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Hey~ I've edited this thread a bit since I have some other things I want to post. I've settled on a style and it will follow more of the cell-shading style for coloring because I have a personal goal to get this VN done by Winter Quarter. I'll leave things here and hope for feedback. Let me know if anything is too derp worthy. (Please look at the file comments for explanations of the pictures.)

About the characters:
Ellie- MC, a novelist who gets stranded on a deserted road and begins working at Hotel Geist to make ends meet.
Laurent- The owner of Hotel Geist, a second-generation French immigrant whose father helped build the hotel.
Will- The hotel grounds keeper and head of staff, kind of the wild type
Robby- A guest at the hotel, a graduate student attempting to write his forum spam
Marcus- Another guest, a medical protege who is taking a vacation after winning some prestigious award

Character designs sometimes depend a lot on what their personality is like, but, I'll try hard.

1st girl: The green shirt looks a little bit weird (I'm not very fashionable though). I would rather see it was a white-ish shirt, but just my own opinion. From her pose, she looks like the type of girl who's pretty curious about things/wants to solve things.
2nd guy: Seems kinda snooty, from his hair. Maybe the type of guy to rub his A+ grade in front of your face, loool. He looks pretty fine, although the side-belt looks strange (I mean, you can just hook the keys onto your belt straps).
3rd guy: Looks edgy. A plaid vest looks strange, but again, not fashionable, lool. It adds a kind of "mid-western" feel, especially with the scar on his face. From goatee, I'm assuming he's maybe 20s, 30s? His grey shirt is a little too grey for me, but I'd think a nice black would look neat. (I'm biased towards the colors black and white, though.)
4th guy: Looks like typical nerd guy with glasses+chubby. His shirt is really, really purple, which looks weird. Could be dulled down a bit, unless he's supposed to be unfashionable. :P
5th guy: The cool guy, from looking at his pose? If he's an albino, it might be better if you change his eye color, maybe. Makes me think of supernatural kind of guy, because of his current eye-color+skin color.

Hope this helps you in some way. :v

@chocojax

Thanks so much for the feedback. I think I'll clarify things a little bit. Perhaps I should write a little bit about the characters so people can use that to help them analyze the mock-sprites?

The girl (Ellie): Her shirt is supposed to be very frumpy and overly large save for the spots at the wrists/hips where elastic/a belt has tightened things.
You've gotten their personalities very well save for the last one, he was supposed to be more of the arrogant type. I am the least pleased with his color scheme and think I'll change things around for my next batch.
First Guy (Laurent): The belt- it was just an accessory I added to make him stand out. I thought the blue and grey looked very plain.

About the other fashion: The game takes place in the late 60s/very early 70s.

About the characters:
Ellie- MC, a novelist who gets stranded in on a deserted road and begins working at Hotel Geist to make ends meet.
Laurent- The owner of Hotel Geist, a second-generation French immigrant whose father helped build the hotel.
Will- The hotel grounds keeper and head of staff, kind of the wild type
Robby- A guest at the hotel, a graduate student attempting to write his forum spam
Marcus- Another guest, a medical protege who is taking a vacation after winning some prestigious award

I did a new picture of Ellie, still using hard edge shading, but more reflective of my personal style. I also used cocojax's suggestion for an 'lighter' shirt color. Because my backgrounds will be gray scale... I'm not sure how well this works out.

I'll try to write something more detailed later if I can, so lazy at the moment, haha.

Hmm, it looks good compared to the grey-scale background, in my opinion. It looks like a very light, desaturated blue, so it's not blending in (color wise). It's your call, of course.

By the way, you could've edited your post reply to mine, since it was only an hour gap. :P (I'm not sure what the rules on bumping your own art threads are, though.)

chocojax wrote:I'll try to write something more detailed later if I can, so lazy at the moment, haha.

Hmm, it looks good compared to the grey-scale background, in my opinion. It looks like a very light, desaturated blue, so it's not blending in (color wise). It's your call, of course.

By the way, you could've edited your post reply to mine, since it was only an hour gap. (I'm not sure what the rules on bumping your own art threads are, though.)

Oh, to be honest I can't remember all of the rules and I was unsure of how to reply without posting a new one. *figured that out now*

Sprite Comparison: this is for a secondary character for my game: Anne. The left is her character concept where she was a nurse. The right is her 'final' design. Do you guys like the new design better?

Well, I can't really say much, since it's mainly a change in her own job, right? I do like her new outfit, although the blue is too blue for my tastes (but I'm the type of person to like dull colors, so you can't trust that statement too much). I also like the new haircolor, since it's natural, etc. She looks a lot kinder in the older one, though.

@ chocojax

I changed her outfit and job to fit the setting better. Since, I have made the main setting of my VN the hotel, I didn't want to involve too many people that were outside the environment. As for the color, I was going to for a navy, business-style look, is it too dull?

First time drawing a dog/wolf/thing... Hell Hound. Any advice on body proportions and the paws? I left it as a sketch on purpose

I think it looks...cute. ; u ;;
If you're going for an aggressive animal, maybe making the ears pointy might help? And not make the tail twirl like that. Adding some wrinkles on his nose will make it look like it's growling if you'd like that. o u o

FrozenApple66 wrote:As for the color, I was going to for a navy, business-style look, is it too dull?

Uhh, I think it's fine, from looking at images on google. It'd be good to have someone else's opinion on it too.

FrozenApple66 wrote:First time drawing a dog/wolf/thing... Hell Hound. Any advice on body proportions and the paws? I left it as a sketch on purpose

I-I'm not very good at animals, but I hope this helps you somewhat. Uhh, make sure to look up references for anatomy and whatnot.

Also, I'm not sure what a hell hound normally looks like (and too lazy to look up right now), but:
- ears flopping down: makes me imagine tame/nice, whereas
- ears up: makes me associate with wolves/foxes/etc

Having very straightened out limbs adds exaggeration to the general gesture of the subject, and makes it more interesting (as long as it's not stiff) in my opinion.

Re-drew Old Smokey, yes, I've named her. And yes, she is related to Hotel Geist. On a side note... to chocojax, the thing at the mouth was supposed to be a long, demonic tongue and small bursts of fire. Many Hell Hound legends equate them to having some sort of dragon like properties such as a forked tongue and breathing fire. A lot of the pictures of hell hounds that I googled depicted the dogs with protrusions from their spines and horns. But, I didn't want to go that far.

Coloring style practice XD

Drew Ellie again~! I'm still struggling with blended shading so I decided to do block shading. It's a redo of the original character concept in an more anime-style. I like the brightness of the colors.