My writing and poems - please leave your thoughts!
Posted: Thu Aug 22, 2013 5:59 am
Hello, I decided to open a new thread after leaving the old one to dust.
Other than wanting to be a free-lance artist, I also dream to be a writer. But I have to admit that my writing and English needs to be brushed up more. I want to write more stories, not only in VN medium, but also in form of short stories, novela and comics. However some of my problems are my lack of creativity, literature knowledge and writing.
Therefore, this will be the thread where I'll leave my writing to be seen and critique by others. You can be honest and harsh as you can, I want to improve! Please point out any mistakes you can find, or any details that you think is awkward in my writing.
I don't have any short stories to show for now, but I've tried writing a poem.
Other than wanting to be a free-lance artist, I also dream to be a writer. But I have to admit that my writing and English needs to be brushed up more. I want to write more stories, not only in VN medium, but also in form of short stories, novela and comics. However some of my problems are my lack of creativity, literature knowledge and writing.
Therefore, this will be the thread where I'll leave my writing to be seen and critique by others. You can be honest and harsh as you can, I want to improve! Please point out any mistakes you can find, or any details that you think is awkward in my writing.
I don't have any short stories to show for now, but I've tried writing a poem.
What do you think? Is it deep enough? Is the story and message is obvious in the poem?How did you lived your life so long?
How did you became so strong?
When did you came to know love?
How did your life went so wrong?
Was it the person you care so dear
Who turned and pained the other?
How much was the pain you had to bear
Inflicted by someone you hold so dear?
Was it painful to see?
Realizing your life can never be
Like once you know you had always lived.
But please don't fear
Don't regret the days you hold so dear
Because one day you will come to realize
You were always loved.