I Need Your Critiques (Update: I'm Using Your Critiques)

[Tag-]

My my, I admit that while this isn't the style I'm normally attracted to, Mark looks gorgeous~ *o*

The only thing I can really point out here is that the abdominal muscles look uneven in size (the ones on our right look a lot bigger than the ones on the left). Then again, I wouldn't know about how the male anatomy works when someone is slightly bent so ignore me if I happen to be incorrect ^^;
That, and the shading you have for the crotch area looks a little clumped.

Keep up the lovely, lovely work *v*~~

[LateWhiteRabbit]

Okay...I feel like I'm coming to the end of my journey.

This is Mark's sprite, which I redid from earlier tonight because he looked too damn old.

I'll probably work on this more, but this is pretty much his basic sprite. Eff me, you only end up seeing his head for the entire game (aside from the CGs. Anyways, if you got criticisms, let me know. I feel I'm getting a better grasp of anatomy from the youtube tutorials I've been doing, though I've still got issues of course.

mark new sprite10.png

You gave him too many abdominal muscles. People only have 8 abdominal muscles, including those that run down to the crotch.

[FatUnicornGames]

Mark looks hot as heck, though I do wonder if he would be that stacked irl. Does it matter? I don't know.

[Obscura]

@ Tag - thank you much! I'm having a tough time trying to make him appealing to both yaoi and bara fans...and I can't, so I'm basically just sticking to whatever looks good to me. So it's good to know somebody finds him attractive!

Tried to fix his crotch (I always have problems with that area)

@ Crystal and LWR and Tag - I can't count to single digit numbers apparently...I had too much going on there and I counted the folds in his belly as abs. I don't know if this is better.

I also adjusted his face (I constantly do this while I work on the game...there's never really a "final version" until the game is complete -_-. Please let me know if his face shape starts morphing in a way that kills your man/ladyboner....thanks guys!

[Obscura]

All right, so it's about a month since you fabulous people have been helping me with my artwork.

I am constantly seeing problems with anatomy and what not that I need to fix, but I feel like there's improvement because at least I actually see of the problems (whereas before I kept whistling merrily along until somebody pointed them out.) Yes, sometimes it takes me a while to see them though...

Here I'm not sure if Ian is in the same universe as the others. I have a tendency to elongate necks (my personal pref) and I think his arms are still too short. Whatever problems you see here, let me know. Thank you.

http://obscurasoft.tumblr.com/image/32620343242

(BTW, to save on the forum's bandwidth I'm trying to link the image file so it shows up on the thread (instead of uploading the file) but it keeps saying the dimensions of my image cannot be determined. Not sure what I can do to fix this.)

*edit: I fixed Ian's arms.

[Obscura]

OMG body hair, I don't understand you.

Let me know if you have any tips guys. I guess I'll just keep working on this until it looks right.

[FatUnicornGames]

I think the face stubble looks pretty good. The body hair is all...really straight? Body hair isn't usually that straight. It curves along the curves of the body and sometimes beyond. ;D

[Geckos]

OMG body hair, I don't understand you.

lolol! Love it.

The placement looks good. The only thing I can suggest for it looking too rough is to either try it with a brush set to pressure sensitivity (if you use a tablet?) or try turning down the opacity a bit, maybe to 90 or 80%

[Obscura]

Thanks Crystal and Geckos! I'll be getting to him later, but you guys will be the reason if Brad attracts some bear-fans.

[Hijiri]

OMG body hair, I don't understand you.

Let me know if you have any tips guys. I guess I'll just keep working on this until it looks right.

You just hit nearly every fetish of mine in one hit. </marvelsathisbody>

And yeah, the body hair looks a bit too straight. It's only like that when it's barely coming out. After that it curves and loops all over the place like some Eldritch abomination.

[Obscura]

You just hit nearly every fetish of mine in one hit. </marvelsathisbody>

\o/

Nearly every one, huh? What am I missing? I may add that in there if it's not a monumental challenge

And yeah, the body hair looks a bit too straight. It's only like that when it's barely coming out. After that it curves and loops all over the place like some Eldritch abomination.

This thing, huh? Oooookay will do.

[Hijiri]

You just hit nearly every fetish of mine in one hit. </marvelsathisbody>

\o/

Nearly every one, huh? What am I missing? I may add that in there if it's not a monumental challenge

And yeah, the body hair looks a bit too straight. It's only like that when it's barely coming out. After that it curves and loops all over the place like some Eldritch abomination.

This thing, huh? Oooookay will do.

a few gray hairs and glasses. In other words, a DILF
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And yep...pretty much.

[Obscura]

I'm hoping to finalize these sprites and export them today, make them look like they're from the same color palette and cartoon world.

Let me know your critiques. I don't know what happened, but my drawing process change somewhere mid between so now I have to go back and re-edit the first ones I did #($&#($*&($#&/. I'm also unsure about the quality of the newer ones.

Thanks, all.

[rasburn]

Let me just say this: Wow!

When I first played Coming out on top I thought the graphics were pretty good. Looking at your newest picture compared to the collage I must say the old style doesn't stand a chance against what you're capable of now. The lines, the shading, the colors... And it looks great in high resolution too.

Though it looks nearly perfect, I always try to find some criticism (but this is just nitpicking). Mark's upper lip looks maybe a bit too defined, but this is mostly visible in the high resolution. Also, they look more like bodybuilders and rockstars now compared to before Not really a problem though, but I guess Alex would be really popular with the students.

[Obscura]

When I first played Coming out on top I thought the graphics were pretty good.

Rasburn, you and me both. It wasn't until I was briefly on Steam Greenlight that I was kindly told otherwise.

Now I'm totally reluctant to make any kind of judgment on my art...other than, "somebody out there hates this."

But thanks for your kind words. You are right about Mark's mouth...the first thing my husband said is, "his mouth looks effed up."