Twice Reborn [Drama] [Vampire]

[JBShields]

Twice Reborn

“Entering into a vampire society dedicated to the arts, Mark discovers frightening clues that his mentor committed a taboo, that he is being watched by a murderous renegade, and that he may have risked his soul. Determined to regain his humanity, Mark searches for the truth about vampires.”

progress updated 7/16/2018

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Decide Mark Delaware’s choices as he navigates through a world where vampires are real. How he treats those around him will determine his fate.

Project in progress.


About Twice Reborn:

• Genre: Drama, Vampires
• Setting: Modern-day Colorado
• Rating: PG-13 [violence]
• Length: est. 60,000 words for a single play-through
• Routes/Endings: 1 Best ending, 3 Good Endings, 2 Bad Endings, and a whole lot of "Dead Endings".
• Platforms: PC, Mac, [thinking of Android--not sure], will be released on Steam and Itch.io
• Commercial: Yes
• Release Date: 2019


Features:

• Characters may have slight changes to reactions to MC based on certain choices in the game.
• A LARGE cast of 21 characters
• Voice Acting
• Eye and mouth animations
• Translations in Russian and Spanish planned (languages may have later release); Voice acting will be English only
• Large Music template--at least 10 tracks
• 20 CGs; 20 Backgrounds
• Control the MC unless he falls into Bloodlust and goes berserk [Bloodlust option only available on certain branches]




The Society of the Arts:

Group of eccentric vampires whose purpose in their extended life is to be the patrons of the arts. They believe that humanity has potential to grow and they hold human life sacred.



Some mentor-like characters that may appear. I won't give any more details. Major spoilers come with them.



College buddies. Among them, there is someone who returns to the dorms with bruises. Will Mark have the courage to ask what happened?




The House of Skulls:

A small alliance of new vampires who reject the Silent Code or any type of “vampire authority”. Made of misfits and outcasts, the House of Skulls rebel against hiding who they are. They are the most disliked Vampire Family in Colorado, USA.

The Enforcer:

(not shown)

The whispered one among vampires. A killer of vampires who break the Silent Code. Any vampire who openly reveals their existence to humans who are not “donors” risks death by the Enforcer’s hand. There are also whispers of a vampire hunter in town. Can the Enforcer prevent him from learning of the Colorado vampires' existence?

Culture of Love:



Small group of hippie vampires. They fear the Enforcer.

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Writer
Judith B. Shields

Sprite, CG, and Animation Artist
Aeghite

GUI Artist
Mio

Background Artist
Rachel Marks


We're making this on Visual Novel Maker!

Progress:

Manuscript: 100%
Translating Manuscript into VNM language: 85%
Characters: 100%
CGs: 100%
GUI: 100%
Backgrounds: 80%
Music: we're doing a mix of stock music and original music. 80%
Building the game: 10%
Character animations: 100%
Background animations: 25%
Translations: 0%
Voice Acting: 0%

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So my questions are:

1) This VN has almost no love-story plot. How are people going to take that since most of the VNs we're seeing have heavy romance?
2) Do vampires interest you?
3) What other questions do y'all have for me? I can't give the whole story, but as the writer I can share what I think won't spoil things.
4) How interested are you for an Android release?
5) Of the languages listed-- is anyone interested in a Spanish, Russian, or German translation? Is there a language you think may be better for common VN reader audiences?

Thank you everyone for your feedback!

Updated 2/6/2018 with project crew listed.

[gekiganwing]

...Mark discovers frightening clues that his mentor committed a taboo, that he is being watched by a murderous renegade, and that he may have risked his soul.

I read this story pitch and thought about it. My first reaction is to ask "So what will happen next?" I am not sure what Mark's plan of action will be. How will Mark address what his mentor did or didn't do? How will he confront or avoid the renegade? How will he determine whether he's lost his humanity or sanity? Above all else, I'm left wondering what order he will do these things. One of these actions should be priority #1, and the others can wait until later since they're less important. Perhaps the reader has to choose what the protagonist's plan of action will be...

I haven't seen 'Delaware' as a surname. So I decided to search Google for 'delaware surname.' Fortunately, there were relevant results. (The name reminds me of the fictional character Louise Baltimore. )

1) This VN has almost no love-story plot. How are people going to take that since most of the VNs we're seeing have heavy romance?

You may benefit by marketing your story based on its strengths. In other words, emphasize what it does well. I think it can be better than marketing your story based on what it doesn't do.

It's easy to find VNs with an emphasis on a love polygon, deliberately paced slice of life storytelling, and sometimes porn-without-plot. That said, if you create a VN which has a different genre, pacing, and/or art style, then it will stand out. Some people will be more interested in your story because it's distinct. I say this because I have sought out and then purchased offbeat indie comics, video games, and VNs.

[JBShields]

Yes, in the story the main character has to react towards certain problems (or at least make a choice to think about them). Without giving too much away, this will impact the story's ending. This VN is very character-driven.

Thanks for your insight. I'll try to think of more ways to play upon its strengths.

[Zelan]

1) This VN has almost no love-story plot. How are people going to take that since most of the VNs we're seeing have heavy romance?: I don't know about "people," but I'm 100% okay with this. Still, I would suggest being upfront about this anywhere that the game is distributed - that way, no one goes into it expecting a dating sim and ends up disappointed or angry with the final product.

2) Do vampires interest you?: I'm impartial to them, but this idea of "societies" that the vampires divide themselves into has me interested.

3) What other questions do y'all have for me? I can't give the whole story, but as the writer I can share what I think won't spoil things.: Nothing yet, but I'll definitely be keeping an eye on this. c:

4) How interested are you for an Android release?: Not particularly. I don't have any space on my phone for any new VNs, haha. Plus, I prefer to play them on my laptop.

5) Of the languages listed-- is anyone interested in a Spanish, Russian, or German translation? Is there a language you think may be better for common VN reader audiences?: For me personally, as an English speaker, that's all I really need. However, I am trying to learn Spanish, and I've been seeing some Spanish language VNs around here that I'm excited to try reading. Once the Spanish translation is out, I might give it a go depending on price. In terms of a wider audience, there seems to be a large Russian audience for visual novels, so that translation should probably be a focus.

[JBShields]

Newest update!

Our Sprite and Animation Artist, Aeghite, has completed all of our sprite animations. I'm very excited. These animations are blinking and mouth movement when a character speaks.

[JBShields]

Update:

We finished uploading animations for all characters for our project Twice Reborn this morning. We have about 20 characters, each with blinking and voice animations--approximately 6 expressions each with about 2 outfits each.

This is different than the announcement above, because it's one thing to have them finished drawn, it's another thing to time them in Visual Novel Maker. Very exciting to see the characters come alive.

We don't have voice actors yet, and will be several months before we're ready for that stage.

[JBShields]

Update:

We're about 80% finished with music. (Will update main post).

What to expect?

Rock, chillhop, 90s hip-hop, classical, and vampire-y sounding tunes.

[JBShields]

Update on endings:

Did a count of how many endings Twice Reborn will have.

There will be 25 ENDINGS. Most of them are "Dead Endings" or the bad guys win. Otherwise, there's SIX GOOD or NORMAL endings! A single path can have anywhere from 20,000 words to 80,000 words.

I'm the writer on the project. Still formatting the long manuscript for appropriate project formatting, but we're moving along.

[JBShields]

Update:

We are now 100% finished with both CGs and Character Sprites!!! Thank you Aeghite!

Characters are all animated too for blinking and speech.