Art Dumpage! Show your art ^^

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Re: Art Dumpage! Show your art ^^

#1276 Post by Samu-kun » Sun May 04, 2008 6:01 pm

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#1277 Post by Hatomikazuki » Sun May 04, 2008 7:09 pm

=0 Art dump. Some of which are potential characters for my first VN game (Just random draft drawings...)....@__@''' I've never drawn action poses before, so I'm pretty sure the first girl's hips are far to low...But yeah...Any critique would be loved. =D
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Everyone here is really talented...So I'd love some feedback. =D (Some of these are rather old though...)

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#1278 Post by Cybeat » Sun May 04, 2008 8:50 pm

@mugenjohncel: Killing more girls, eh? Try this!
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#1279 Post by Sapphire Dragon » Sun May 04, 2008 9:54 pm

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#1280 Post by sake-bento » Sun May 04, 2008 11:37 pm

Ahahahaha...beautiful piece of work there, Sapphire Dragon. I laughed out loud and my roommate was wondering what was up. I decided it would be too hard to explain.

Cy, that monster looks really good. I think it would be cool to have a completely black screen and then see red glowing eyes first before the monster appears.

Hatomi, you've got some nice work. I especially like all the bright colors you used, and all your characters look really interesting. The first girl looks good, and I like her dynamic pose. But I think the way you positioned her legs makes it look like she has a very long stomach. I'm not too good at this sort of thing, though. A lot of others here will be able to offer you some better advice, though. XD

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#1281 Post by Sapphire Dragon » Mon May 05, 2008 4:18 pm

Commenting on Hatomikazuki, sorry I missed it when I was posting last time.

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Not too bad there, is she killnig the gingerbread man!? as you stated the body is too long. I think the problem is that you were trying to show the whole character but with a pose like that the head should be further down and the skirt will cover most of her. Other than that I think a bit more curve in her legs will go a long way to show a little more muscle build.

second:
I like this one the most. Good use of colour and the pixel shading looks nice, you might do well to try some smaller res pixel art like you would see in ds games or rpg maker.

third:
To be honest the colours just dont work for me and clash a bit but I like the design. you mind posting the b +w version of it?
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#1282 Post by Cybeat » Mon May 05, 2008 6:10 pm

Huh? No comment for me? Well, except for sake-bento. She's a good girl. By the way, are you a college student?

@Sapphire Dragon: Beat him down!

@Hatomikazuki: I like the second drawing.
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#1283 Post by bloodywyvern » Mon May 05, 2008 7:52 pm

Waaah...dying girls...dying girls...

Hatomikazuki- I like the drawings themselves (the third being my favorite), but the coloring style has me somewhat disinterested for the most part. I don't know what it is about me and being so picky with coloring XD

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#1284 Post by Sapphire Dragon » Mon May 05, 2008 7:54 pm

Are you asking me or sake bento in the "Huh? No comment for me? Well, except for sake-bento. She's a good girl. By the way, are you a college student?" ?

I only usually comment if people ask for critique though, and if I see them ask. sorry if you wanted otherwise. (I don't try to leave people out.)
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#1285 Post by uluuu » Mon May 05, 2008 8:37 pm

It's a maaaagical fairy (or something)~
Um. Yeah. This is an ancient character that I re-drew today. Uhh, critique please, if anyone feels like it?
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#1286 Post by Cybeat » Mon May 05, 2008 9:59 pm

@Sapphire Dragon: I was kinda talking to both of you. Sorry for the confusion. I was only talking to sake-bento when I asked if she was a college student. You seem like a college student yourself (I think everybody here is).
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#1287 Post by Jake » Tue May 06, 2008 4:30 am

Cybeat wrote:You seem like a college student yourself (I think everybody here is).
You'd be wrong; a good number of us are past that and have jobs.

And then some of us are past that and have avoided getting jobs. :P
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#1288 Post by Scout » Tue May 06, 2008 1:21 pm

Jake wrote:You'd be wrong; a good number of us are past that and have jobs.

And then some of us are past that and have avoided getting jobs. :P
And some of us are before that and have jobs!

It turns out that it is very, very hard to generalize here. ;)

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#1289 Post by sake-bento » Tue May 06, 2008 2:18 pm

Cybeat wrote:@Sapphire Dragon: I was kinda talking to both of you. Sorry for the confusion. I was only talking to sake-bento when I asked if she was a college student. You seem like a college student yourself (I think everybody here is).
I am a college student.

Ask me again in two weeks and you'll get a different answer. ^_-

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#1290 Post by Sapphire Dragon » Tue May 06, 2008 8:54 pm

at uluuu:

Much cleaner than the last one, with a nice selection for a limited colour pallete.
The hand is quite a bit too small though, and I noticed you left a few edges unifinshed again, perhaps you are gatting a bit too impatient when colouring.

The stars at the bottom would look nicer I would think being in the milder tone but same colour as the stars around the top rather than leaving blank and alnthough subtle I think the space from her arms to her head is a bit stretched, its hard to imagine the character body underneath.

For the face I cant really say anything bad about it, I think it looks great, especially the eye.

The cloud at the bottom seems like almost finished to me, seems to be missing something. perhaps a slight shaded tone towards the bottom or a little thicker linework maybe?

what might also look nice is a bit of creasing on the cloth around her right arm where it bends.

Nice work again, looking forward to more.
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