I woke up in a hospital bed, no memories of my life before. After physically recovering, I've spent my days at my uncle's house, where depression, loneliness, and anxiety have plagued my existence. Due to work, my uncle is forcing me to move to a boarding school. I'm reluctant, but is this my chance to start life anew?
A chance to live, to love, to... make memories.
But these dreams... I feel like they're a fragment of a life I once knew. A life I've left buried.
Sarah is anxious, genuine and artistic. She's a loner who's acquired an unusual perspective of the world and life through tragedy and philosophy.
Jennifer is gregarious, energetic and spontaneous. She enjoys outings and banter with friends, but has a habit of taking things too far.
Danielle is pragmatic. conscientious and dry as a desert. She's stern and reserved in school, but she's free to be herself in her online world.
There are currently short segments into each girl's route and a bad ending.
This being an alpha version, I've relied on creative commons art and music for placeholders so far. It contains around 19k finely edited words, dispatched into succinct scenes that are designed to "Show, Don't Tell."
I would appreciate all feedback and constructive criticism.
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Downloaded this a couple of days ago and have spent some time playing through . . . still have more to discover.
It's a very interesting story . . . well told, and I will look forward to seeing the completion.
For an alpha release, this is darned good! spelling is fine and no horrendous grammar errors. Excellent job; keep up the good work! (And don't make us wait too long for more!)
"Finish what you start"
Thank you for taking the time to check it out and give feedback! It's much appreciated!
I had taken a hiatus after the initial release of the alpha due to life but I'm currently working on scenes following in the routes. I may release them soon on itch with a dev blog. But my goal is to get one route finished first to set precedent for the underlying story.
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