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Wight [NaNo17] [Mystery] [Magic]

Posted: Wed Mar 15, 2017 3:41 am
by thecoins

by thecoins & rvrer
It's my first NaNo! I hope I can finish this.

Unfortunately, we didn't manage to finish this on time.
here is what we've done so far (PC): ... UhhRko3emc


I am obsessed with magical things.
I always think it’d be interesting to get involved with magical incidents in my life.
Lately, people in my neighborhood are missing with no trace.
Honestly i'm not that concerned about it at the start.
But then, it begin to feel quite strange.
Could it be that those people missing have something to do with magic or supernatural things?
That must be wonderful.

...or probably not.



A cheerful girl on the outside, cold person inside.
Obsessed with magical things.
Pretty good at fighting.

Despite of his age, he acts like edgy teenager.
Loves everything.
He looks like hiding a bad past.


We need feedback from you!
  1. What do you think about the synopsis?
  2. Any other comments?

Oh also, I'm sorry for any grammar mistakes. English is not my native languages :)

Re: Wight [NaNo17] [Mystery] [Magic]

Posted: Wed Mar 15, 2017 4:53 am
by indoneko
1. You could make the synopsis more interesting by actually mentioning what was the strange thing that made the MC curious. For example, one of the neighbor suddenly disappeared while the MC was talking on the phone with them...

2. Get a proofreader to check your grammar.

Btw, Weiss' Ahoge almost seems like an angel Halo. Was it intentional?

Re: Wight [NaNo17] [Mystery] [Magic]

Posted: Thu Mar 16, 2017 7:34 am
by thecoins
Thanks for your reply! I'll try to edit the synopsis.

Well, yes. It's intentional. Her ahoge is somewhat related with her abilities.

Re: Wight [NaNo17] [Mystery] [Magic]

Posted: Thu Mar 16, 2017 7:23 pm
by Katy133
The premise interests me. I like characters who are collectors of strange and magical objects.

I'm guessing that this is a mystery story with fantasy and friendship elements to it? Either way, I'll keep an eye on this project. :D

It's great seeing new people doing NaNoRenO! Go luck on your first Nano visual novel. :D

Re: Wight [NaNo17] [Mystery] [Magic]

Posted: Mon Apr 03, 2017 9:33 pm
by thecoins
Unfortunately we can't finish this on time.
We'll continue working on this though.