over, I will seek translator and proofreader.
Thank you for your advice. :D
I'm sorry to start of your WiP thread so negatively, but better to hear it now than after you release it, right? :D Besides, your English seems good enough for an English-only proofreader to figure out what it has to be, so that will spare you the headache of finding a Korean-English translator at least. Unless you already found one, of course.

And I redact my last comment about alienating the Western market, there's no reason to expect the English version to be flawless already if the Korean version isn't completed yet. :wink:
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#5 Post by heerokun » Wed Jan 25, 2017 5:12 am

Mammon wrote:
heerokun wrote:Thank you ㅜ-ㅜ
I'm Programmer and publicist.
I do not speak English well.
I created this image here.
Now we are making korea version T-T if korea version make over, I will seek translator and proofreader.
Thank you for your advice. :D
I'm sorry to start of your WiP thread so negatively, but better to hear it now than after you release it, right? :D Besides, your English seems good enough for an English-only proofreader to figure out what it has to be, so that will spare you the headache of finding a Korean-English translator at least. Unless you already found one, of course.

And I redact my last comment about alienating the Western market, there's no reason to expect the English version to be flawless already if the Korean version isn't completed yet. :wink:

Thank you :D
I will release the English version perfectly.
I will study English hard, too.
have a good day >^<

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#6 Post by LizardRobot » Fri Jan 27, 2017 4:46 pm

The art is very skillful and beautiful! I like the styling shown with so much text at once, because I like to be able to read a lot at once! I think I might change slightly how I'm going to format my game after seeing this. ^^ I look forward to the English release!

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#7 Post by sicklesium » Sat Jan 28, 2017 11:09 am

I saw this on twitter~ I'm definitely interested in the artstyle and the plot seems relevant to me. I think Hanan has to be my favorite. :D
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#8 Post by heerokun » Sun Jan 29, 2017 3:44 am

Hi ~
Korea is a holiday seollal
Lunar new year's day :)
I wish you all the best
It is Korean traditional costume.
selen is beautiful >^<
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#9 Post by heerokun » Sun Jan 29, 2017 4:04 am

sicklesium wrote:I saw this on twitter~ I'm definitely interested in the artstyle and the plot seems relevant to me. I think Hanan has to be my favorite. :D
Oh Thank you I'll do my best! ^^
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#10 Post by heerokun » Sun Jan 29, 2017 4:06 am

LizardRobot wrote:The art is very skillful and beautiful! I like the styling shown with so much text at once, because I like to be able to read a lot at once! I think I might change slightly how I'm going to format my game after seeing this. ^^ I look forward to the English release!
Thank you very much XD
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#11 Post by Zelan » Sun Jan 29, 2017 1:45 pm

The drawing is beautiful! Thank you for the well-wishes. c:

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#12 Post by LeonDaydreamer » Mon Jan 30, 2017 7:04 pm

The artwork is beautiful :)
But as mentioned here you'll definitely have to go through a good editor for the English version.
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#13 Post by Hojita » Wed Feb 01, 2017 7:02 pm

Not much to add, but yes:

-Character art is beatiful. Though the GUI?/graphic part doesn't really fit with it.
-As almost everyone said, your team will need a english proofreader/translator. So far the english used is understandable, but it's not a 'fluid' read.
-The srorty so far is interesting.

Keep the good work!

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#14 Post by Ekkoberry » Wed Feb 01, 2017 11:26 pm

This looks gorgeous! I really like the artwork and the character design, looking forward to seeing more!

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#15 Post by heerokun » Sat Feb 04, 2017 5:55 am

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We have newly translated.
Are you satisfied with this translation?

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