The particularly uncouth would say that the Celeste are made from an unholy union:
a mother with magic and premonition and a father whose hands grow poison can only bring their offsprings further downhill.
Their three sons see visions of different times.
Emilyan "Em" Celeste prefers never to think of his family and their dubious legacy. Dysfunctional is putting their messy history lightly; more aptly, perhaps, they're a collective failure.
Thala Wandestinee is destined for greatness. It is a great shame that he will die by the end of the summer.
Confronted by potential change, Em must decide how he thinks the future should be-- or, indeed, whether fate is really what he thought it's always been. All that, with Thala's fate and life in his hands.
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Em Celeste himself lived half his life in a village down the mountains. The only straight truth he's ever said was his last name. What he's never said, though, was why he's here: in the heart of the province, saving Thala Wandestinee from his would-be assassins.
(He is, however, indeed a dipshit.)
Anastasiy Celeste made quite a name for himself by being a proud asshole. A swordsman with two students, it's amazing he's hold out this long, with how his abilities to peer into the past nets him quite a powerful capacity for deep-seated grudge. Em's worst nightmare, usually.
Mira Celeste, "Ma" as she was known by Ann, "Mother" as she was known by Ally, and "Sir", courtesy of Em, had been deceased for the past six years. The shadow she left behind still lingers, haunting the minds of her sons.
Sometimes, they say that Em will be her successor.
1. Is the premise interesting?
2. If you've played the demo-- is the pacing confusing? (eg. the transitions between times and scenes, etc.)
3. Are the dialogues too vague? Boring? Confusing?
4. Any comments and critique on the visuals?
Writing: 20% (16,270 words & 25 menus) (Demo Script COMPLETE