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PostPosted: Thu Jul 16, 2015 11:48 pm 
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Hi~ I'm a wandering artist and I need to draw.
In order to improve, I've been trying to draw everyday, well trying at least.
Just gonna drop everything I draw on the free time here~
Critique is appreciated because my anatomy is sucky and my perspective is lacking, yeah I need to draw.


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shokugeki no souma fanart
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Commission concept art sketches
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 17, 2015 4:32 am 
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Your art isn't too shabby. I think the main problem I'm seeing is that the linework looks really "sketchy". You should focus more on trying to do everything with single strokes, and that might also make things a bit less stiff since the lines wouldn't be as thick.

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 17, 2015 1:23 pm 
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SundownKid wrote:
Your art isn't too shabby. I think the main problem I'm seeing is that the linework looks really "sketchy". You should focus more on trying to do everything with single strokes, and that might also make things a bit less stiff since the lines wouldn't be as thick.


Thanks for the advice~
I'm a bit confused which piece you're talking about, but if you're talking about the last one, then I forgot to mention that those are sketches.
I work mostly by painting, so I start with a thick sketch and while I paint, I'll clean it up.
I've done clean lineart before, but my lineart is pretty stiff, that's why I try to make loose paintings.
But thanks for your comment~

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 17, 2015 1:24 pm 
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Aw shoot, I really like the way you used the colors for the painterly ones. :3c

shokugeki no souma fanart:
- Perspective on his right (our left) arm looks funky. Perhaps it should've been moved up a tad bi tmore, and a little bit more hidden by his chest.
- Shading on his face makes it appear strangely rounded (due to the straight-then-curve-at-the-end shadows). Would be better if it "followed" his face more, or had some more variety in shape. (I'm kinda wording this weird, so I can do a redraw if you'd like. '3')

Lok sprites (left):
- His body looks rather simple below the neck (in comparison to the right sprite), maybe try to exaggerate bumps and curves a bit more?
- His collar on the right extends too far out
- Low contrast between the bottom of his vest (?) and the shawl (?), also the disappearance of indent lines on the vest make it look like vest and shawl are merging

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 17, 2015 1:34 pm 
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chocojax wrote:
Aw shoot, I really like the way you used the colors for the painterly ones. :3c

shokugeki no souma fanart:
- Perspective on his right (our left) arm looks funky. Perhaps it should've been moved up a tad bi tmore, and a little bit more hidden by his chest.
- Shading on his face makes it appear strangely rounded (due to the straight-then-curve-at-the-end shadows). Would be better if it "followed" his face more, or had some more variety in shape. (I'm kinda wording this weird, so I can do a redraw if you'd like. '3')

Lok sprites (left):
- His body looks rather simple below the neck (in comparison to the right sprite), maybe try to exaggerate bumps and curves a bit more?
- His collar on the right extends too far out
- Low contrast between the bottom of his vest (?) and the shawl (?), also the disappearance of indent lines on the vest make it look like vest and shawl are merging


Thanks for the critique!
Yeah, I would love a redraw XD body in perspective is a new thing to me haha and face shading is confusing >3>
And yeah those Lok sprites are old, need to revamp them :3

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PostPosted: Fri Jul 17, 2015 2:21 pm 
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sorani wrote:
Thanks for the critique!
Yeah, I would love a redraw XD body in perspective is a new thing to me haha and face shading is confusing >3>
And yeah those Lok sprites are old, need to revamp them :3


No probs!
I'm still pretty bad at perspective myself, heee. But, I really hope this helps a little!

Here's a little on face shading. I tried to keep it simple, but I'm not too sure about the tongue shading.
Lines for shading before
Quick shade over, indent around nose, a little bit more on the side of the face since faces curve, and a little bit more clear on the nose?

And for the perspective thing:
Kinda like this? I drew the neck and shoulders to help with placement.
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 17, 2015 3:07 pm 
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chocojax wrote:
sorani wrote:
Thanks for the critique!
Yeah, I would love a redraw XD body in perspective is a new thing to me haha and face shading is confusing >3>
And yeah those Lok sprites are old, need to revamp them :3


No probs!
I'm still pretty bad at perspective myself, heee. But, I really hope this helps a little!

Here's a little on face shading. I tried to keep it simple, but I'm not too sure about the tongue shading.
Lines for shading before
Quick shade over, indent around nose, a little bit more on the side of the face since faces curve, and a little bit more clear on the nose?

And for the perspective thing:
Kinda like this? I drew the neck and shoulders to help with placement.
Without underlying image



Thanks for the help XD I appreciate it~
Here's my corrected img
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 17, 2015 3:13 pm 
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Thanks for the help XD I appreciate it~
Here's my corrected img
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Looks better! There's now a weird tangent between the arm/chest, though. link, #4

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Looks better! There's now a weird tangent between the arm/chest, though. link, #4


Tangents look hard to avoid ;; I guess I need to practice compositions thumbnails to avoid them orz
Anyways, I changed the composition a bit.
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 26, 2015 2:14 pm 
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My cuter style on girls in this new character design commission~
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Actually, I really like your art a lot. Even though it's sketchy, but it's a style. However, not gonna be able to used in every genre is also the fact. Popular style is popular. Unique style is just for them who understand :D

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PostPosted: Tue Jul 28, 2015 4:31 pm 
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 29, 2015 11:38 am 
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I just wanted to point out that in the left picture, it looks like the left sleeve's pink part isn't shaded (or not shaded the same way as the white part)? Otherwise, it's a really nice looking drawing, really loving the shading on it. (Especially the back!!)

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@chocojax Oops O.o I must've missed that part orz thanks for telling me ^^; and thanks for the compliment :D I was worried the shading on the back came out weird XD

Anyways, I'll be hosting a live stream in a few hrs demonstrating my coloring process, if anyone wants to join :D
I'll update this thread and twitter when the time comes~

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OMGGG I forgot to post my livestream OTL https://www.picarto.tv/live/channel.php?watch=Z04

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