Unreasonable Teen Requests

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Unreasonable Teen Requests

#1 Post by TellerFarsight »

Hey all,

I'm writing something that involves teens making unreasonable requests, like the kind of thing a bully would make you do.
-"Do my homework for me"
-"Fail this test on purpose so my grade looks better"
-"Steal that thing for me"
-"Pretend to be my friend so this other person thinks I'm being nice to you"
stuff like that. Anyone got any ideas?
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I'm not sure what you're asking for? I'm also not sure that's how kids get bullied, it's more like "so and so is trash don't talk to them"(the trash person being the bullied) and fake FB pages and prank calls and such? What you're describing sounds like bad/bossy friends. I dunno my bullies kept their distance from me so maybe I have a different experience though.
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Yeah bad/bossy friend is kind of the same idea.
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bul·ly1 ˈbo͝olē
verb
use superior strength or influence to intimidate (someone), typically to force him or her to do what one wants.
I would say your first dialog options falls under bullying.

Some things I can think of off the top of my head:
  • "If you're sad that makes me uncomfortable so I will be angry that you're sad"
  • "You should take photos in that dress from last year but now you're too fat"
  • "Oh you're sad. OK. Well I don't care."
  • "Why do you walk around like a slut?"
  • "I can say (really upsetting things) because it's true and I'm your friend"
  • "You owe me for my friendship."

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#5 Post by TellerFarsight »

How 'bout something more stereotypically male, like "give me your lunch money or I'll beat you up."
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Bullying is more about doing stuff than requesting stuff. Hiding school bags and jackets. Throwing firecrackers at their feet and watching them jump around. Pouring water in their collar and saying it was an accident. Spilling salt over their school lunch. Touching their sleeve with a felt pen and leaving a mark. Tipping over their bag and making it fall into a puddle.

I got bullied a lot in school and I'd have been happy if it had only been "give me your lunch money or I will beat you up". Successful bullies do things that either can't be proven, can be explained with an accident, or will make adults shrug and tell the victim to not be so whiney so they embarrass themselves even more.
It's not about exerting power, it's about getting a good laugh out of the victim's reaction. To bullies, their victim is a puppet with lots of strings - pull them and watch what happens.
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tell the victim to clean up a big spill or whatever with their own shirt. (bonus points if it's totally gross like vomit.)
Instead of the do my homework, it's "Give me your homework and I'll write my name instead and now you have like 30 or less minute to do another...which is usually not enough time."
I stole the teacher's item and I am going to stash it at your desk for safekeeping.
VICTIM , Yell at me in front of this person so I can look like a good person. (It's a totally mind fuck because the victim is like "I don't want to go too far because I might get bullied more, but I have to be convincing. It's a lose lose situation because bully is going to mess with the victim either way but victim doesn't know it.)
Wear this embarrassing clothes and let me take pictures.
Hey victim, say that you did it! (Something that bully did that was bad) You're always a goody goody anyways so it's not like it would affect you.
Make victim admit to the class of something. (I'mma slut that like it up my ---" you get the idea)

In animes, bullied kids usually become the go-pher for the bully. Basically the bully doesn't feel like going to the cafeteria and the victim has to go buy the food usually with their own money. (Guys)
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#8 Post by TellerFarsight »

Yeah! That's more what I'm looking for, thank you for the ideas.
For some reason when I picture this stuff, it's set in the 60s or the 80s or something.
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#9 Post by skyeworks »

No problem, I got bullied myself in middle school so it's kinda easy to think up these things. lol, yeah, some of the acts does sound like it's from that era haha. At least no toilet swirllies.

Pair victim up with another loser and have them kiss or something. (loser like a "ugly" person or like a "stupid" person)
Take the victim clothes because they wanted it. (Would be humiliating if it's to their underwear. and would be very typical if they put it up a flag pole.)
tell victim Carry their books/stuff around (classic)
spill their lunch on the victim shirt and yell at them for it and they have to buy the bully lunch...(Which just so happened to be the most expensive and totally not the lunch that the bully was going to eat) Spill soup and now they have to buy a steak lunch.
Make the victim steal something from a store. (oldschool would be porn/alcohol from a store)
Don't ever talk to the girl that I like victim ever. (plot twist the girl that the bully liked is victim's project partner or something so it's IMPOSSIBLE.)
Make victim wear girl (if guy) clothes to school.
Victim has to address bully as SIR/BOSS/GOD.
Bully makes victim look dumb by making them say dumb things. Like for the whole day, victim must end their sentence with "would you like fries with that. " (medium) or (and by the way I love f-ing pigs it makes me feel XXXXX) (Extreme)
Victim has to steal underwear from the opposite gender locker room.
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