(omg i'm glad you liked it haha i will do some proper fanart soon b/c that was a lil scribble)
I finished a playthrough, and I'm very intrigued. I love games that just kind of... drop you into the character's lives and force you to put together what's what! I'm going to do another playthrough soon to check out other options and I feel like I'll understand everything a lot better the second go around, which is a cool feature. (Not that I was ever like, really confused, but still.) There are a lot of little grammar mistakes, but w/e it's nano you're sick and haven't had time to prune and edit. There were a lot of other places where I was like "DAMN what a good line" so there's definitely some great stuff to polish.
I also really like dancing scenes and the cutaway images. It makes playing the game feel active and visually interesting, so aces on that, I like the effect and can't wait to see it when all the assets are finished.
(oh my god, allie, shauna, and lesath are cute and precious and pure when they interact.)
ANYWAY, tl;dr I LIKED IT A LOT, ALL THE CHARACTERS ARE FUN, ANN IS A BIG OL JERK AND I SHIP THE TWO DUMB IDIOTS.
AHHH thank you for such detailed comment! I'm working on revising the dialogue so that it's not too confusing (at least on the basics), but since the one who has full access to everything is, well, the owner of the characters and knows all the plot twist, his input in this case is very much unrepresentative of the average reader LOL I intended to run the script through people who knows no
ERJKLH okay but I'm laughing because little grammatical mistakes, yes... my specialty. I'll send it through some folks for the revised demo, though! My English education is pretty much throw things at a wall so grammar is not my... :'D Thank you for drawing attention to it, though! I really need to get cracking on hunting them down.
YAYAY I'm glad! Honestly I've been trying to. Cut down 'descriptives' on moments like those-- I wanted the text to less describe his movements and more to describe his reasoning and general thoughts; things that are like punches and goes straight to the point. (It's kind of why the dance parts are generally expository and like lasts 10 screens or sth) I'm glad the mini CGs are doing their part in looking pretty, at least!
(ALLY IS MOM TO THEM ALL,,,he will watch them grow like healthy plants)
LJKHEKJRTSRETS BRIAR-SENPAI,,,, FUWA FUWA
Zelan wrote:THE PROJECT IS DONE i kinda gave up near the end but w/e it's good enough
now both of us need to SLEEP in fact i hope you are already asleep and you read this in like 20 hours after you wake up
also i can't art like, at all, but i wanna hop on the fanart train over here so
GOOD ENOUGH IS GOOD
TOO BAD FOR YOU I HAD 4.5 HRS OF SLEEP,, thank you alarms adjusted according to rem cycles
JKRTHSLRJEHKTKJS okay but I'm
that's exactly how Em would draw if he draws Lesath at all
[4/3/2017 6:43:47 PM] Ksen: AEFGIAEGFLAUEGFAEFGAIFGEAFEAF T BH
[4/3/2017 6:43:48 PM] Ksen: em’s artistry is impeccable
[4/3/2017 6:44:29 PM] Ksen: ok but it’s good this is. good fanart i
pls give my thanks that’s actually how lesath is
this fanart is practically canon