[Early Beta] An Encounter ~In The Rain~ [NaNoRenO2017]

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[Early Beta] An Encounter ~In The Rain~ [NaNoRenO2017]

#1 Post by Kokoro Hane » Wed Apr 05, 2017 6:55 pm

An Encounter ~In The Rain~

"A girl with a terminal illness stands in the rain, wishing for it to take her. Feeling as if she's a ghost, another girl takes notice and offers her umbrella."

!! IMPORTANT--PLEASE READ FIRST !!
This is an early beta version, and while it contains all 2,688 words of the story, please take note of the following:
- The sprites being used are placeholders. The official release will have sprites made by the CG artist, Lienai, which she is currently working on.
- There is only voice at the beginning; the doctor and the first 29 of the girl with the umbrella. The official release will have all the voices.
- For the girl's lines, some of it has odd leveling which will later be corrected and a few of the lines need retakes. I also apologise as I did not realise some distorted, so I might re-record my entire batch for her.
- I recommend going to Preferences and lowering the music volume just a tiny, tiny bit. Also note a few tracks may be quieter than others, which will be corrected for the official release.
- Feel free to give feedback on how you enjoyed (or did not enjoy) the game!
CREDITS:
A Tofu Sheets Visual production
Writing/Scripting: Kokoro Hane
Voice acting: Doodled (doctor), Kokoro Hane (girl with umbrella)
Placeholder sprites: Tokudaya
Event CGs: Lienai
Sound Effects: freesound.org
Music: Frozen Silence, SENTiVE, Stefano Mocini
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Re: [Early Beta] An Encounter ~In The Rain~ [NaNoRenO2017]

#2 Post by Oracle » Wed Apr 05, 2017 8:59 pm

It was quite excellent!
The sound track was a great fit for the story and the artwork was astounding. Also, the voice acting caught me way off guard and added a nice touch to the story. One thing you might want to improve on is some of the plot. I felt that Van became too "emo" way too quickly. At times it felt over the top and unnecessary. Maybe you could let Van and Natty build up a friendship before they open up to each other.

Keep up the great work!
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Re: [Early Beta] An Encounter ~In The Rain~ [NaNoRenO2017]

#3 Post by Kokoro Hane » Sun Apr 09, 2017 12:14 pm

Oracle wrote:It was quite excellent!
The sound track was a great fit for the story and the artwork was astounding. Also, the voice acting caught me way off guard and added a nice touch to the story. One thing you might want to improve on is some of the plot. I felt that Van became too "emo" way too quickly. At times it felt over the top and unnecessary. Maybe you could let Van and Natty build up a friendship before they open up to each other.

Keep up the great work!
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Hey there! I am glad you enjoyed it. As far as Van and how she acts, she's been sick for quite awhile--I guess it only appears fast since we don't see it progress, but at this point in the story she's been suffering for a long amount of time. Unfortunately, being a short story and with NaNo time constraints, it did limit a lot of development--I just wanted to make a short, but sweet story. This was actually a rework of an older project I had, which was a lot longer but I just salvaged the beginning, reworked it a bit, then added the beginning and end scene. But I definitely will take that into consideration for expanding upon someday, or in future projects of this nature. I am also very glad you liked the voice acting that was there!
PROJECTS:
Journey of The Scroll [COMPLETE][RPG]IGMC'17]
False Hope [Demo][WiP][SuNoFes'17]
Crystal Captor: Memory Chronicle Finale [COMPLETE][RPG][#1 in So Bad It's Good jam '17]
The Only One Girl [WiP][Up.5/20/2017][1stQ ver. released]
30 Kilowatt Hours Left [COMPLETE][GameJolt GDC Jam2016]

But dear God, You're the only North Star I would follow this far
Owl City "Galaxies"

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