Art Dumpage! Show your art ^^

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Re: Art Dumpage! Show your art ^^

#2161 Post by Coatl » Mon Nov 16, 2009 2:08 am

yeah can someone give me critique?
some of it is still in the beginning phases
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#2162 Post by JinzouTamashii » Mon Nov 16, 2009 8:01 am

Picture worth a thousand words, yadda yadda...

You gotta tighten up the lines and flow of the pose and draw using basic shapes to give everything form. After that, fuction. Form follows function.

You want attitude? Tilt her head. Puff out that chest. Make her stand firmly planted, don't have it looking for she's falling off to the side there.

The head is really, really large even for a 5/6 head toon figure. (Darn, I keep on making that arm coming down too long or the arm on the hip too short... if you use this draft to redraw your sketch, fix it please.)
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#2163 Post by JinzouTamashii » Mon Nov 16, 2009 7:33 pm

Oh, looking at my sketch again, it's not dynamic—it's almost laconic.
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Here's a dynamic "S" shape example. Not mine.
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#2164 Post by Tsundere Lightning » Tue Nov 17, 2009 6:57 pm

Oh god, this old picture of Gabriel Winter is just... urgh. Color in the face is wrong, she apparently has evolved beyond the need for organs with a waist that thin...
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#2165 Post by JinzouTamashii » Thu Nov 19, 2009 9:54 am

I'm working on several pics at the the moment because I took this week to try to "level up" my art and re-learn some of my programs again... this is most definitely a work in progress. I used the rule of thirds for composition but I need something going on in that lower righthand corner and that's what I'm going to do when I get home if my PC didn't overheat and shut down again.

The theme of this one is the last kind of advanced robot and this plant still around ("The Last of Their Kind")
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#2166 Post by qq » Fri Nov 20, 2009 4:56 pm

A recent sketch. Feel free to comment.
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#2167 Post by Tsundere Lightning » Fri Nov 20, 2009 5:16 pm

JinzouTamashii wrote:I'm working on several pics at the the moment because I took this week to try to "level up" my art and re-learn some of my programs again... this is most definitely a work in progress. I used the rule of thirds for composition but I need something going on in that lower righthand corner and that's what I'm going to do when I get home if my PC didn't overheat and shut down again.

The theme of this one is the last kind of advanced robot and this plant still around ("The Last of Their Kind")
The composition is nice, and the models are good, but that texturing makes it look like it's made of redwood... and that robot falls right smack into the Uncanny Valley. I would honestly make it LESS realistic, unless the goal is to make it creepy.
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#2168 Post by JinzouTamashii » Fri Nov 20, 2009 7:27 pm

Tsundere Lightning wrote:that texturing makes it look like it's made of redwood...
Thank you, that's what I was going for! I didn't want a purely metal look but something like corroded metal, glass, and wooden-alloy (or coating). Kind of to go with the plant and vines I'm going to add in. I wanted this image of the land that man has ruined and his creation which inherits the Earth and swear to protect it.

I eventually want to tangle wires and vines and roots and moss and lichen altogether.

Do you really think the face is so bad?

I'm not sure what I would change. I could remove the eyes and add in something abstract, I suppose. Like maybe knots of wood. I was already thinking of working that organically into the texture, anyway.

I also rendered out another part today to fill up the empty space to the right.
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#2169 Post by Tsundere Lightning » Fri Nov 20, 2009 7:46 pm

It's mainly the eye, yeah. Replace it with something more iconic and it should be fine.

Okay, just wanted to make sure that was intentional; most robot designs are plastic and metallic, so that struck me as odd, not deliberate.
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#2170 Post by JinzouTamashii » Fri Nov 20, 2009 8:31 pm

I thought it was interesting you could tell it was wood-like even from the lowres WIP pic and the thumb... I guess texture really is very important in CG work, just like conceptart.org said.

Do you find this kind of eye interesting? It certainly...... draws attention.

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#2171 Post by JinzouTamashii » Mon Nov 23, 2009 12:44 am

Did a painting of some pigeons using a ref as a study to learn a new program, ArtRage.
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#2172 Post by sake-bento » Mon Nov 23, 2009 4:11 am

Not sure what I'm even going to do with this, but here's a digital ink I did of an old character of mine. Her name is Cuprum, if it helps. (Helps what? I don't know.)
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#2173 Post by JinzouTamashii » Mon Nov 23, 2009 6:23 am

Overall, it's pretty good. Could use some help in face symmetry and in the shoulder, maybe the hips could be more curvy if that's really a girl.
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#2174 Post by mrsulu » Mon Nov 23, 2009 10:34 pm

sake-bento wrote:Not sure what I'm even going to do with this, but here's a digital ink I did of an old character of mine. Her name is Cuprum, if it helps. (Helps what? I don't know.)
I kind of like it but it needs more. I agree it could be more symmetrical, but I really feel like it's too tight. I can feel all the time you spent on it. Maybe loosen up with some sketches first until you find smooth curves that will bring it to life? Push the pose out to exaggerate it.

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#2175 Post by JinzouTamashii » Tue Nov 24, 2009 7:00 am

Wait... I think I have something like this from the back... ?

Well, not exactly.

It's not by me, but yours made me think of it so that might count for something. The arm holding the gun looks stupid (broken wrist, needs to more turned toward the front), but how she's carrying that sword isn't.
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