I did like that. I'm done with my own comments -- I'll PM you.Donmai wrote:"They are ugly and stinky, they pollute the water with their droppings and they exterminate the animals we like to hunt." Who would imagine, at that point, that those creatures could be human beings?
Li'l Red [V1.2 released]
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Re: Li'l Red [Completed. Testers welcome!]
Thank you arachni. Based on what pwisaguacate and saguaro told me, I made some modifications to the "human ending" that I believe will help to clarify many things.
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Re: Li'l Red [Completed. Testers welcome!]
I have a question on how to play this, I've downloaded the game, but all that is in the game file is a MPlayer Audio File...
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Re: Li'l Red [Completed. Testers welcome!]
He posted the game somewhere down the first page (8th post) as an attachment. Here's a quick link: Lil Red-1.0-all.zipririruetoo wrote:I have a question on how to play this, I've downloaded the game, but all that is in the game file is a MPlayer Audio File...
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Re: Li'l Red [Completed. Testers welcome!]
Oops! My fault! Thank you pwisaguacate! I should have moved that link to the first post.
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Re: Li'l Red [Updated to V.1.1]
I have updated the download link with a new version that includes several modifications that I have done based on the comments made here. It also includes arachni's suggestions and corrections to the text (she did a very wonderful job, I must say! ). I am now waiting for pwisaguacate's verdict on the grammar department.
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Re: Li'l Red [Updated to V.1.1]
Ahh, I was almost done! I will have to come back in a few hours to finish it. By then I will send a PM.
I see you added to the human ending, but I think unnecessary length was added (now longer than wolf ending and weird-ish[?]). I came up with a simpler way to explain the father's reasoning. Sit tight.
EDIT: PM sent. Now we're even closer to finishing.
I see you added to the human ending, but I think unnecessary length was added (now longer than wolf ending and weird-ish[?]). I came up with a simpler way to explain the father's reasoning. Sit tight.
EDIT: PM sent. Now we're even closer to finishing.
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Re: Li'l Red [Updated to V.1.1]
No surprise here!pwisaguacate wrote:I see you added to the human ending, but I think unnecessary length was added (now longer than wolf ending and weird-ish[?]).
Donmai wrote:Yes, I admit the reasons the human father had to not tell the story to his son when he was younger are more subtle, and I just could not find a way to make them more clear without extending the story too much.
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