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by lummoire » Thu Apr 30, 2020 10:53 am
TL;DR: It makes sense, it really comes down to what you need to convey or writer's preference. If it can be told through dialogue, then no narration is needed.
Long post ahead, my apologies lol.
In my years of schooling, I've had "show, don't tell!" beaten over my head like I was a drum lol.
The concept of "show, don't tell" is about illustrating without outright describing what's going on. It's the difference between:
"It started snowing outside."
vs
"A speck of snow drifted onto the sidewalk, followed by several more flurries. The flurries were joined by more flurries, and before I knew it, the garden around me was covered in a coat of soft, white snow."
In school (at least in my classes), people prefer the latter. It creates more immersion and seems more interesting.
In visual novels, you can do without the paragraph by literally having a picture of a snowfield or something. Pictures are worth a thousand words, especially if you're gonna be seeing it for like 10 minutes while reading hundreds of words. The visuals (background depicting weather, sprites changing expressions) definitely cut down on a narrator saying "It started snowing" or "she looked mad". Usually, it's for the better, since you can focus on the dialogue and interactions between characters. You can show more of a character's dialogue instead of focusing on trying to narrate the scene.
Some people use the narration areas to put the Player Character's 1st person thoughts. (ie "I was looking down at the ground as the snow fell.") I'm neutral on it, but I don't prefer it when I write. Plenty of ways to depict whatever emotion needed to be conveyed without putting in narration or any 3rd person. (ie two characters going back and forth -- "..." "What's wrong?" "...I forgot my scarf today.") Tying back to show, don't tell, I prefer dialogue, it shows more than a narrator saying "I was sad."
Food for thought: I've also seen narration WITHIN a character's dialogue, such as a character talking about lore/history at length. (In manga, it's usually speech bubbles filled with tons of text to explain a world's feature or someone's power level or something). It's almost intelligible between an off-scene narrator and the main character being a narrator. So for some, I suppose it wouldn't matter lol, whatever gets the point across. At that point, it's a writer's preference on the style of their storytelling, and if it utilizes more of the dialogue or the narration to get their storytelling across.
Anywayyy (I apologize for the ramble lol), if it sounds natural to you, I wouldn't be afraid of it. People write differently. (I also like writing conversations, it feels more dynamic than narrations!)