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Woooow!! That's something I haven't done! Nice work, Hoyuu!

@Hoyuu: nice sketches! I feel like a sketched butt is safe for work.

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Finally finished working on this. Technically it's not done but I'm exhausted so I give up. Oh, and it's for a background! Which I'll share when the render is done. The bike is a Harley Iron 883 2016 model. Or it sort of is. I took liberties because I didn't have the best references and I have limited time.

Hey guys, new to this forum and this is my first post here.

Basically, for the past several month I have been working in a team of three people working on a VN. There is only one artist as part of the team tho, who does everything art related basically. She has been awesome so far, especially when it comes to background (at least the quality satisfies me), but now that we moved on to the characters, something feels off about them, and I'm not even sure how to express this. So I'm looking for feedback.
The quality of her art is good, so not complaining about that, but I'm looking for a feedback style-wise. This is the first sketch of hers and of our first character (neither protagonist nor antagonist).

To me it just feels like the characters lack 'volume', 'liveliness' and look 'too 2d'. Please let me know what you think of art, and also if you agree with my comments, let me know how can I express more specifically which parts she should fix for the style to suit the VN more.

Disclosure: The artist isn't very familiar with anime/manga/visual novels, so this might be part of the issue. Also, in case this matters, the VN is going be in genres of fantasy, action, detective, mystery, city fantasy, supernatural, and a small touch of religion/philosophy.


Couldn't attach images, so here are links of the images on imgur, sorry for inconvenience (got this error message: It was not possible to determine the dimensions of the image).
Black-white

Coloured version

Background for contrast

Hey there, Zurvon!

The art is pretty cool but I do see what you mean! I'm not sure if it's an issue with two-dimensionality.... But I think what might help is to ask your artist to try to vary lineart width more. If all the lines are approximately of the same thickness, it doesn't look very lively. It becomes even more apparent with the coloured versions - I think the b&w lineart looks okay on it's own, but something goes wrong with the coloured versions. One part of it is those very white airbrushed highlights on the capes and leggings - that's just not how light reacts to cloth. In my experience, an airbrush is rarely a good choice as a primary tool for painting. Your artist seems way more comfortable with flat colours like in the backgrounds, so maybe she should stick to that with the characters as well - the style would be more unified that way. I know you'd like more 3D -style but I'm not sure your artist is ready to change her style in that direction without doing lighting studies and practising first. I hope I don't sound harsh - I think your artist is very talented! It's just that we all have areas in our art that need a bit of practise.

The choices of colour in the characters overall are a bit baffling. The backgrounds have a very nice colour harmony - they all go together very well, but in the character art the harsh, bright yellows are combined with a bit more desaturated colours which doesn't work very well in this case. If your artist is having trouble with combining colours, she could take a look at some websites that offer ready-made colour palettes likes this one: http://www.color-hex.com/color-palettes/popular.php

Summarised:
-Varying line width
-Consider flat colours
-Colour palettes - do the colours match?

I hope this helped at least a little bit!

And this is the BG the motorbike was for. The BG itself is another for Ladykiller in a Bind which is gonna come out Sept 23rd! Also, the motorbike will reappear in another BG.

I know this has a lot of issues, but I'm trying to get back into drawing after a few years and want to put it out there.

Tempus wrote:And this is the BG the motorbike was for. The BG itself is another for Ladykiller in a Bind which is gonna come out Sept 23rd! Also, the motorbike will reappear in another BG.

*looks up Ladykiller in a Bind* wait a second... Christine Love? Art by Raide? AND you're making backgrounds for it? *immediately subscribes*

I drew this Clay Terran for my good friend's birthday and I quite like the colours I guess~ Also I may as well dump the full version of my avatar here. She's one of my oldest OCs and I use her to represent myself sometimes!

SinSisters wrote:*looks up Ladykiller in a Bind* wait a second... Christine Love? Art by Raide? AND you're making backgrounds for it? *immediately subscribes*

Haha, thanks! Also, I haven't made the majority of the backgrounds for Ladykiller — a lot of nice BGs have been made by Owen Carson AKA owen-c (he has a really nice gallery!). I have a folder on my dA for Ladykiller stuff; anything not in it was probably made by him.

daisychainlinks wrote:I drew this Clay Terran for my good friend's birthday and I quite like the colours I guess~

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Also I may as well dump the full version of my avatar here. She's one of my oldest OCs and I use her to represent myself sometimes!

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I absolutely adore your artstyle! (and your OC's tiny little fang is super cute ^^ )

timepatches wrote:I absolutely adore your artstyle! (and your OC's tiny little fang is super cute ^^ )

Thank you so much, it really means a lot to me! It makes me happy when others find my art and OCs cute (although one day I'd like to be able to do more "serious" looking art as well as cute stuff ;0; ).

I'd like to show you all my last finished drawing and take the opportunity to tellyou guys that both my VN and my normal commissions are open!
This is where you see my prices. Thank you for the opportunity!

I've been doing a lot of work without feedback lately, so here goes the dump Random things on CSP. Might use some of those on T-shirts for sprites... They might as well be useful.
And some random art for a solo-game that may never happen since I'm always unhappy with my current style I have 5 sprites done though (￣___￣)ゞ

A wip I'm working on for a commission work I want to show!

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