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Devil's Markings on Kickstarter

#1 Post by sofiakuran » Thu Oct 26, 2017 7:42 am

I have started a kickstarter game for Devil's Markings. https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/19 ... s-markings with a video for the VA. The game is completely voice acted. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QlrOM6iAy2o

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Re: Devil's Markings on Kickstarter

#2 Post by Mikomi » Thu Oct 26, 2017 11:07 pm

Hiya, the art for this looks great! But, you should probably add more than just two links to your thread here in order to get people interested. Take a look at the other threads in the WIP forum, especially those that are on Kickstarter as well- all of them have examples of art, what the story is about, etc. It shows not only what the game is about but is also adds a bit of professionalism to it, as it shows you care about the product enough to put more effort into advertising it.

Also, where is the demo? I'd like to play it, plus the forum requires you have a demo. Feel free to quote me back with a link, I look forward to it!
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Re: Devil's Markings on Kickstarter

#3 Post by woobv » Fri Oct 27, 2017 12:36 am

I definitely agree with Mikomi! Showing some artwork on your thread will definitely add more interest! ^ ^
The art is SO gorgeous! I would love to know who did the character sprites. :D

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Also, where is the demo? I'd like to play it, plus the forum requires you have a demo. Feel free to quote me back with a link, I look forward to it!
It looks like the link is here: https://chanda125.itch.io/devils-markings-prequel

I haven't had a chance to play, but hope to do it soon! ^ ^
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Re: Devil's Markings on Kickstarter

#4 Post by PMscenarios » Fri Oct 27, 2017 12:42 am

A kickstarter is a potential backer's intro to your project and why they should want to back it - right now you're doing yourself no favours by introducing potential visitors with a setting outline that's almost unparsable.

What/who are Akeens?
What is the Yardrill planet?
Which priestess? Connected to who?
Who did he claim were behind the attack?
If the princess is the start of the Ingads breed, and the king isn't her and her brother's father, how can he claim to be an Ingad?
Which planet does the princess wake up on?

Another thing that's important to remember is that the Kickstarter is the backer's intro to your writing and game. If your descriptions on the Kickstarter is flawed, then most backers will assume the same is true for your game. I'd really recommend finding an editor to go over your writing to, well, to improve the language. Right now there's a few descriptions that don't convey what you want to convey.


I'm not saying this to be mean, but to help you reach a wider audience for your kickstarter and game.
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Re: Devil's Markings on Kickstarter

#5 Post by Mikomi » Fri Oct 27, 2017 9:19 pm

woobv wrote:
Fri Oct 27, 2017 12:36 am
Mikomi wrote:
Thu Oct 26, 2017 11:07 pm
Also, where is the demo? I'd like to play it, plus the forum requires you have a demo. Feel free to quote me back with a link, I look forward to it!
It looks like the link is here: https://chanda125.itch.io/devils-markings-prequel

I haven't had a chance to play, but hope to do it soon! ^ ^
Ah, thank you so much woobv for the link! :D ❤️
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Thu Oct 26, 2017 7:42 am
I have started a kickstarter game for Devil's Markings. https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/19 ... s-markings with a video for the VA. The game is completely voice acted. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QlrOM6iAy2o
If you ever want to share your Kickstarter / talk about it more, I help moderate a VN developer channel on Discord! Feel free to reply back if you'd like an invite, but either way I'll be looking forward to this project. Good luck on this project!
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Re: Devil's Markings on Kickstarter

#7 Post by sofiakuran » Mon Oct 30, 2017 6:45 pm

I will answer all your questions in a bit. For now it is all a mystery

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Re: Devil's Markings on Kickstarter

#8 Post by sofiakuran » Tue Oct 31, 2017 10:42 am

What/who are Akeens?
What is the Yardrill planet?
Which priestess? Connected to who?
Who did he claim were behind the attack?
If the princess is the start of the Ingads breed, and the king isn't her and her brother's father, how can he claim to be an Ingad?
Which planet does the princess wake up on?

Akeens are a strong and proud race. Their lineage of fighters which is why Ingads are prone to call them barbaric. Ingads are intellectual beings in comparison therefore run Yardrill planet.
Yardrill Planet is the planet of origin where everything began. It was named Yardrill meaning Home in Ingad language, Ishlar.
Priestess and Queen Suisen is related to the Main Character. She was an oracle of sorts and could read into the future.
Guilen craved power enough to kill his wife and daughter or attempt to. He claimed that there were traitors amongst the party members who attacked the queen and killed everyone but were then killed by royal guards.
The princess' younger brother, son of Guilen and Suisen ended up being an Ingad and Guilen used his son's powers to gain control of the planet while claiming to be Ingad.
The princess awakens on Yardrill.

If you have anymore questions please don't be afraid to ask

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Re: Devil's Markings on Kickstarter

#9 Post by sofiakuran » Tue Nov 07, 2017 6:13 pm

Mikomi wrote:
Fri Oct 27, 2017 9:19 pm
woobv wrote:
Fri Oct 27, 2017 12:36 am
Mikomi wrote:
Thu Oct 26, 2017 11:07 pm
Also, where is the demo? I'd like to play it, plus the forum requires you have a demo. Feel free to quote me back with a link, I look forward to it!
It looks like the link is here: https://chanda125.itch.io/devils-markings-prequel

I haven't had a chance to play, but hope to do it soon! ^ ^
Ah, thank you so much woobv for the link! :D ❤️
sofiakuran wrote:
Thu Oct 26, 2017 7:42 am
I have started a kickstarter game for Devil's Markings. https://www.kickstarter.com/projects/19 ... s-markings with a video for the VA. The game is completely voice acted. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QlrOM6iAy2o
If you ever want to share your Kickstarter / talk about it more, I help moderate a VN developer channel on Discord! Feel free to reply back if you'd like an invite, but either way I'll be looking forward to this project. Good luck on this project!
I would like a link please

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Re: Devil's Markings on Kickstarter

#10 Post by sofiakuran » Tue Nov 07, 2017 6:13 pm

PMscenarios wrote:
Fri Oct 27, 2017 12:42 am
A kickstarter is a potential backer's intro to your project and why they should want to back it - right now you're doing yourself no favours by introducing potential visitors with a setting outline that's almost unparsable.

What/who are Akeens?
What is the Yardrill planet?
Which priestess? Connected to who?
Who did he claim were behind the attack?
If the princess is the start of the Ingads breed, and the king isn't her and her brother's father, how can he claim to be an Ingad?
Which planet does the princess wake up on?

Another thing that's important to remember is that the Kickstarter is the backer's intro to your writing and game. If your descriptions on the Kickstarter is flawed, then most backers will assume the same is true for your game. I'd really recommend finding an editor to go over your writing to, well, to improve the language. Right now there's a few descriptions that don't convey what you want to convey.


I'm not saying this to be mean, but to help you reach a wider audience for your kickstarter and game.
I have answered all your questions

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Re: Devil's Markings on Kickstarter

#11 Post by Mikomi » Tue Nov 07, 2017 9:58 pm

sofiakuran wrote:
Tue Nov 07, 2017 6:13 pm
I would like a link please
To the Discord server? Sure! We're in the #devtalk channel here -> https://discord.gg/Z6skErt
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