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Hi guys,
This is my first visual novel game, Rite - Chapter 1( I planned it to be an episodic game)
Here is the download link for the demo: link
If you want to give a feedback, here is the discussion topic: http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewto ... 43&t=28725
I hope you enjoy the game. If there are any errors with the link, please tell me.

I'll check this out when I get home ^-^
looks cool

piichimi wrote:I'll check this out when I get home ^-^
looks cool

Sure, looking forward to here your feedback

Hi, michan here (again)!
Played the demo! So far it looks nice (though still incomplete). The sprites look good and the CGs go well with the storytelling. The interface is user-friendly, too. Exploration is a nice feature and I'd love to see how it would be implemented in the full game. It's also good that you added a notification regarding the qte feature (forewarned is forearmed, yes?).

As to what could be improved, I'd suggest getting a proofreader/beta reader for grammar/typos (wondering-->wandering, 'trying to be patience'-->patient, etc.) and to mitigate the redundancy in the text, such as:

'grant your wishes' and 'makes them come true' --> choose one of these phrases as they're pretty much the same

'they're not familiar with the place' and 'a country that they've never been before' --> Maybe just write it as 'It was a strange place; nothing looked familiar.'

Also, plotwise, is there any reason for I just find it curious, but if there's a twist... then <3

Would also like to hear more music in later releases of the game!

@michan:
Thank you so much for trying out the game! I really appreciate it!
Yes, I would definitely need a proofreader and I will make some changes with the writing in game when the full game is released
I haven't decided whether i should hire a music composer or use the free resources. So far, the music is still a big problem to me.

michan wrote: Also, plotwise, is there any reason for

Yuyuko and Silver NOT to call the police or send Dan to a clinic or hospital instead of taking care of him at the inn?

I just find it curious, but if there's a twist... then <3

mizuka wrote:

I can't tell you that because that would be a spoiler (but you're on the right track). I'm really glad that you notice that part.

I knew it! Now I REALLY wanna play the full game!

Re the music, I'm sure there are plenty of cool tracks to be had (the Creative Commons thread on this board is a godsend ). And the great Kevin MacLeod's http://incompetech.com/!

More power to you, and best regards.

@michan :
That's great. Thank you
I will try to release the full game asap

Just played through the demo and found it very interesting. Will look forward to future updates (Hope they come SOON!)

philip