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Here is my short demo, also the intro of my game. It is short but has some choices already.

Here is my WiP post for more info : http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewto ... 11#p340011

Also if you like this demo and is willing to help (for free >.<) , I would be happy to get help. I'm more of a writer so i would be happy having more time for more stories.

Are you looking for critique for this demo?
In any case, I liked this intro! I enjoyed seeing all the characters' differences.

thanks, im happy that someone tried it out. yes im looking for critiques good or bad. It is good to know where is should head with this

Okay! Sorry to respond so late ahaha. I'll play through it again and try to offer helpful suggestions!

**edit: I replayed it!
First thing I noticed was lack of title screen... putting a picture in there would be great
I met Tim and
Your art is nice. I think the sprites would be better if the lineart was cleaner, if you know what I mean. Also, you did way better on backgrounds than I could ever do, but I feel like they could still be shinier and stuff XD
There are some spelling and punctuation errors, but nothing too big. Writing is really informal, so I don't know if that was what you were going for or what.
Also, what are you planning to do with the plot? There doesn't seem to be any apparent storyline so I still don't know much about the characters or the MC or anything... :/
Plus this demo was suuuuper short, so I can't really say too much about it
has lots of potential though! Good luck completing it