Also, if anyone could give critique on the intro I have below, I'd appreciate it. I'm aware it isn't at all perfect, but I'd appreciate some further help nonetheless from some of the more veteran writers here, or anyone in fact.
"The carriage sways and bumps as it speeds along to the next unfamiliar station."
"And the carriage itself, no less than 7 people within what could house 80."
"THe rattling is only accompanied by the faint chattering of other passengers, tattered with laughter and exclaimation."
"I've never had to travel beyond my hometown, but..."
"Well, this is my last departure from it."
"My apartment fell through, which figures. I'm not sure how I was expected to attend both a full time education to a degree, and pay rent WITHOUT relying on government benefits."
"Fortunately, they only evicted me just after I graduated from junior high. How thoughtful."
"So, I'm being dumped somewhere else more convenient, so to speak."
"Somewhere cheap that falls within budget..."
"Or at least, that's what I would have assumed. My new apartment, waiting for me miles upon miles away, across the island,"
"A new one, amidst a new block, amidst a brand new city, wholly erected rather recently,"
"Built from cause of population overflow from several Tokyo districts - it's being thrown over an old coastal town, like an urban blanket."
"Supposedly, I'm one of the first legitimate residents."
"...That was evident enough from the lack of people on the carriage."
"Another bump catches me by surprise, and I catch myself bracing in my seat."
"Ugh... The railway never fails to be the most unsettling experience any japanese commoner can experience."
"... I've only ever been on a train three times."
"Never had much reason to stray away from my refuge."
"This apartment, nonetheless..."
"It must be modern, and since it's new, I would expect a hefty price - any normal regional market would have it be ridiculously costly."
"But the price... is cheap - that tells me something about the quality, for sure."
"I'll just have to see when I get there and draw my own conclusion..."
"... Shinjuku, huh."
"We pass yet another alien station - It's name means nothing new to me."
"I was never really a geography-kinda person, nor am I familiar to the landscape of Japan."
"The station I'm looking out for - new not just to me, but to the continent."
"Haibu City Station."
"And proceeding that,"
nvlk "I shudder under words."
nvlk "Even the semantics themselves feel uncomfortable and rough, as the word slides across my tongue."
nvlk "Perhaps that's just the nerves, and the unfathomable connotations of moving."
nvlk "I'm sure by any stretch, It couldn't be as bad as my last city, and my last..."
nvlk "School is something..."
nvlk "That I intensely loathed - perhaps still do."
nvlk "I don't even hold a sole pleasant memory from school."
nvlk "For me, it was but a long, painful culmination of bad experiences and shit people."
nvlk "And for the longest time, I was subject to the might of social hierarchies - to children, of course."
nvlk "Soulless children, that held a juvenile sadism so cruel and almost... frighteningly innate."
nvlk "The joy of bullying... It sickens me. The way children will go any lengths to isolate their peers - make themselves feel good."
nvlk "I took the brunt of that, to no mercy."
"I gripped my fists until my knuckles turned a bright white."
"For sure, I was gritting my teeth just at the memories alone, just weltering across my train of thought."
"I try and shake these unpleasantries, but it's futile. Fucking damn it."
"Despite what else has happened in this sickeningly mundane life..."
"School had made me indefinitely scared of people."
"I'm well aware of it - my social anxiety."
"I was never nurtured in what should have been an educational, passionate environment."
"I was traumatised and torn apart back when - my childish innocence trodden on too many times to count."
"Now, i've been 'nurtured' into a fucking sleaze."
"No, I shouldn't dwell on such things."
"I am moving forward, literally."
"Moving forward on a train taking me great lengths away from such horrors and memories."
"I've been given opportunity to abandon the past. I shouldn't let it drag me back all the while..."
"I took a while to calm down. I can't let myself get negative just when I'm leaving it all behind."
"A sigh of relief is all I could muster thereafter."
"Ah... Pull yourself together Katashi, you've got new horizons to face."
"The past is irrelevent now."
"No, it's entirely relevant."
"I can't fight this. The only guide I have to life, to people, and to society, is the culmination of shit I had to endure in..."
"Hence, the mixed feelings of a new start, though."
"I feel scared - like, almost as if this will only follow me. I can't help but be worried. Is that reasonable of me?"
"I can only hope Haibu will become my refuge."
"And my new high-school, Ijo. I hope it serves to object every ideal I have been taught about school and education."
"I haven't heard much about Ijo. In fact, it's a bit of an unknown."
"It was the nearest state school, and was recently refurbished along with its new surroundings."
"I hope it gives me the grace of change I'm looking for,"
"But really, deep down, I suspect that I just loathe school - I'm expecting the same. I'm prepared for the same."
"As much as I don't like it, I have to be a pessimist for my own sake. Even still..."
"I'm trying to imagine a reality where that doesn't happen."
"Where the past doesn't repeat itself."
"A different feeling place of its own..."
"Where I can actually talk to another person - no hostility, ill intent - genuine friendliness."
"I could scoff at it... Am I that far gone?"
"But it's all I desire."
"All legitimate and genuine."
"No more malice."
"I came to that same conclusion in my head, and my rapid thoughts came to a calming slow."
"I returned to consciousness, and realised my back was arched forwards. I let my muscles and posture relax and contract back into something less tense."
"I turned my head to the window, watching countless rural and urban areas pass, letting my tired thoughts pass with them."
"All that variation..."
"... I wonder what Haibu will be like?"
"When it comes to surprises, I'm no good."
"But this is something I need to wait out."
"There goes another one."
"With another major station, we must be getting close."
"As the train rattles and sways, I feel my eyes getting heavier..."
"A small nap should be okay. I've been travelling for a few hours, and last stop is Haibu itself."
"If I just..."
"Take a small..."
[2 hours later]
ta "WE HAVE NOW ARRIVED AT: HAIBU CITY."
ta "PLEASE BE SURE TO TAKE ANY BELONGINGS OFF OF THE TRAIN WITH YOU, AND MIND THE GAP AS YOU EXIT."
ta "THANK YOU FOR TRAVELLING WITH TOKYO SPEEDWAY."
"Sure enough, to my disbelief."