Murder Express [Suspense][KN][NaNoRenO 2015]

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#16 Post by StellarOrb » Mon Mar 09, 2015 1:18 am

Yay! The artwork is totally coming along. Amazing job, .usa! The writing is really fun, too. I can't wait to show it off!
Fox Lee wrote:Gosh, those are some super-cute characters :3 I like Elise especially. I mean she's so tiny, but she really looks like she'd roll you if you pissed her off! XD
Yeah, she'd totally roll you... off a cliff and into a spike pit. xD
I really like the art, and the plot sounds cool! I'm looking forward to playing a suspense VN (my first time probably). :D
Ah, now I really have to deliver! There's a lot of light-hearted moments, but I'll try my best to bring as much suspense as I can when the time comes. I'll do my best. òwó
If you'll be needing auditions for the voices I'm interested in the Male character! :)
Email me if interested! :)
You're demo's definitely impressive. I'll email you soon ~
Minori is so cute! I'm not surprised Elise volonteers to protect her :lol:
And a cursed train? Mysterious murder? Handsome stranger? That's my jam! I'm really excited about this project!
It's totally my jam, too! xD I hope my writing can live up to everyone's expectations- you're all so supporting!
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#17 Post by pickle131 » Mon Mar 09, 2015 1:30 pm

Oh gosh, I love Minori's design!!
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#18 Post by Nekobako » Mon Mar 09, 2015 4:42 pm

Ahh, Minori's so cute! I really like the art style you're using.

And you had me as soon as you said suspense :) Can't wait to see how it turns out. Good luck!

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#19 Post by StellarOrb » Mon Mar 09, 2015 7:55 pm

pickle131 wrote:Oh gosh, I love Minori's design!!
benzodiazepine wrote:Elise is a cutie. Looking forward to this.
Gabylc wrote:Minori is so cute! I'm not surprised Elise volonteers to protect her :lol:
Fox Lee wrote:I like Elise especially. I mean she's so tiny, but she really looks like she'd roll you if you pissed her off! XD
KittyKatStar wrote:Minori's hair is super cute >o< I love how you did the art.
Nekobako wrote:Ahh, Minori's so cute! I really like the art style you're using.
Hm, it seems so far, people are split between liking Minori and Elise...

There's only one way to settle this.

STRAW POLL!!!!!

Who is cuter, Minori or Elise?
CAST YOUR VOTE!

The writing is coming along smoothly. We're having a few internal issues, but I promise I'm going to do my best to make it in time for NaNoRenO, and make the VN as great as possible. Stay tuned.
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#20 Post by Nekobako » Mon Mar 09, 2015 8:22 pm

StellarOrb wrote: Hm, it seems so far, people are split between liking Minori and Elise...

There's only one way to settle this.

STRAW POLL!!!!!

Who is cuter, Minori or Elise?
CAST YOUR VOTE!
Um, your link doesn't quite work properly :( It goes straight to the results. It can be fixed by removing the /r at the end of the URL, though! Just thought I'd let you know.

I put my vote in :>

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#21 Post by StellarOrb » Tue Mar 10, 2015 12:44 am

Nekobako wrote: Um, your link doesn't quite work properly :( It goes straight to the results. It can be fixed by removing the /r at the end of the URL, though! Just thought I'd let you know.

I put my vote in :>
Fixed! Thank you for letting me know.
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#22 Post by StellarOrb » Wed Mar 11, 2015 7:18 am

Poor Owain... nobody thinks he's the cutest.

Wow, 71% in Elise's favor! I didn't expect that at all- Minori seemed to be getting much more attention.

Allow me to be honest and transparent- the writing and art is going well, but Murder Express might not happen. There's been some tension within the team that I'm trying to fix, but if my words fail me, the project can't continue. I really do hope we can make this visual novel happen, but I can't promise you anything, okay?

Regardless, thank you all for the support and positive reactions.

Edit: It seems Murder Express IS going to happen. We don't die.
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#23 Post by ReSuraz » Wed Mar 11, 2015 7:41 pm

I like Elise's desing. Good job.

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#24 Post by .usa » Fri Mar 13, 2015 3:00 pm

Aaaaaand Elise sprite is done, only Owain's left.
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I think she needs more expressions, but that will come after I finish Owain.

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#25 Post by StellarOrb » Sun Mar 15, 2015 4:27 am

.usa wrote:Aaaaaand Elise sprite is done, only Owain's left.
Nice work.

As for me, the writing + initial programming is about 50% done. We stalled a bit earlier on, so we're only slightly behind schedule. It's definitely nothing we can't make up for. Although, I might outsource a few scenes to my brother (also a talented writer) just to finish faster and give some extra time to straighten things out. I'm also sick, but I'll be fine... ;~;

In other news, Owain received his first vote! He's on his way to world domination. xD

Anyway, I realize I haven't given anything to show for my work thus far. So, in the interest of keeping you guys updated, here's a small writing sample!
Should be obvious, but E= Elise and M=Minori

BLACK SCREEN

(centered ) Elise... thank you for coming.

E “Oh, Minori... No need to thank me, really.”

(centered) But I have to.

E “It’s not like I’m really doing anything for you-“

(centered) But you are... You’re protecting me from the train’s curse.

E “Minori... come on, now.”

I somehow manage a soft giggle.

FADE IN: EXT. TRAIN STATION

It almost feels surreal, now that I’m thinking about it... An empty wind swirls around us, fluttering Minori’s skirt and tossing my hood into the air. The faint grumble of a train’s departure on the opposite platform echoes throughout the station.

E “You know, Minori, it’s been a long time since I’ve been to the city... Really, I’m a bit excited- is that messed up?”

M “N-no, of course not, Lettuce-chan. I asked you to come, so the least you could get in return is some fun-“

E “But it won’t be fun for you.”

M “...Says who?”

Half a chuckle escapes from her lips, fractured further by her trembling voice.

M “I’ll try my best, okay? …Lettuce-chan?”



That's it for now. Tell me what you think!!!
Minori thinks that Elise's hair looks like a head of lettuce, while Owain insists that it looks like a tomato.
Perhaps that debate will be settled once we release the visual novel this month and you hear their arguments. Straw poll, anyone? xD
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#26 Post by StellarOrb » Mon Mar 23, 2015 12:22 am

Remember, always...
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#27 Post by StellarOrb » Mon Mar 23, 2015 1:08 am

Thank you for all the positive responses and support.



By the way, Elise wins the poll for cutest character with 50% of the vote (6 votes)!
Minori and Owain split the remaining votes with 42% for Minori (5 votes) and 8% to Owain (1 vote).

If we learned anything from this, Elise and Minori are amazing and Owain is an ultra buster. LMAO


...Although, it's still not too late to vote.
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#28 Post by yuucie » Mon Mar 23, 2015 6:14 am

Oh no!! It's unfortunate that it won't be completed this year, it was one of the games I was looking forward to. :( Still, things happen and they're out of our control, so please don't blame yourself. At the very least, you still took part in something creative and crazy (anything nano-related has a spark of crazy behind it) and learned new things!

my vote is with minori.

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#29 Post by Facelord » Wed Jun 10, 2015 11:06 pm

My vote went toward Owain, and whaddayaknow? He has 4 votes vs Minori's 5. I'm pretty sure if you guys had listed Owain in the title of the poll, he would've won~

>w>

Sucks that this won't release, but it looks like the script could've used some work. That "Lettuce-chan" thing was a bit much, same with the "I'll protect you" stuff. Sounded like fan-fiction content. Still, you probably had some good ideas. Hopefully you can put them to use in the future. I don't know why the team broke up, but I'm surprised it only lasted a few weeks.

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