The Black Beast [Fairytale, Puzzle, VN] - Demo v2, added Hints box! Need feedback!

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The Black Beast [Fairytale, Puzzle, VN] - Demo v2, added Hints box! Need feedback!

#1 Post by ameliori » Fri Dec 08, 2017 8:21 am

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The Black Beast
Puzzle / VN Hybrid
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Download the Demo ver (alpha 0.6)

"Strange. With no more Time left to lose, we start losing parts of ourselves..."
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A point-and-click, visual novel hybrid about a crumbling dream world that Time forgot. Time is your most precious possession. Choose between helping the characters gain back what they have lost, or focus on your goals. Can you stop the dream from becoming a nightmare?

​This project is currently only in demo. Any feedback will be helpful!

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A nameable main character trapped in a crumbling dream world

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A mysterious gryphon cat

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A mouse girl who lost the ability to speak

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A kitsune boy who can't remember what he lost
And more whimsical characters...

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Demo Progress: 99%
Project Progress: 60%

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Art & Writing - ameliori
Writing Team - ameliori and colacat
Programming - marionette
Music - circus marcus, freesound

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1. Was the UI arrows easy to use? Any changes you might suggest for overall playability?
2. Which character are you most interested in?
3. What are your expectations about the story?
4. Your thoughts about the game's artstyle. Does it fit with the story?
5. Additional thoughts/suggestions.
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#2 Post by harajukulolita » Fri Dec 08, 2017 11:41 am

I really love the promo art for this, fabulous. Onto the game design, the overall aesthetic of the game is really interesting. The blank eyes kinda creep me out, especially the mouse girl lol but I still like the characters, dark themes like this are cool.
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#3 Post by Mikomi » Fri Dec 08, 2017 4:19 pm

I'm in love with the aesthetic of this, can't wait to play it!
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#4 Post by ameliori » Sun Dec 10, 2017 2:10 pm

harajukulolita wrote:
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I really love the promo art for this, fabulous. Onto the game design, the overall aesthetic of the game is really interesting. The blank eyes kinda creep me out, especially the mouse girl lol but I still like the characters, dark themes like this are cool.
Thanks harajukulolita! I'd love to hear your feedback after playing the demo!
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I'm in love with the aesthetic of this, can't wait to play it!
Oh thanks Miko! I'm excited to hear what you think!
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#5 Post by AntiquedFae » Sun Dec 10, 2017 7:07 pm

I adore the look and concept of this, just how dark yet whimsical it is even without any colours or fancy brushstrokes. I'd love to give it a try; I'm just wondering if it has any jumpscares or timed choices type things, since it mentions time as being so important?

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#6 Post by ameliori » Sun Dec 10, 2017 9:32 pm

AntiquedFae wrote:
Sun Dec 10, 2017 7:07 pm
I adore the look and concept of this, just how dark yet whimsical it is even without any colours or fancy brushstrokes. I'd love to give it a try; I'm just wondering if it has any jumpscares or timed choices type things, since it mentions time as being so important?
Ahh! No jumpscares or timed choices... Time is used more, hmm.. "symbolically" here? haha ^^;; I'm not sure how to explain! This is not a horror game so no jumpscares! Fairytales have a creepy but relaxed feeling about them, which was what I was going for! Hope you get to try it out!
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#7 Post by ameliori » Sun Dec 10, 2017 10:32 pm

Early playtesting sent us some suggestions so we added a "Hints" box in case you are stuck! More hints to be added in the future. If there is a hint you'd like to be shown in the game, or if you encounter any bugs, please let us know!

As always, you can download the demo here:https://fervent.itch.io/theblackbeastvn

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#8 Post by CeeCeeVA » Mon Dec 11, 2017 9:19 am

Wow! Everything looks amazing! The characters are adorable and everything else works great! ^.^
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#9 Post by Xerofit51 » Mon Dec 18, 2017 9:21 pm

The game crashed, it also had a virus trojan when I downloaded, just think you should know that

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#10 Post by ameliori » Tue Dec 19, 2017 4:28 am

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The game crashed, it also had a virus trojan when I downloaded, just think you should know that
Thanks Xerofit! Can you tell me which part of the game it crashed? Or did it crash on startup?
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#11 Post by Xerofit51 » Tue Dec 19, 2017 11:41 pm

it crashed on startup, it was a black screen and the it just closed itself. I used a windows 10

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#12 Post by ameliori » Wed Dec 20, 2017 12:22 am

Xerofit51 wrote:
Tue Dec 19, 2017 11:41 pm
it crashed on startup, it was a black screen and the it just closed itself. I used a windows 10
Thanks for letting us know Xeroft51! We're looking into the matter now!
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#13 Post by LeonDaydreamer » Sat Dec 23, 2017 3:34 pm

Ooh, really neat style! I like the pixel art type graphics. :)
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#14 Post by morinoir » Sat Dec 23, 2017 8:14 pm

One thing that really bothers me is the menu text on the bottom of the screen. You know, the 'save', 'load', 'skip', etc? I know they're renpy's default menu, but the text in unreadable, at least for me. I suggest you change the font to something more readable. Other than that, the rest looks promising. Best of luck to you and your team!
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