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What Do You See? [Otome][School Life][Mystery][NaNo13]

Posted: Sat Mar 02, 2013 12:56 am
by sorani
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Synopsis:
Otome (Name is player changeable) is a regular sixteen year old girl who has nothing to do in her life other than swooning over hot guys. However, one day, there was a rumor that spoke of a red-eyed demon being seen carrying people away. Otome, fearless of being the cat killed by curiosity, could not resist the urge to explore the rumor more. Life doesn't seem to be going her way as a hot guy appears in front of her as she researches the mystery. How will she balance solving the mystery and her love life?

Characters:

Otome:
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The ever-so curious protagonist who gets herself caught in a problem situation when she decides to follow the red-eyed demon to his evil lair. Aside from the mystery which she can't veer away from, Otome lives a life as a nice and happy girl. She lives life to the fullest as an individual rather than a dependent, meaning she makes her own choices and sticks with them to the end. She's optimistic regardless of how bad things seem to be, and she's popular with her friends because of that. Sadly, she doesn't get as many hot guys as she does confessions from her fellow female classmates.


You can chase after four love interests:

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Ayumu:
Otome's childhood friend. He's really easy to see through, but don't say that to his face, as he prefers to act tough. He cares for Otome, but his actions lie between the line of a family member and a friend; hopefully it will cross that line someday. Otome can always finds him in basketball gym shooting baskets. He fails at it though. Aside from his failing basketball skills, he is a fan of visual kei, as shown with his dyed hair. He has many hobbies, from art to sports, becoming a jack of all trades and a master at none. While Ayumu is hard working, he has commitment issues for just one hobby.

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Aoi:
Otome's underclassmen, who's always quiet and shy when she greets him in the hallway. He first met Otome when she bumped into him in that same hallway. He acts very polite when he does speak and dresses fairly formally all of the time. Recently, he has been avoiding her. He's secretly a popular dancer online. The videos he posts of him dancing often takes place in this park, which is popular with other dancers. Aoi is rather fond of his popularity, enough that he lets it get to his head sometimes.

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Akane:
Otome's upperclassmen. He is a super delinquent as he proclaims himself to be due to his streak of rebellions. His hair has been dyed to further improve his delinquent image. His overall personality is just all brawn and no brain. Originally part of the basketball team, but he was kicked off because of a fight he didn't start. He has a complex with his name, having been previously bullied due the femininity of “Akane”. But, he has toughened from that experience, so much that he became a delinquent. Even with that bad boy image, he secretly strives to be a hairdresser.
ScottySeng typed this for me XD: He states that he's better at basketball than Ayumu, though he's no longer on the basketball team. Well, actually he says anyone is better than Ayumu, even Otome. Strangely enough, he wants to be a hair dresser. Perhaps it's because hair is something that won't insult his name or maybe there's a certain girl he wants to cut hair for?
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Kurogane:
Otome's teacher who is not a teacher. He probably would prefer being a NEET over being a teacher and is rather laid back with everything because of that. He's also pretty laid back about how he looks, as he just slaps on whatever casual wear he has. He's a teacher because his father is the current principal and blackmailed him into becoming one. He admits it sucks being pushed to being a teacher, so he agrees his teaching should suck equally as much.

Staff:
Art/Writing/Coding: Sorani
Coding/Writing/Editor: ScottySeng
BGM: TheTwinsCompositions

Re: What Do You See? [GxB][School Life][Mystery][NaNo13]

Posted: Sat Mar 02, 2013 1:04 am
by ScottySeng
Looking forward to getting this otome project done. :)

Re: What Do You See? [GxB][School Life][Mystery][NaNo13]

Posted: Sat Mar 02, 2013 1:43 am
by Mimi_Melody
Um, I have a question *raise hand* :mrgreen:
Is the MC blind? Or do you draw her like that to get more of the "what do you see?" feeling? or...did you forget to add her eyes?...:O)
Anyway, I'm looking forward to this, the story is interesting, and I love how you named the MC "Otome" in an otome game :lol:

Re: What Do You See? [GxB][School Life][Mystery][NaNo13]

Posted: Sat Mar 02, 2013 6:09 am
by ScottySeng
The MC is not blind. That's intentional. It's a parody of the "eyeless" MCs in both otome and eroge games.

Thanks for the comments. Credit to Sorani for the lovely names.

Re: What Do You See? [GxB][School Life][Mystery][NaNo13]

Posted: Sat Mar 02, 2013 7:49 am
by TsukiShima
*gasps* This sounds really nice!
By far I'm already liking Kurogane! And seeing the eyeless MC almost scared me too! xD

Good luck!

Re: What Do You See? [GxB][School Life][Mystery][NaNo13]

Posted: Sat Mar 02, 2013 8:31 pm
by sorani
Hahaha, Sorry if the eyeless protagonist scared you XD
But, yeah, the eyeless part is connected with the title and it's actually a major plot point of the story~
Just wait and see, this "otome" game is more than it seems.

And here's a lint OTL
I took the whole day to start writing and only managed this much, I have a lot of writing to cover at this point >n>
Statistics:

The game contains 121 screens of dialogue.
These screens contain a total of 1,103 words,
for an average of 9.1 words per screen.
The game contains 0 menus.

Re: What Do You See? [GxB][School Life][Mystery][NaNo13]

Posted: Sat Mar 02, 2013 8:37 pm
by Aines445
sorani wrote:Hahaha, Sorry if the eyeless protagonist scared you XD
But, yeah, the eyeless part is connected with the title and it's actually a major plot point of the story~
Just wait and see, this "otome" game is more than it seems.
Then I was the only one that actually assumed that it was a parody of the eyeless protagonist (Wow and I even laughed at her while it scared others, I must be really weird XD). I really want to play this now, I'm so curious! What secrets does this story hold?! I really want to know. I like the art and I'm looking forward to this! (There are so many good games being made, I want to play them alllllll!!!!! XD)

Re: What Do You See? [GxB][School Life][Mystery][NaNo13]

Posted: Sat Mar 02, 2013 8:57 pm
by sorani
Aines445 wrote:
sorani wrote:Hahaha, Sorry if the eyeless protagonist scared you XD
But, yeah, the eyeless part is connected with the title and it's actually a major plot point of the story~
Just wait and see, this "otome" game is more than it seems.
Then I was the only one that actually assumed that it was a parody of the eyeless protagonist (Wow and I even laughed at her while it scared others, I must be really weird XD). I really want to play this now, I'm so curious! What secrets does this story hold?! I really want to know. I like the art and I'm looking forward to this! (There are so many good games being made, I want to play them alllllll!!!!! XD)
Thanks a lot, but yeah, you're right, the eyeless part is indeed a parody, like what ScottySeng said. XD
It's just that it's not just a parody sometimes...

Re: What Do You See? [GxB][School Life][Mystery][NaNo13]

Posted: Sat Mar 02, 2013 10:35 pm
by 15385bic
omg - kurogane actually reminds me of the one from tusbasa >//-//<
tell me he's chasable ;D

Re: What Do You See? [GxB][School Life][Mystery][NaNo13]

Posted: Sun Mar 03, 2013 1:31 am
by sorani
15385bic wrote:omg - kurogane actually reminds me of the one from tusbasa >//-//<
tell me he's chasable ;D
XD Yes, he is very chasable lol

Re: What Do You See? [Otome][School Life][Mystery][NaNo13]

Posted: Sun Mar 03, 2013 10:09 pm
by sorani
Update!
Not sure if it's good or not, but I finally finished writing the intro~
And I reached 2,500 words! Lol still not enough orz. Too bad I couldn't complete my goal of 5,000 //cries

Re: What Do You See? [Otome][School Life][Mystery][NaNo13]

Posted: Mon Mar 04, 2013 12:15 am
by Reikun
Great job getting to 2500 words!! :D Even though you didn't reach you goal, you've still made progress! I'm rooting for you~

Re: What Do You See? [Otome][School Life][Mystery][NaNo13]

Posted: Mon Mar 04, 2013 2:02 am
by Tag-
Oh man, this sounds absolutely awesome! I love that you guys are going to make her lack of eyes plot relevant. I suspected it after reading the the title, but hearing it straight from you guys is even better!

I also had a good laugh when I saw that Otome's name was actually Otome xDD

Wishing you guys the best of luck, I'm certainly rooting for you! :D

Re: What Do You See? [Otome][School Life][Mystery][NaNo13]

Posted: Tue Mar 05, 2013 7:45 pm
by sorani
I'm so sorry for the late replies DX
I was busy with my hw, it took me too long to finish and lost a whole day of progress orz
Reikun wrote:Great job getting to 2500 words!! :D Even though you didn't reach you goal, you've still made progress! I'm rooting for you~
Thanks :')
I hope I can finish writing my whole story at this rate...OTL
Tag- wrote:Oh man, this sounds absolutely awesome! I love that you guys are going to make her lack of eyes plot relevant. I suspected it after reading the the title, but hearing it straight from you guys is even better!

I also had a good laugh when I saw that Otome's name was actually Otome xDD

Wishing you guys the best of luck, I'm certainly rooting for you! :D
I'm glad you had a good laugh XD and thanks~

I really got lazy when naming everyone lmao, the love interests are based off their names.
Ayumu is the one that isn't named by a color b/c he dyed it, but I guess it's the same for Akane...
So that means Aoi is the only with natural hair color?! lol I guess that's unrealistic lmao

Re: What Do You See? [Otome][School Life][Mystery][NaNo13]

Posted: Sat Mar 09, 2013 4:38 pm
by sorani
Here's an update.

Right now I have around 4,700 words, finished lining Otome's sprite and base coloring.

But my problem is this right now:
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I really don't like the colors for Otome's casual outfit.
Any suggestions?