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Re: Swan Song [2012]

Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 3:10 am
by lepapillonrouge
...moe loli breakdancing.

Sake this is necessary.


Anyway I'm excited! Can't wait to see this!

Re: Swan Song [2012]

Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 9:05 am
by Anna
Deji, those girls are absolutely adorable ^^! I love their hairstyles and the uniform is so cute too. I'm curious already, good luck to everyone on the team with finishing the demo!

Re: Swan Song [2012]

Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 11:52 am
by Deji
I made a logo :3
swan_song_logo.png
I originally had a swan sketched to go in the background, but I think the swirly motif works better

What do you think? ^^

Re: Swan Song [2012]

Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 12:08 pm
by PyTom
Someone pointed out on IRC that there's already a visual novel named Swan Song:

http://vndb.org/v914 (Potentially NSFW)

It has an English translation, and a few reviews of it show up on google - so it's a presence in the west. I don't know if it's a problem - a swan song is a real thing, after all - but it does mean that someone searching for cute might get something very different. Or vice versa.

Re: Swan Song [2012]

Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 12:25 pm
by Deji
Oh... O_o
We may revise the title then >>;

Re: Swan Song [2012]

Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 2:40 pm
by sake-bento
Ahahaha. Clashing names are always fun. Well, temp new name in place for now.

As for breakdancing... >____>~

Re: Swan's Melody [2012]

Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 2:49 pm
by Anna
Ouch ^^;. If it's any consolation - I think the style of the logo is really cool, the 'swirly' is nice too!

Re: Swan's Melody [2012]

Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 2:49 pm
by jack_norton
The girls looks very cute, but the real question is... there will be also boys?? :wink:

Re: Swan's Melody [2012]

Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 2:56 pm
by Deji
Updated logo with the new name.
smlogo.png
Thoughts (: ?

Re: Swan's Melody [2012]

Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 3:01 pm
by Anna
I think that works - haven't found any VN with that name :3! I also think it's a pretty title. Just don't hope for people to find it when googling, but I think you knew that haha.

Re: Swan's Melody [2012]

Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 3:09 pm
by Blane Doyle
I think this looks wonderful! I like the new title as well.

Re: Swan's Melody [2012]

Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 3:26 pm
by Morishita
I'm a little nervous to give my thoughts but I think the logo looks just a touch dark and I only say that because since the story is about such vibrant characters maybe if the logo had brighter colors that would help show that the story is a bright story but I may be totally wrong on this and this is just a little thought of mine O.O, If you don't want brighter colors maybe having the colors match each girls hair or eye color like a color link also comes to mind but then again I may be totally wrong and it's okay if you hate my idea's I just wanted to give my input, Logo design can be a pain sometimes but I think it's a lot of fun :D Also I really like the faint outline inside the words, maybe you could have a swan outline inside the words instead of the leaf type of outline you have *forgive me if it's not a leaf outline I can't see it that well O.O;*

Re: Swan's Melody [2012]

Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 4:51 pm
by Deji
Thanks for the input, Morisihita!
Yes, it may be a bit too dark for what we want... I'll revisit it later ;)

Re: Swan's Melody [2012]

Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 5:46 pm
by LVUER
I think it's ok to have a same title, there are lots of game with same title out there. But of course, if you can avoid it, you do it (or you can add a subtitle).

I really love the girls, so moe and so loli, hehehe... definitely going to play this one.

About the color, I prefer the second one (the one with white color). I've see the dark color scheme too often that it's become boring. But IMO, you'd better change the dark socks color since it doesn't go too well with the white/blue color scheme.

Re: Swan's Melody [2012]

Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2012 5:51 pm
by Deji
I've been unable to focus on work today because of things going on at home, so I've been procrastinating working on Swan's Melody instead.

Here, have a Patty side-sprite! :3
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