chocojax wrote:crit001:
- Too angular shift in the sweater between chest to hips.
- Legs look awkwardly pressed against each other. Perhaps would look more natural to have them slightly spread apart. Or could be because the knees have a weird sort of perspective to them. (?)
- Because of the sweater+skirt, creates an illusion that the hips are directly where the legs hide underneath the skirt.
- Jawline too far out.
crit002:
- Shading looks muddy. Can fix by messing around with changing hues. Shift towards a blue hue, perhaps.
- Lighting is strange: seats of the chairs shouldn't have block of shading because of the light source(s)
crit003:
- Right eye/her left seems too small. (I think you fixed this in the colored ver, but not entirely sure.)
- Nose nostril placed strangely. From looking at the colored ver, it should probably be a little bit more to the left-ish.
- Neck looks compressed/squished.
- Clavicles also strangely placed compared to shoulder joints.
overall:
- I noticed that you like to have hair flowing in a general direction, but sometimes they're kinda off (?). For example, in tone study-2.psd, the clump of hair after the red ribbon twists in a lot of different directions, which feels weird to me. I usually just try to keep a general one-curve (???) thing, or something that feels natural in a single stroke.
Pls ask if I don't explain enough of a certain thing, I'm kinda tired right now LOL. Also, in the patch of grass one, I personally like the more saturated ver (but that's just 'cause I like super saturated things at the moment). Also painting with no lineart gets super fun after a while!!! ;;b
I'VE BEEN WAITING FOR SOMEONE TO CRITIQUE ME FOR YEARS THANK YOU. I had to actually scroll up various times to figure out which ones you're talking about lol.
For the jaw, there are actually almost straight jaws like
Angelina Jolie's. It all really depends on the person's jaw shape. Opted to give her that kind of jaw because I think they look really nice orz. I do agree about something wrong with them, but it's not really the perspective. It's how I drew them I guess. From this point of view, because if you look at the knees from above, their form a V when pressed together. I should have made it so her left knee or something should be hidden. Also, if you're actually referring to her left lower leg, I fixed that. As well as with the hips. Will probably upload the next few days, not sure yet. Was actually holding off until I finish the background.
For the second one (the background), the pillar is directly beside the light, hence no light on the chair. From this angle, it doesn't look like it but yeah. And not sure if you're talking about the background for the shading, but I actually haven't really put down any shading in this thing at all. It was me just labeling which is which and setting up lighting. Those aren't really the hues I was going to use, but thank you for pointing it out nonetheless
For the third, I actually did fix it in the colored version. Ah, never really noticed the nostril. Thanks! Yeah, the neck was annoying me. But I was actually trying to catch a deadline so I had to make do with the mistakes in the colored version. And oh, the clavicle! Never really noticed that, thanks again.
As for the hair, yes I do mostly because hair doesn't really have to follow one general direction. It looks less dynamic that way. Plus based on what I've observed from my hair, because it's naturally straight, it does blow in one direction but sometimes a few clumps of them would exaggerate more and stuff like that. What I actually didn't like about the hair is that one lone hair that cuts straight across her face from the back of her head. And for the hair after the ribbon, yeah, it does look somewhat weird.
And it's fine, you don't have to (though I did get lost at the beginning when you wrote crit001 and I'm like "WHICH ONE IS THAT" but figured you actually attached redlines). I'm just happy someone actually is willing to critique me (I even thought other artists here don't like me or something), so thanks! Haha, I'm the same, I really like saturated things (though not super saturated), but I liked how the second one is less saturated. I kept on playing with the contrast for that one, ugh. It was actually fun painting the patch of grass, but now that I'm beginning to move to other things aside from grass/skies... I feel kind of lost where to start with painting, and how I should go about it. So I've just been looking up some of my pixiv favorites and studying their works. I even decided to look up some background paintings on Youtube (if you ever want to look them up, search 背景メイキング), but I guess the only effective way I learn is through action.