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Posted: Thu May 30, 2013 4:10 am
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I think this should be posted in the WiP...The WiP NaNoReno is for the games in progress for the NaNoReno that happens in March (:
The word choice 'broke' is kinda, um, weird. Just an observation, though. Also, why would she be 'outraged' at everyone, as you put it? Did you mean 'everyone' to mean everyone in general, or just the family she hates? (It's just that I think it'd be weird to be outraged at Jae's other friends and her family... unless her parents haven't noticed that she's gone/aren't making an effort to find her.)
The concept's pretty interesting, although the 'transported-to-another-dimension' story is one that's been done many times over. I'm interested to see how this goes (: