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Rewritten Ennui
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by Rewritten Ennui » Mon Dec 05, 2011 12:18 am
For your characters
I will write a short haiku
Requests are open
Give a description
Of the personality
And I'll try my best
So I'm feeling a little bored, and I've been writing random haikus left and right. Since I have no talent in drawing pretty art, this is probably the only creative thing I can offer to the community. Hope those two up there explain it all, so fire away!
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Omnificent
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by Omnificent » Mon Dec 05, 2011 12:36 am
RE this sounds quite
Baller. Por favor write me a
Haiku for FA:NG Jeff.
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by Rewritten Ennui » Mon Dec 05, 2011 12:54 am
@Omnificent:
You're doin' it wrong!
Five, eight, five; that ain't right, bro
Still, points for effort
Ahem. Now for Jeffrey.
Always cheerful guy
Bashful boy wants moe girl
'Tis quite sexcellent
BTW, I disagree with Mike when she says Jeff's a weeaboo. That dude is overflowing with too much awesome to be one :3
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Taleweaver
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by Taleweaver » Mon Dec 05, 2011 7:57 am
Please, for Tokyo-kun
of "Metropolitan Blues"
Try to find some lines.
Scriptwriter and producer of Metropolitan Blues
Creator of The Loyal Kinsman
Scriptwriter and director of Daemonophilia
Scriptwriter of
Zenith Chronicles
Scriptwriter and director of
Romance is DeadScriptwriter and producer of Adrift
More about me in my blog"Adrift - Like Ever17, but without the Deus Ex Machina" - HigurashiKira
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by Rewritten Ennui » Mon Dec 05, 2011 7:25 pm
For Taleweaver's Tokyo-kun:
Pitiful spirit!
Knows not his reason in life
Be lonely no more
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by HigurashiKira » Mon Dec 05, 2011 7:35 pm
May I ask for
Some words for my Tinasa
If you are so kind
I have moved to a new account. Please contact me
here from now on. T/Y~
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by Rewritten Ennui » Mon Dec 05, 2011 8:01 pm
You guys do know that you don't have to write a haiku to get one, right?

It would also help if you gave me a little info on the character instead of me having to hunt around for who you're referring to.
BTW, you were missing one syllable in the first line, Kira.
Anyways, for HigurashiKira's Tinasa:
Says what's on her mind
Cares not for consequences
Keep far from this girl
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by Taleweaver » Tue Dec 06, 2011 6:25 am
Rewritten Ennui wrote:For Taleweaver's Tokyo-kun:
Pitiful spirit!
Knows not his reason in life
Be lonely no more
Awww *melts*
Scriptwriter and producer of Metropolitan Blues
Creator of The Loyal Kinsman
Scriptwriter and director of Daemonophilia
Scriptwriter of
Zenith Chronicles
Scriptwriter and director of
Romance is DeadScriptwriter and producer of Adrift
More about me in my blog"Adrift - Like Ever17, but without the Deus Ex Machina" - HigurashiKira
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by leon » Wed Dec 07, 2011 5:11 am
Will you do one for me too, please?
Baldric Sagenam is a hero, but only by accident. He is a former cook, that gets forced into becoming a wizards apprentice (potion maker / alchemist). He is pretty lazy, a coward and very proud of it. He is quite incompetent at most things he does, but usually very (and over) confident about it.
Thanks!

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by Rewritten Ennui » Wed Dec 07, 2011 11:26 am
For leon's Baldric:
First chef, now brewer
Slothful craven with hubris
Idiot's still proud
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by leon » Wed Dec 07, 2011 12:45 pm
Thank you! It's great!
*goes to frame it and hang it someplace where Baldric won't see it*
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by Aurehan » Thu Dec 08, 2011 1:06 am
Oh cool could you write one for me, too please? >~<
Hikari Kichida-she's a 16 year old fashion designer who's gifted when it comes to designing clothes for others, but ultimately fails at making herself look presentable. She's naive, and a total clutz to top it all off, but is the exact opposite when she's working on something.
Tell me if I should add more o^o
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by Rewritten Ennui » Thu Dec 08, 2011 1:20 am
I love a good excuse not to do my homework.
For Aurehan's Hikari:
Young master of threads
Between faux pas and focus
Can't dress herself right
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by Lumen_Astrum » Thu Dec 08, 2011 9:31 am
A haiku for Cetus from Soul and Heart? :3
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by Rewritten Ennui » Thu Dec 08, 2011 10:23 am
I still need to finish up S&H OTL Feel free to hit me for being slow.
ANYWAYS, for Cetus:
Has perseverance
Rebels against injustice
Harsh times bring harsh acts
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