Rite - Chapter1 GAME DEMO [Adventure][Fantasy][Action]

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Rite - Chapter1 GAME DEMO [Adventure][Fantasy][Action]

#1 Post by mizuka » Sat Oct 25, 2014 12:16 am

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Hi guys,
This is my first visual novel game, Rite - Chapter 1( I planned it to be an episodic game)
Here is the download link for the demo: link
If you want to give a feedback, here is the discussion topic: http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewto ... 43&t=28725
I hope you enjoy the game. If there are any errors with the link, please tell me.

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#2 Post by piichimi » Wed Oct 29, 2014 2:50 pm

I'll check this out when I get home ^-^
looks cool

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#3 Post by mizuka » Wed Oct 29, 2014 6:45 pm

piichimi wrote:I'll check this out when I get home ^-^
looks cool
Sure, looking forward to here your feedback

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#4 Post by michan » Thu Oct 30, 2014 12:47 pm

Hi, michan here (again)! :)
Played the demo! So far it looks nice (though still incomplete). The sprites look good and the CGs go well with the storytelling. The interface is user-friendly, too. Exploration is a nice feature and I'd love to see how it would be implemented in the full game. It's also good that you added a notification regarding the qte feature (forewarned is forearmed, yes?).

As to what could be improved, I'd suggest getting a proofreader/beta reader for grammar/typos (wondering-->wandering, 'trying to be patience'-->patient, etc.) and to mitigate the redundancy in the text, such as:

'grant your wishes' and 'makes them come true' --> choose one of these phrases as they're pretty much the same

'they're not familiar with the place' and 'a country that they've never been before' --> Maybe just write it as 'It was a strange place; nothing looked familiar.'

Also, plotwise, is there any reason for
Yuyuko and Silver NOT to call the police or send Dan to a clinic or hospital instead of taking care of him at the inn?
I just find it curious, but if there's a twist... then <3

Would also like to hear more music in later releases of the game!
Coming SoonSometime Next Year! ^^
Detective Cross & the Raven Hall Riddles (DEMO OUT!)
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#5 Post by mizuka » Thu Oct 30, 2014 9:59 pm

@michan:
Thank you so much for trying out the game! I really appreciate it!
Yes, I would definitely need a proofreader and I will make some changes with the writing in game when the full game is released
I haven't decided whether i should hire a music composer or use the free resources. So far, the music is still a big problem to me.
michan wrote: Also, plotwise, is there any reason for
Yuyuko and Silver NOT to call the police or send Dan to a clinic or hospital instead of taking care of him at the inn?
I just find it curious, but if there's a twist... then <3
I can't tell you that because that would be a spoiler (but you're on the right track). I'm really glad that you notice that part.

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#6 Post by michan » Fri Oct 31, 2014 4:32 am

mizuka wrote:
I can't tell you that because that would be a spoiler (but you're on the right track). I'm really glad that you notice that part.
I knew it! :o Now I REALLY wanna play the full game!

Re the music, I'm sure there are plenty of cool tracks to be had (the Creative Commons thread on this board is a godsend :lol: ). And the great Kevin MacLeod's http://incompetech.com/!

More power to you, and best regards. :)
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#7 Post by mizuka » Fri Oct 31, 2014 10:33 am

@michan :
That's great. Thank you
I will try to release the full game asap

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#8 Post by philip » Wed Jan 28, 2015 2:39 pm

Just played through the demo and found it very interesting. Will look forward to future updates (Hope they come SOON!)

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