Wind Whisper (NaNoRenO 2014) (Supernatural, Friendship)

[Rinima]

"Outside has an weird stillness to it, like nothing is real."

Title: Wind Whisper

Format: Kinetic Novel [Friendship, Supernatural, Slice of Life]

Setting: School-ish

Plot:
Amato is just a normal boy trying his best to live a normal life.
Eula is anything but normal, she can see ghosts.
So what will happen went these two people's lives intertwine?

Characters:

Amato

" Maybe zombies really have taken over, and I've just been fortunate enough not to run into any yet? Maybe aliens have seen our glorious heating system and decided to kidnap the people that run it all? Or maybe our heating has just broken, yup, that'll be it."

The main character of our story.

Eula

"She stares, unblinking at me. Well, that must have been a shock for her, being new and all. I dare say I'd be pretty unnerved if some random boy came stumbling into me spouting apologies on my first day."

???

"Is she even real?"

Progress:

Story: 2,500 words out of 10,000 (tbc)

Outline: 100% (Done)

Programming: 0%

GUI: 100% (Done)

Sprites:

Concept: 100% (Done)

Completed: 100%

SXF: 0%

Logo: 100% (Done)

Icon: 100% (Done)

Backgrounds: 100% (collected)

Music: 100% (Done)

Credits:

Lemonokashi: Sprite artist

Syncopika: Musician

DragoonHP: programmer

Rinima: Writer and GUI artist

Questions:

1. How does the story sound? Are ghosts to over used?

2. What do you think of the character designs? What sort of personality do you get from them?

3. Is 10,000 words enough do you think for 2/3 hours of gameplay?

[Googaboga]

1. How does the story sound? Are ghosts to over used?

Dude no. Ghosts are never overused. I love ghosts :T.

2. What do you think of the character designs? What sort of personality do you get from them?

I really like their outfits and their subdued coloring. Eula seems outgoing and ??? seems shy.

3. Is 10,000 words enough do you think for 2/3 hours of gameplay?

Not at all. Sorry ^^;. 10,000 will get you one hour or so of gameplay for some people but others will be able to read it in even less time than that. But it's not about how long your game is so don't worry about it too much :3.

[Rinima]

1. How does the story sound? Are ghosts to over used?

Dude no. Ghosts are never overused. I love ghosts :T.

2. What do you think of the character designs? What sort of personality do you get from them?

I really like their outfits and their subdued coloring. Eula seems outgoing and ??? seems shy.

3. Is 10,000 words enough do you think for 2/3 hours of gameplay?

Not at all. Sorry ^^;. 10,000 will get you one hour or so of gameplay for some people but others will be able to read it in even less time than that. But it's not about how long your game is so don't worry about it too much :3.

1. Good to know XD

2. Good good, that was what we were aiming for

3. Damn, ah well, I guess it'll just be as long as it has to be XD Don't think the word count is the thing I need to worry about anyway

[Kokoro Hane]

1. How does the story sound? Are ghosts to over used?
There can never be too many ghost stories! I'd love to see more of that in the Ren'Py community, actually! The story sounds pretty interesting, actually; first NaNoRenO this year to really catch my attention.

2. What do you think of the character designs? What sort of personality do you get from them?
Very lovely character designs! The girl who can see ghosts seem to be quite a cheery person, look-wise, which is interesting. The other girl seems quiet...maybe she's one of the ghosts?

3. Is 10,000 words enough do you think for 2/3 hours of gameplay?
10,000 words seems to be a decent amount. At least I can expect a not-too-short story with this concept. I look forward to it ^.^

[Puchin]

1. How does the story sound? Are ghosts to over used?

It depends on how you use it. If you are imaginative enough to create something not cliched, I highly recommend you doing it. But the "oh, you are a ghost? No way!" is no longer a plot twist so avoid that kind of over used stuff.

2. What do you think of the character designs? What sort of personality do you get from them?

I want to see the MC design!
Eula looks too happy and easy going, it doesn't fit a ghost whisperer and that's why I think it's PERFECT. Don't make her a tormented typical character, she's currently perfect. I think she's the kind of person who chooses to enjoy more life since she can see what means loosing it. Don't make her a ghost, it's not a good idea, just saying.
??? looks like a ghost. Please, don't let her be a ghost. It's what everyone is going to be expecting so 0% probability of impact.


3. Is 10,000 words enough do you think for 2/3 hours of gameplay?

No idea, sorry. Reading what other people are writing: I think one hour is probably enough for NaNoRenO. You can add more later if you want to, but , as someone who studied marketing, is better for you if people think " I want mooore! Will there be an expansion/ sequel?" than "Too long, I got bored"



I hope this helped. I try my best but since I'm not a native speaker sometimes I sound harsh or even mean, but I didn't do it on purpose. Your project looks awesome, and beautiful, I want to play it so I'll be supporting you!

[Rinima]

1. How does the story sound? Are ghosts to over used?

It depends on how you use it. If you are imaginative enough to create something not cliched, I highly recommend you doing it. But the "oh, you are a ghost? No way!" is no longer a plot twist so avoid that kind of over used stuff.

Ahh, yea, ghosts are involved, so I think the MC may well be a little shocked, but honestly, that isn't a main point of the story (his shock won't last to long). Honestly, that isn't the the plot twist in this. (EDIT: Oh dear lord I did a typo ;~;)

I want to see the MC design!
Eula looks too happy and easy going, it doesn't fit a ghost whisperer and that's why I think it's PERFECT. Don't make her a tormented typical character, she's currently perfect. I think she's the kind of person who chooses to enjoy more life since she can see what means loosing it. Don't make her a ghost, it's not a good idea, just saying.

Ahh, that's good then And no worries, that is not part of the plot and never was going to be XD (the though honestly hadn't even crossed my mind)

[Kaht]

First off gonna say that character art is daaaaang cute! I love the pastel theme going on there, it lends to a supernatural but not uninviting atmosphere!

1. How does the story sound? Are ghosts to over used?
The plot outline is very basic so it's hard to judge what going to happen. It sounds fun from what I see, but not too much to go on other than 'one person sees ghosts the other doesn't.' As for ghosts, they're fine. Never enough of them, I think.

2. What do you think of the character designs? What sort of personality do you get from them?
The character designs are cute! As for personality, Eula looks happy and more extroverted, ??? looks worried and shy.

GL with the game, I'll be keeping an eye on this!

[Rinima]

Update! ???'s sprite has been finished. She has 5 expressions.


Also, about 2,500 words in.

[Rinima]

Mock up without any text.

[Rinima]

And the main menu.

[Rinima]

The main menu OST. Please check it out

And please tell us what you think.

Also, this can be subject to change, but this is the basic structure of the track.

[Rinima]

YES! THIS IS STILL BEING WORKED ON >:D
Also, Eula's sprite is done.

[Ran08]

1. How does the story sound? Are ghosts {too} over used?
- No, never for me. Hahaha. I can't get enough of them!
As a matter of fact, my own visual novel has them... hahaha.

2. What do you think of the character designs? What sort of personality do you get from them?
- Ahh, I like the art, especially the pastel colors. They give the characters soft-looking personalities. Hahaha. Eula looks so demure and innocent, mostly because of the colors used. Meanwhile, the other girl looks so pure.

3. Is 10,000 words enough do you think for 2/3 hours of gameplay?
- Sure! Haha. 10k is kinda short for me though, especially if I like the story! Buuuut, it's alright for a short VN.
Wait, do you mean 2/3 of an hour, or 2 to 3 hours? Haha.

Anyway, good luck with this!