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I guess I am dense at these things. But when I clicked the answer 'you don't know how hard it is to have you as my teacher... it was a revelation
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I didn't get the bonus pic for the office kiss (or more)
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KashyaCharsi wrote:I didn't get the bonus pic for the office kiss (or more)
There's no bonus pic for the office kiss. Though there will probably be one in the longer version, and even a NSFW one if I get my project funded.
1st pic - get to the end, answer Alex's text, high points with Alex
2nd pic - high points with Penny, stay with your friends (ignore Alex's text)
3rd pic - high points with Ian, stay with your friends (ignore Alex's text)
4th pic - get to the end, answer Alex's text, perfect points with Alex
I'll try testing it again to see if I didn't inadvertently bungle some code somewhere. Thanks for the report.1st pic - get to the end, answer Alex's text, high points with Alex
2nd pic - high points with Penny, stay with your friends (ignore Alex's text)
3rd pic - high points with Ian, stay with your friends (ignore Alex's text)
4th pic - get to the end, answer Alex's text, perfect points with Alex
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I have managed it. Cute
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Yay!KashyaCharsi wrote:I have managed it. Cute
Thanks Kashya, you rock.
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Even if I was feeling awkward for them
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the price of knowledgeKashyaCharsi wrote:Even if I was feeling awkward for them
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Okay, so.
I played it through again, and it was just as enjoyable as the first version! Your writing is delightful, really, and it left me smiling like an idiot. (I went for the perfect ending, and then loaded and got Ian's CG. It's just so silly and adorable! xD)
I love how you've expanded on Ian's relationship with Mark and Phil. Made me all the more curious! Also, I actually like the new title of Ending 3 better. It sounds, hmm, more final than the former one. The new cursor and the other GUI things look really neat, way to go!
Here are some typos/other stuff I noticed:
I love it and I'm looking forward to the complete version. Good luck! <3
I played it through again, and it was just as enjoyable as the first version! Your writing is delightful, really, and it left me smiling like an idiot. (I went for the perfect ending, and then loaded and got Ian's CG. It's just so silly and adorable! xD)
I love how you've expanded on Ian's relationship with Mark and Phil. Made me all the more curious! Also, I actually like the new title of Ending 3 better. It sounds, hmm, more final than the former one. The new cursor and the other GUI things look really neat, way to go!
Here are some typos/other stuff I noticed:
"Alex, who had apparently was coasting, [...]"
"Very funny Mark." - There should be a coma before Mark
"Now I gotta work Saturday mornings for god knows how long!!!" - get rid of the two extra !'s, I don't think you need them. Also, shouldn't 'God' be capitalised? Not so sure about that, though
"Is the floor is spinning underneath your feet?"
"I've taken some time reflect on what happened [...]" - "to reflect on" or "reflecting on"
"If I've led you on in anyways Mark, [...]" - "in any way, Mark, [...]"
"You hurry your way over to Jojo's Cafe on the southside of campus." - Not sure, but shouldn't it be "south side"?
"Yeah, I guess I sort shot for the moon." - "sort of shot"
"From what I hear Mark, [...]" - "what I hear, Mark"
"Yeah, like I told you, Graham think's" - "thinks"
There needs to be an extra empty space after the ellipsis!
Aside from that, not much I can critique or comment on. If there is anything else I think of, I'll be sure to tell you."Very funny Mark." - There should be a coma before Mark
"Now I gotta work Saturday mornings for god knows how long!!!" - get rid of the two extra !'s, I don't think you need them. Also, shouldn't 'God' be capitalised? Not so sure about that, though
"Is the floor is spinning underneath your feet?"
"I've taken some time reflect on what happened [...]" - "to reflect on" or "reflecting on"
"If I've led you on in anyways Mark, [...]" - "in any way, Mark, [...]"
"You hurry your way over to Jojo's Cafe on the southside of campus." - Not sure, but shouldn't it be "south side"?
"Yeah, I guess I sort shot for the moon." - "sort of shot"
"From what I hear Mark, [...]" - "what I hear, Mark"
"Yeah, like I told you, Graham think's" - "thinks"
There needs to be an extra empty space after the ellipsis!
I love it and I'm looking forward to the complete version. Good luck! <3
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Aw, thanks Veniae. You're the awesomest. Thanks for the heads up on the typos. It's funny how I think I've gone over the game about 30x now and still keep missing the typos. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.Veniae wrote:Okay, so.
I played it through again, and it was just as enjoyable as the first version! Your writing is delightful, really, and it left me smiling like an idiot. (I went for the perfect ending, and then loaded and got Ian's CG. It's just so silly and adorable! xD)
I love how you've expanded on Ian's relationship with Mark and Phil. Made me all the more curious! Also, I actually like the new title of Ending 3 better. It sounds, hmm, more final than the former one. The new cursor and the other GUI things look really neat, way to go!
Here are some typos/other stuff I noticed:"Alex, who had apparently was coasting, [...]"Aside from that, not much I can critique or comment on. If there is anything else I think of, I'll be sure to tell you.
"Very funny Mark." - There should be a coma before Mark
"Now I gotta work Saturday mornings for god knows how long!!!" - get rid of the two extra !'s, I don't think you need them. Also, shouldn't 'God' be capitalised? Not so sure about that, though
"Is the floor is spinning underneath your feet?"
"I've taken some time reflect on what happened [...]" - "to reflect on" or "reflecting on"
"If I've led you on in anyways Mark, [...]" - "in any way, Mark, [...]"
"You hurry your way over to Jojo's Cafe on the southside of campus." - Not sure, but shouldn't it be "south side"?
"Yeah, I guess I sort shot for the moon." - "sort of shot"
"From what I hear Mark, [...]" - "what I hear, Mark"
"Yeah, like I told you, Graham think's" - "thinks"
There needs to be an extra empty space after the ellipsis!
I love it and I'm looking forward to the complete version. Good luck! <3
You know, I didn't even know this movie version existed. I've only read the story (Wilde is one of my favorite writers.)
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I, on the contrary, haven't read the novel, only watched the 2009 movie. Ben Barnes was Dorian, Ben Chaplin was Basil, and Colin Firth was Henry. This scene replaced the confession.
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