Nacira [GxB][Comedy,Romance] beta testers CLOSED.

[ngareci]

Hi, finally after a long long pending, now Nacira is ready for beta-test.
I'm looking for someone who willing to be beta tester, or giving review/comment/feedback for error, typo, or how the story goes before I release the game.

WIP Thread

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Statistic:
The game contains 4,066 screens of dialogue.
These screens contain a total of 28,619 words,
for an average of 7.0 words per screen.
The game contains 25 menus.

Features:
- 5 boys endings and 1 secret ending.
- Over 15 CGs (Chibi & Painting)
- 13 Original background music


I'm closing the beta-test now and start working for final version.
But I'm still welcoming feedback in this/WIP thread for those who already download and play the beta-version.
Thank you!~

[tiya_nofurita]

I'm not going to promise anything (to be a "beta tester" or such), but I'll try it anyway
Let's see if I can give a meaningful feedback...

Oh noes my damn internet connection ! 2 days left just to download 60++ MB ???
It seems I've reached its limit...
kuota habis -_-
Well, maybe later...

[ngareci]

I'm not going to promise anything (to be a "beta tester" or such), but I'll try it anyway
Let's see if I can give a meaningful feedback...

Oh noes my damn internet connection ! 2 days left just to download 60++ MB ???
It seems I've reached its limit...
kuota habis -_-
Well, maybe later...

Hahaha, that's okay, we have the same internet connection here..
Just tell me if you might successful download it and have any feedback..

[azureXtwilight]

For some reason, there's this file named dc1703dfe20a3fc2544cdfe0c9112c7c10c5da21f30bb4ea98330c6e23dd4316.20069.3.extracted in the rar file you sent me. I wonder what it is... Also, one comment, the main menu text is a bit too hard to read and I got this error as soon as I click start:

[ngareci]

Aha, gonna fix it quick! o___o

[ngareci]

Updated! I'm forgot to copy the font, I'm sorry.. >_<

[clynefaction12]

I'll download this! Gosh, my net's too slow.. I'll play this first when it finishes downloading.

[try10]

I downloaded and started playing it. The love the art and the menu. The music, well, I think it doesn't really fit for this kind of game. ( but maybe it's just my personal preference ).

I couldn't finish all of the routes. ( only 3 endings).

1. Nacira doesn't find the real owner of the box (Puntadewa) and she marries Arjuna who has 38 wives!!!
2. Nacira finds the truth about why Nyikara left and she becomes a royal dancer. She keeps visiting Nyikara in the tower.
3. The ending Where Nacira tries to made Puntadewa and Nyikara to stay together,but they don't because she decides to leave. Nacira falls in love with Puntadewa and she confesses her feelings for him in the library when she becomes a royal dancer.

From what I played let me tell you my opinion about the characters: Prince Arjuna: How many wives does he have?! I HATE WOMANIZERS!!!!! 38?! Are you KIDDING ME?!!!! He is cute and has a devilish flirty personality, but I felt bad for poor Nacira when she had to marry him. ( 38 WIVES!!!)
Prince Sadewa: KYAAA!!! Sadewa is sooo sweet! I am in love with his personality.I can't want to try his ending! I think he and Nacira would make a very sweet couple! XD
Prince Nakula: I really like him. Although he acts a bit immature and evil, he still has moments when he shows us how he really is ( a kind hearted guy). The fact that he can cook and has the patience to teach Nacira ( although he yelled at her several times ) is a PLUS! I am looking forward to finish his path.
Prince Werkudara: I SERIOUSLY HAD NO IDEEA THAT HE ALSO LOVED Nyikara! At the scene where Nacira tells them who the real owner of the box is I saw that his behaviour was strange, but I didn't pay attention to it. I really want to know more about him!
Prince Puntadewa: At first I thought that the box owner is Arjuna ( I also had my suspicions about Puntadewa), but I decided to go for the first one and I was WRONG. I liked his sprite the most! His ending was also very sweet.

I found some grammar mistakes, but I didn't have the time to check them all so I'll tell you what I can remember.

When Nacira finds Nyikara's note. Your proofreader should check it again.

In the dialogue with Nyikara there are a few grammar mistakes.

Some sentences don't have punctuation.

At the anding of the routes the script should be checked again because I saw some grammar mistakes.

I hope this will be helpful. I will finish the next routes tomorrow and I'll post more. I had a really great time playing the game. You did an awesome job!

[ngareci]

I downloaded and started playing it. The love the art and the menu. The music, well, I think it doesn't really fit for this kind of game. ( but maybe it's just my personal preference ).

I couldn't finish all of the routes. ( only 3 endings).

1. Nacira doesn't find the real owner of the box (Puntadewa) and she marries Arjuna who has 38 wives!!!
2. Nacira finds the truth about why Nyikara left and she becomes a royal dancer. She keeps visiting Nyikara in the tower.
3. The ending Where Nacira tries to made Puntadewa and Nyikara to stay together,but they don't because she decides to leave. Nacira falls in love with Puntadewa and she confesses her feelings for him in the library when she becomes a royal dancer.

From what I played let me tell you my opinion about the characters: Prince Arjuna: How many wives does he have?! I HATE WOMANIZERS!!!!! 38?! Are you KIDDING ME?!!!! He is cute and has a devilish flirty personality, but I felt bad for poor Nacira when she had to marry him. ( 38 WIVES!!!)
Prince Sadewa: KYAAA!!! Sadewa is sooo sweet! I am in love with his personality.I can't want to try his ending! I think he and Nacira would make a very sweet couple! XD
Prince Nakula: I really like him. Although he acts a bit immature and evil, he still has moments when he shows us how he really is ( a kind hearted guy). The fact that he can cook and has the patience to teach Nacira ( although he yelled at her several times ) is a PLUS! I am looking forward to finish his path.
Prince Werkudara: I SERIOUSLY HAD NO IDEEA THAT HE ALSO LOVED Nyikara! At the scene where Nacira tells them who the real owner of the box is I saw that his behaviour was strange, but I didn't pay attention to it. I really want to know more about him!
Prince Puntadewa: At first I thought that the box owner is Arjuna ( I also had my suspicions about Puntadewa), but I decided to go for the first one and I was WRONG. I liked his sprite the most! His ending was also very sweet.

I found some grammar mistakes, but I didn't have the time to check them all so I'll tell you what I can remember.

When Nacira finds Nyikara's note. Your proofreader should check it again.

In the dialogue with Nyikara there are a few grammar mistakes.

Some sentences don't have punctuation.

At the anding of the routes the script should be checked again because I saw some grammar mistakes.

I hope this will be helpful. I will finish the next routes tomorrow and I'll post more. I had a really great time playing the game. You did an awesome job!

Waai!~ Thank you very much!
I was so glad you like it!!
And thank you for the grammar correction!
It really helpful~

1. Arjuna.
Yes, he's the most seductive character, and I guess 'don't judge a book by it's cover' be valid here..
So I make the endings like that, thus if we look at the real history of Pandawa, Arjuna actually really have many wives (And the wives name that I used in the story was the real name in history..)
2. Sadewa&Nakula&Werkudara
That's the exact impression that I want to show for the reader about their character. And I'm glad It success!
I'll be waiting for your feedback when you finished the route~
And for Sadewa, I put several sugar on him, try it..
3. Puntadewa
My coder said that it was so easy to guess the owner was Puntadewa. I'm glad it's not that easy..
And I also loves his ending the most!~

At first, I was so afraid that the readers will not like the endings, but your feedback ensure me that I'm on the right path!
Thank you!

[ngareci]

I'll download this! Gosh, my net's too slow.. I'll play this first when it finishes downloading.

#Carelessly forget to answer this
Thank you, I'll be waiting for your feedback~

[try10]

Sooo, I finished the whole game and this is my oppinion about the remaining endings:

I like Sadewa because he is sweet and smart. He seems to know a lot about plants because Nyikara taught him. Nacira also seems to posess some knowledge as well from her grandmother so I think that they make the BEST COUPLE! He is so shy unlike Arjuna ( when Nacira called him cute he got so flustered XD). Well, they both got flustered. "Why are you here? I'm here because the case is still open." ( I laughted so hard when I read those last 2 sentences). I really liked his route. The fact that he went for her after several years was sweet. HIS ROUTE IS FILLED WITH SWEETNESS.

Nakula : although I kind of want to gag him to stop talking ( when he is rude) he also has many good points ( funny, kind hearted when he wants to, knows how to cook) The fact that Nacira eats Nakula's food everytime when she is hungry and he he gets mad is hilarious. He also gives her "hellish cooking lessons." When they meet the are always bickering like two little kids .Those two are my second favourite couple! The ending was similar to his brother's, but I liked it. Imagive Nakula as a good husband trying to teach his wife how to cook.

Werkudara: It's funny how Nacira was at first very scared of him and then he turned out to be a good guy and a prince. He is really nice after you get to know him better. His ending was similar to his personality. He is a carefree person, so it's to be expected of him to love traveling.

For the endings, I would have loved to see a CG with a kissing scene. ( I am a hopeless romantic ).

Again, I found some grammar mistakes and a few sentences lack punctuation. Besides those things mentioned everything worked perfectly fine. I want to thank to all those who contributed in making this game. I had fun playing this.

[ngareci]

Sooo, I finished the whole game and this is my oppinion about the remaining endings:

I like Sadewa because he is sweet and smart. He seems to know a lot about plants because Nyikara taught him. Nacira also seems to posess some knowledge as well from her grandmother so I think that they make the BEST COUPLE! He is so shy unlike Arjuna ( when Nacira called him cute he got so flustered XD). Well, they both got flustered. "Why are you here? I'm here because the case is still open." ( I laughted so hard when I read those last 2 sentences). I really liked his route. The fact that he went for her after several years was sweet. HIS ROUTE IS FILLED WITH SWEETNESS.

Nakula : although I kind of want to gag him to stop talking ( when he is rude) he also has many good points ( funny, kind hearted when he wants to, knows how to cook) The fact that Nacira eats Nakula's food everytime when she is hungry and he he gets mad is hilarious. He also gives her "hellish cooking lessons." When they meet the are always bickering like two little kids .Those two are my second favourite couple! The ending was similar to his brother's, but I liked it. Imagive Nakula as a good husband trying to teach his wife how to cook.

Werkudara: It's funny how Nacira was at first very scared of him and then he turned out to be a good guy and a prince. He is really nice after you get to know him better. His ending was similar to his personality. He is a carefree person, so it's to be expected of him to love traveling.

For the endings, I would have loved to see a CG with a kissing scene. ( I am a hopeless romantic ).

Again, I found some grammar mistakes and a few sentences lack punctuation. Besides those things mentioned everything worked perfectly fine. I want to thank to all those who contributed in making this game. I had fun playing this.

Yay! #Read the comment with big grin
Thank you for the review and comment!
I'm really glad to know your feeling for each character, and that's the same thing that I hope the player would feel..
..and I become happier to know you had fun playing this!

I'm sorry, I'm avoiding kissing scene CG so it can be save to be played by all gender.. >_< and that's the reason why each endings is not too romantic. But I guess I'll make official romantic art for each character in the future..

[try10]

I don't think the kissing scene should be passionate or something. Just a little love so we can get into the romantic mood.

[ngareci]

I don't think the kissing scene should be passionate or something. Just a little love so we can get into the romantic mood.

Now you make me thinking to insert it before the performance scene..
Alright, that's really a good advice, I'm gonna try it..
Thank you!

[victorita9]

I love this game. The only thing I wish that could be there(and it doesn't take away the perfectness of the game) would to have a epilogue. When I saw Arjuna's ending I wish I could see the day in the life of that ending.