Looking for critique over my my VN story script

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Title: Your liar

Genre: Mystery, Thriller

Word Count: 2060

Desired Feedback:

Is the plot interesting? Are you able to follow the plot? Do you want to know more?

Are the characters compelling? Are you curious to know more about the characters?

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1iSZ ... mb-zA/edit

Synopsis:

Ferilla, in charge of leading an investigate over the mass disappearance of residents in the city, have finally managed to convince Jared, the only lead that could uncover the mystery behind the tragedy. However, Jared will only tell his story in his own terms. He would deliberately left holes in his story that Ferilla would have to fill with his own knowledge. How would Ferilla manage to extract the truth from this man? Why is Jared hesitant to tell his story to Ferilla?

Note:

This is not a book but a script of the story of my video game project, told using a combination of images and texts. Thus, the writing will mainly consist of spoken dialogues.