So, I finally was able to get it to work on Mac after clicking randomly about. 8D
Either way, here are my thoughts.
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Character Art
Character Dialogue
Character personalities and how they interacted with the protagonist.
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Some spelling/grammar mistakes (As is expected)
A few glitchy-pauses/breaks in the programming (Although I think that is common if you hit space bar really quickly after the text is done)
The beginning was nice visually, but I was a little put off by the writing. I had no idea what was going on, or why the protagonist was freaking out so much. (although I imagine it will be explained more so throughout the story.)
Over view: I think you've done a really good job making some of the characters have personalities that are easy to roll with and are funny, the character art is professional, and the background art is good as well, although sometimes a little strange looking. The story its self is still shaded to me, but once you get more and more done I'm sure it'll be easier for the reader to understand.
Keep up the good work!