An Afternoon in Carlsburg [Fantasy][NaNoRenO 2016]

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An Afternoon in Carlsburg [Fantasy][NaNoRenO 2016]

#1 Post by Carrogath » Tue Mar 01, 2016 10:13 pm

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An Afternoon in Carlsburg is a fantasy visual novel and prequel to Basiliska that I am developing for NaNoRenO 2016. It will be a kinetic novel (as far as I'm planning, anyway), which means there will be no choices. Scratch that it's going to have choices. The plot will remain linear, though.

For those who are already familiar with Basiliska, this story jumps back about two and a half years in the past and across an ocean to mainland Sisrhein, where Duchess Anneliese Reinhardt is contemplating war between Sisrhein, the colonies, and Sisrhein's political rival Pirineus. Forced into a corner by opposing factions of the Sisrhenish Diet, she seeks advice from a famous sorceress and apothecary named Antonia Lerchenfeld. Antonia happens to be her ex-lover Iris's old mentor—but perhaps this tenuous connection is just what she needs to resolve the crisis at hand.

For newcomers to Basiliska, here's what to expect:
  • Magic!
  • Politics!
  • Social manipulation!
  • Tragic lesbian romance (???)
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Anneliese Reinhardt is the protagonist of sorts, a Pirinean-born noble who was married to Duke Reinhardt of Sisrhein during the peace negotiations of a previous war. She is clever, calculating, politically invulnerable, and carries the fate of some of the most powerful countries in the world on her delicate shoulders. Lately, however, it seems that things haven't been going so well for her.
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Antonia Lerchenfeld is the matriarch of a sorcerer family from Sisrhein that traces its roots back to the country of Westeria. She is Iris's old mentor and a famous apothecary who has devoted her life to the study of magic and medicine. Similarly to her old student, she tends to be evasive, intimidating, and a little mean-spirited at times—but unlike Iris she is remarkably warmhearted so long as you ignore the fact that she's probably mocking you to your face.
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Progress

So far there's an outline, some concept sketches, and... that's it. :'D I'm aiming for a demo by March 31st. The demo will not reflect the final product; it's going to feature a lot of my lousy rough sketches, heavy use of ATL and decent writing underneath all of that hopefully. More details to come as I figure everything out.

Good luck to everyone this year!

3/2/2016: I've started writing the script! Here's a sample:

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    t "There's no need to flatter me. I know why you're here."
    #Anneliese's smile fades. She looks more alert.
    n "Do you?"
    t "Why else? Because of Iris. You're perfectly healthy; you have no ties to any of the major sorcerer families; and you cared not one whit for the troubles of magical people until you met her… or so I've been led to believe."
    n "She's six months gone."
    t "And you have a great big mess to clean up in her wake, don't you?"
    n "How much do you know?"
    t "Only what I've been able to glean from hearsay and the news. Iris was cursed, and then thrown into prison, and then after her sentence ended, she left for Algonia, and all of that due to your influence."
    #Anneliese looks away, distant.
    n "Is that what they've been saying?"
    t "You would be the first to know, I would think."
    n "Do you believe them?"
    t "Does it matter what I believe?"
    n "Hm."
    #Anneliese smiles, tight.
    n "You sound just like her."
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#2 Post by KittyKatStar » Tue Mar 01, 2016 10:15 pm

AH AH AH, I've been waiting for this ;v; I love your games, and been looking forward to the Basiliska prequel. Best of luck!
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#3 Post by clua » Wed Mar 02, 2016 12:06 am

Oh yeah, Basiliska again! I can't wait, good luck Carrogath :D!
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#4 Post by Ghost of Crux » Wed Mar 02, 2016 12:15 am

I read and fell in love with Basiliska. So beautiful and so gripping. Can't wait to finally get a prequel!
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#5 Post by Kumiho » Wed Mar 02, 2016 12:41 am

Oh my gosh YESSSSS! Basiliska was amazing omg ;u; as was Green Eyed Monster <333 I'm so excited to read about Anneliese & co., esp if we get cameos from Cecily...? I seriously love your writing,,, and I legit can't get over how excited I am to finally read the VN 8'D

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#6 Post by Weenily » Wed Mar 02, 2016 1:40 am

I really love your writing and Basiliska, the demo for this is definitely going to be fun to go through! Those concepts have such nice designs. Bring on the magic, social manipulation, and tragic lesbians!
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#7 Post by Carrogath » Wed Mar 02, 2016 11:07 pm

Thanks for all the well wishes you guys! ;_; I updated the first post with a little snippet of script and also I'm adding choices because it makes the story a lot more interesting to read.

@KittyKatStar: Thank you! Caramel Mokaccino looks like it's going to be really cute; I'm excited for the demo. :D

@Clua: OH YEAH! Your NaNo looks amazing as usual.

@Ghost of Crux: Aw, thank you. I think you're going to like this; it's gonna explain a lot haha.

@Kumiho: I'm... hoping to stick a few shots of Cecily in there somehow, to be honest. I'll manage it, I think???

@Weenily: Absolutely yes bring it on. I'm planning for some cool transitions and stuff in the demo which is why I don't expect to finish the whole game in a month; a lot of the stuff I'm attempting this year is very new to me... :D... Wish me luck!
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#8 Post by Weenily » Wed Mar 02, 2016 11:48 pm

The script sample has got me wanting more already! Gotta be patient though. Ooh cool transitions and heavy ATL sound like a very magical visual experience! Good luck trying all the new things!! It sounds like both a lot of fun and trial and error hahA.
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#9 Post by Feral Phoenix » Thu Mar 03, 2016 12:46 pm

yoooooooooooo my body is So Ready for this (and my offer still stands, if you have trouble finding folks!)
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#10 Post by Kumiho » Thu Mar 03, 2016 11:24 pm

oiasjdfl;aj oh lord that script demo ;u; I didn't think I could be more hyped for this but I ammmmm <3 And yesss, I hope you do manage to include Cecily! 8')

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#11 Post by MimirollCookie » Fri Mar 04, 2016 10:07 am

OMG. The concept looks cute! Good luck with NaNo!

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#12 Post by Carrogath » Sat Mar 19, 2016 10:28 am

haha I came down with some kind of weird infection so I am not even close to being finished... I'm probably gonna be pretty late for NaNo...

have an image courtesy of Cam, my composer/BG artist
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also have more script 'cause I rewrote it like three times in the past three weeks

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    l "So… What did she write?"
    t "I don't know. I don't read other people's letters, Anneliese."
    l "I don't know if I should…"
    l "My God, it's been so long. I don't know if I'll be able to handle this."
    t "Some wine, perhaps?"
    l "Oh, no, I couldn't."
    t "No need to be shy, dear. Sometimes we need it."
    #WINE BREAK
    l "That's enough. If I drink too much, then I'm going to embarrass myself around you."
    t "At least you won't be embarrassing yourself around anyone else."
    l "That is true."
    l "But it's been six months. I don't know if I can do this."
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#13 Post by Laniessa » Fri Mar 25, 2016 5:38 am

Magic!
Politics!
Social manipulation!
Tragic lesbian romance (???)
Sounds good! I loved your writing in GEM a lot, so I'll be looking forward to this! I'll be playing Basiliska in the meantime, ahah ;;

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#14 Post by Carrogath » Sun Mar 27, 2016 5:05 pm

Laniessa wrote:
Magic!
Politics!
Social manipulation!
Tragic lesbian romance (???)
Sounds good! I loved your writing in GEM a lot, so I'll be looking forward to this! I'll be playing Basiliska in the meantime, ahah ;;
Please do! Basiliska is a different beast--way more politics and the setting is much different--but it's definitely entertaining in its own right.

Also for anyone who hasn't read it, I would strongly suggest reading this short scene I posted on my Tumblr a few days ago. It'll provide a little extra context for what's going on in the story. also it's pr gay
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